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December 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lol awesome part with Kald asleep groping around and such made me giggle XD. Imo give Fronai Ashbringer LMAO naw jk but greens are poo poo though :(. Honestly where the hell is Fronai and Rajas some more ass whoooping is in order..and of course some smut here and there or some glimpse :P wishful thinking!
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December 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG KAL JUST SLIP HER THE PORK SWORD ALREADY!!! aRRRRdgggghhhhhh I'm dying here shads lol. You and wonderboy are masters at building sexual tension and then leaving your readers to scream at their laptops lol. Very good chapter, but I tells ya, I'm gonna slap Kalderin soon and tie him up so Shyla can just have her wicked way with him lol.
And nah, I've given up on being serious. It's just not a happening thing lol. I get too ripped off my head on food colouring to be serious :P
Nice, very very nice chapter. This story just keeps getting better!
And nah, I've given up on being serious. It's just not a happening thing lol. I get too ripped off my head on food colouring to be serious :P
Nice, very very nice chapter. This story just keeps getting better!
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December 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
K...so I saw you updated yeah? And I was like...you bugga! You didn't let me know! Then I read you no like my constructiveless crits and I'm like...so that's why you didn't let me know you'd updated!!!!
*bawls and napoleon dynamite runs to room*
Hehe, I jest. I got ya drift :P But let me know when you update? I don't have much time to check here anymore and I seriously love this story. Your writing gets better and better with every chapter. I know what you mean about constructive criticism. The things I've written that I'm most happy with have always been after someone has chewed the arse out of them - apart from the chapters that wonderboy has helped write that is. Everything that boy touches is gold lol. I do suck at at critical analysis though. I'm too busy emersing myself in what I read lol. I'm a sucker for a good story and I'm so grateful when I find one that I just lose myself in it hahahah
so yeah, nice chapter Shads. I'd really dig seeing a story with your rogue chick and nelf chickie on their own. A complete tale apart from this one. They have so much personality hey! Great work! :D
*bawls and napoleon dynamite runs to room*
Hehe, I jest. I got ya drift :P But let me know when you update? I don't have much time to check here anymore and I seriously love this story. Your writing gets better and better with every chapter. I know what you mean about constructive criticism. The things I've written that I'm most happy with have always been after someone has chewed the arse out of them - apart from the chapters that wonderboy has helped write that is. Everything that boy touches is gold lol. I do suck at at critical analysis though. I'm too busy emersing myself in what I read lol. I'm a sucker for a good story and I'm so grateful when I find one that I just lose myself in it hahahah
so yeah, nice chapter Shads. I'd really dig seeing a story with your rogue chick and nelf chickie on their own. A complete tale apart from this one. They have so much personality hey! Great work! :D
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November 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
HOLY SHIT SHADS!!! Seriously, that is the BEST chapter I have read in ages! I never usually like f/f, not enough man meat in it for my tastes but THAT was brilliant! And definitely the best f/f I have ever read. That would have to be one of my favourite chapters so far and I LOVE Selen and Rohun! I love how Selen was almost clinical in the beginning about being bonked by her captors. And I love Rohun's personality, just a take-no-shit chick! You nailed the human rogue and the Night elf druid perfectly. Definitely one of my favourite chapters in this story! And you've been banging (scuse the pun) away at the keyboard for two years? What a blow out! That's pretty cool, though, and this is like a two year documentary of how your writing style has changed or expanded etc. I mean, if you read the first chapter of this story and then the last chapter, no way would you be able to guess that Selen and Rohun is where it would get to.
Just brilliant Shads! Best f/f I've ever read, classy, hot. Must take a guy to write f/f well because you might appreciate the fem form more than girls do hahahaha. Very good.
One more thing to say.
MORES!!!
Just brilliant Shads! Best f/f I've ever read, classy, hot. Must take a guy to write f/f well because you might appreciate the fem form more than girls do hahahaha. Very good.
One more thing to say.
MORES!!!
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September 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey shads, hope everything is good for you in your part of the world, mmmm...after Ike chucked a mickey. Anyway, thinking of you, over here.
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August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow shads, you and hordie are on a roll, popping out these brilliant chapters...i feel like...well, a blood elf in a gelati shop :P There are soooo many good lines in this chapter, 'the shell of fatigue' and 'the water lulling him into complacency' you are starting to craft stories the way wonder boy does. Just magic.
And yeah I knew Kalderin was an assassin, but I didn't realise he was a "Stormwind" assassin, which is good, the story is unfolding before me lil eyes. I love this! Too good.
And yeah I knew Kalderin was an assassin, but I didn't realise he was a "Stormwind" assassin, which is good, the story is unfolding before me lil eyes. I love this! Too good.
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August 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
lol I had an image of cartman in my mind for some reason when kalderin shouted that Staghorn chews demon's woo hoos! This chapter was brilliant shads, seriously, it's like an erruption of action tying the lead up chapters together. I loved it. And things are warming up for Shayla eh? I love how stubborn she is lol. The pirates made it definitely...me other favourite part? Kalderin is an ex Stormwind assassin? How CAF is that! He could be in all sorts of trouble. Can't wait to read more...ya rock :D
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July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
whoo hoo!! Go the Stormwind assassins! How cool is that whole thing?? I love them almost as much as I love the Argent Dawn. Nice works Shads, Ba'ith is 'one of them' too baha!
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July 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
lol! I love the last two chapters...cept he really made her pissed off this time, huh? Damned boy >.< I wonder if the forsaken and the troll will start a fight with him? oh well. we shall see! update soon! =)
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July 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Baha! Yeah it definitely did work! I mean, your stuff is as good as always but I'm loving the fast updates! I'm glad I checked! but you know Shads, I have to say this before I forget the point I was going to make...
You know the little things you put in like Kalderin 'clipped' infront of Shyla on the docks and also in the previous chapter where you said she slumped against the door? Freaking brilliant! Deadset. I could actually 'see' both of those actions, like there are way more than that, but those are the two that really stick out in my mind. I've never ever read a story before where the author can bring a scene to life as easily as your ...let me find a way to say this... as your...mmm...one line, ORIGINAL 'action descriptions do'. Seriously, they are bloody magic...they paint an entire picture of not just action, but emotion. I mean, I HATE it when someone cuts infront of me like that, seriously, it pisses me right off and makes me so angry that I can't even flip out at them,which is good because it's usually because a) they are pissed the way Kalderin is or b) they have just seen something really good in a shop window and are making a bee line for it...and anyone who likes shopping is worth making a few allowances for as far as I'm concerned...actually there is a c) too, I usually get 'clipped' infront of when my bigger more aggressive half is trying to shepard me out of a clothes shop... But either way, people usually only do it because they are so pre-occupied with something else and you got all that MEANING in one tiny little phrase. Bloody magic. I mean, this entire story is good but sometimes you absolutely blow me away with understated moments of greatness like that. You are the only person I have ever seen who can make a short phrase say more than a page. Seriously, I love it.
And...I'd never leave yas Shads, I have way too much fun spamming you guys review lists hehe :D
You know the little things you put in like Kalderin 'clipped' infront of Shyla on the docks and also in the previous chapter where you said she slumped against the door? Freaking brilliant! Deadset. I could actually 'see' both of those actions, like there are way more than that, but those are the two that really stick out in my mind. I've never ever read a story before where the author can bring a scene to life as easily as your ...let me find a way to say this... as your...mmm...one line, ORIGINAL 'action descriptions do'. Seriously, they are bloody magic...they paint an entire picture of not just action, but emotion. I mean, I HATE it when someone cuts infront of me like that, seriously, it pisses me right off and makes me so angry that I can't even flip out at them,which is good because it's usually because a) they are pissed the way Kalderin is or b) they have just seen something really good in a shop window and are making a bee line for it...and anyone who likes shopping is worth making a few allowances for as far as I'm concerned...actually there is a c) too, I usually get 'clipped' infront of when my bigger more aggressive half is trying to shepard me out of a clothes shop... But either way, people usually only do it because they are so pre-occupied with something else and you got all that MEANING in one tiny little phrase. Bloody magic. I mean, this entire story is good but sometimes you absolutely blow me away with understated moments of greatness like that. You are the only person I have ever seen who can make a short phrase say more than a page. Seriously, I love it.
And...I'd never leave yas Shads, I have way too much fun spamming you guys review lists hehe :D