rate_review Reviews

Mmh, all in all not bad! The length is very nice, as is the plot, yet you should be more careful with the times and character points of view you use. Also, it might be a good idea to get a beta reader, if you're not that fluent or grammatically correct in the english language, that might help ^^ In any way, keep writing, this is going somewhere!
~Kitteh

This is definately looks interesting it will continue right? Please? I want to see what
happens! Sorry I guess I am kind of a fan of Roxas/Axel and want to see what is going to happen next.