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I think you should continue! Just so you know, people that don't have an account aren't able to review your story, which may be part of the reason why you got so little reviews before; I myself had to go through the hassle of registering just to review stories like these! You can turn off the option that blocks anonymous reviews in your profile though, so if you want more reviews, you should probably do that.

Also, chapter 7, "Backup", has its formatting all messed up - can you fix it? I'd love to read another Ike/Lethe chapter (it's my favorite pairing in this fic), but I can barely make out what's going on there, unfortunately.

Anyway, hope you continue soon, and just wanted to let you know that there's still fans of your story like me out there!

I just read through the second half of the chapters, having looked at the ealier ones yesterday. I think there's been a strong improvement. The first few chapters just struck me as utterly random and odd. As an example, the whole Ike-Titania deal just came out of nowhere and never got any explanation. People have already talked about the beginning, though, so I won't grind on about it. Not much use with focusing on the past, since I think you've really upped your writing and - to a higher degree - believabilty. I really liked the scene with Boyd and Titania. There was tension there, and I'd like to see where you could take it. As a picky note, I'm pretty sure you've underestimated her age. 35 by the time of PoR would be fair going by the game script. That's still hot as far as I'm concerned. Geez, that was picky - it's up to you. Anyhow, watch out for repeating nouns. Examples would be the log that Boyd sits on, and those revenants that Oscar whips around.

On lack of reviews: It sucks. I think most of us have experienced it at some point, which makes it strange that it still happens. I suppose this place is a bit too small to be self-sufficent.

Oh well, it don't matter and i see what you are saying.

Great chapter by the way and Lethe's sister is exactly how i imagined her. I can't remember correctly so ignore my mistake but...did Marcia make up her mind about being Ike's second mate?

update soon!

Great chapter!

I like the Lethe/Ike/Marcia one along with Boyd/Mist, the gangbang, and boyd and Titinia. For some reason it'd be cool if Ike got more mates, now that he has Lethe and Marcia. How about adding Titinia and Mai to his mates?

Pretty good and the rest of the review is said on my previous review.

sorry im late, exams are coming so i had to study alot. Anways nice chapter overall and i can't wait till those lemons, and i wonder who he ends up with. Can you add some ike/titinia because i like the pairing and want to see some of it? I love how there are already lots of triangles.

Hey can you submit the censored version into fanfiction.net? i have a lil cousin of 15 who might show interest of this.

UPDATE SOON!

Definitely one of the better ones that I have read. really good writing style, and you certainly have a good balance between humour and serious. Anxiously waiting for the next chapter. Keep up the good work!

Hmmm, i must say that the quality of your fic has improved in this chapter, i can't put my finger on it, but something has changed... and its for the better. This fic now has some TRULY good promise to it, so keep up this quality, and it will become something amazing. looking forward to that Ike/lethe lemon at long last, this is something i've been WAITING for... so please, update again soon.

Personally, i've never played Sacred Stones... so i can't say what i feel about the crossover, but one thing is certain: It made this all the more interesting.

Alright, again a good chapter with no immediate spelling errors, nicely done, thumbs up to you.

A Sacred stones crossover eh? Hmmm, this should up the ante on this fic nicely, hope to read what happens next soon, and i cannot wait for the Ike/Lethe lemon... finally, something i've longed to see is happening, finally... thank you.

Oh yes, i do hope you will not spell 'Greil' as 'Geril' again, i doubt you will make that mistake again, but i'm just making sure.

definitely improving.