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louise AND fiora. what more could a louise and fiora fan ask for? and it's from wotan nonetheless.

great louise chapter. sure you reused a few words/phrases more than you usually do, but hey, no big deal. also, i forgot to say this for the moments between chess board chapter, but i notice you use the word "violent" as an adverb at one point. now i know that to write a lemon for a game like FE, you WILL need to take some characters out of their ingame portrayal. but somehow i don't think violent fits priscilla. "passionate" or "wild" may have done better to keep w/ the mood of the entire lemon.

still hot. still fire emblem. it's all good.

and a question- italics are important, but how do i use them? when i copy paste from microsoft word to AFF text space submission, there's no italics. ctrl I doesn't seem to work either. help.

Yeah, I know I reuse a lot of phrases. When it comes to sex scenes, I have a very limited vocabulary and while I do try to mix things up as best I can, I do recycle stuff. A lot. It's another one of my many failings.

As for the use of the word 'violent', it referred to Priscilla's very first phallus-centric orgasm. While it may not have been the best word, I do prefer it over 'passionate', which lacks punch, and 'wild', which lacks focus.

Finally, italics. They're not very difficult. Just put the words you want to write between < i > and < /i > (delete the spaces) and the site will automatically translate it into italics. Like this. It's the same thing for bold, but with 'b' instead of 'i'.

about the words? true. i guess it was a better choice, given the context.....

as for italics.........damn. never knew that.

Wow, I didn't expect that kind of story depth...anytime I think of Louise getting it on with anyone other than Pent I imagine a secret affair or a quirky open marriage, but Pent's reasoning for leaving his wife was very interesting...most people make the male partner an abusive jerk, but you kept Pent very IC. Good job!

Ooh, Louise. Wasn't expecting her next.


Hrm. Query: When you get to Lyn and Florina, is it possible to include some LynXFlorina, even with the whole EveryoneXVaida thing? I suppose the question should go in the other story when the time comes, but... :p

Okay, this is probably my favorite FE Smutfic ever. Submissive Karla FTW.


Only one thing could make it better: Lute. But, she's from the wrong game. :/

Wow, that is some hot lesbian sex. In my mind, Vaida seems an unlikely choice for a main character, but she carries her role well in your writing. Your other characterization is very believable and interesting as well. And the action is indeed hot, even though I'm not very yuri-minded. Nice to see the futanari as well. Karla's exhibitionist moment was very sexy as well as her submissive nature. All in all, impressive writing and a pleasant read through and through. Also, how about introducing Rebecca or Serra, preferably in another futanari chapter?

This latest chapter was the best yet, and as usual extremily well written. You portrayed Karla's unique personality flawlessly. I hope you keep up the great work!

Brilliant. Karla the exhibitionist, who knew?

Update, goddammit! The story's good, so keep it going!