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Its great, do contonue! don't keeep me waaaiting for my beloved lemony goodness with heart~

what i liked and didnt like?

well theres nothing at all wrong with your writing style. Detailed and all. But writing such scenes is difficult.....I hope you know how to end it! but however you do, i really wanna read it. It is going to tie in with the actual game right?

anyway

your devoted fan

~Nasu

This made me sad. Not that it was poorly written, or bad or anything! Just the theme, ya' know. It's still depressing. But you did well. These kind of scenes are incredibly hard to write! First time I tried, I ended up crying. You did very well.
~Myde~

Oi? Where's the rest? I went away for a month to Japan expecting some Phoenix/Edgeworth reconciliatory goodness when I returned! :D But really, Hope everything is okay, and that you haven't given up on it!

I just read what you've written so far this night (er, morning)... really, it's the first Pheonix Wright fanfiction I've read since playing the games, and I have to say, I absolutely *love* this story. You're a great writer, and you know how to economize your writing while still instilling emotion, setting, story... oh, and good smut. No useless purple prose (not to smack on purple writers or anything). Wonderful job. As for the most recent chapter, I didn't even find a typo in it. Poor Edgeworth... when Gant pulled out the knife I nearly had a heart attack. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter! I haven't read a fic this great in a while. Never one so dark and being able to get a laugh out of me at the same time, either.

Also, your scenes with Pheonix make me giggle and smile. Haha. <333 Great contrast. Really. I really love you right now.

Always,
Des

Oooh, harsh. The tension sure is building, I cannot wait for more ^.^

You feel you're out of your element; I feel you're doing an excellent job. I think your writing style is great, I love your character development, and the last chapter did gnaw at me like you said. Congratulations, and please continue!

OMG.It wasn't as scary as I thought it was going to be. Man, does Gant like to hear himself talk. Still, Gant's a huge dickface, so I can't like him for doing that to poor Worthy. Oh, Phoenix, save him with the hurt/comfort genre! ;~; Please continue. xD

Very well done! I just recently found this story and had to stay up that night until I got to the last chapter put up. XD The writing voice is carried throughout the piece, no matter which character is being spoken about (and they're so varied)! I'm also very wary of fics with some smut every chapter, but the balance was good, and the scenes still held significance to the story. Of course, I'm always grateful for attention to spelling and grammar. It's become a commodity on the internet these days.

A few comments for the last chapter: you seem nervous about it in your notes, but I say you're coming along swimmingly! Firstly, I'm a fan of hurt/comfort and if I had a dime for every fic that went towards rape or some form of non-con, but decide to turn tail and run at the last minute _in the scene_, well... you know the saying. Ass-ton of dimes. XD ("Oh wait, maybe I like this, yes I do! I love my raper!" I mean, there's going to be involuntary body pleasure, but come on. o__o;; ) I'm not dropping a big hint that this fic should go the full h/c route or anything at all like that -- I'd much rather see what you come up with -- but as a reader in this genre, it comes up. All in all, well played on all fronts. Please, please more updates~~ x3

Oh, and the Phoenix/Edgeworth video scene made me coo. :3

Endnote: Haha, I bet you can tell I don't write very many reviews. XD Take the possible awkwardness as a compliment!

I will always both fear and revere authors who can write things like this. Being taken from moments of saying "Ohhhh" out loud an grinning to moments of gut-twisting anxiety for Edgeworth is an experience I am truly enjoying. This is beautifully written and thought-out and I can't wait for more. I need more!

I guess I'm trying to say I admire and adore you while staring in shock and awe at this last chapter I've just read. I have to know how it ends. Please take me there.

PS- I have checked with my boyfriend. He says you can pee with a raging erection although it is uncomfortable and the stream goes wild. He wouldn't recommend it. Then again he's not in to that sort of thing and neither am I but he says it is possible.