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March 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Hi there, was enjoying this, please do finish this story :-)r
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October 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Sorry about missing the last chapter. I either must have completely forgotton the monster at the end of this chapter, or it's from one of the games I haven't played. Once more, I'm creeped out from just how well you've written the area. It seems so..... well, sometimes I don't 'feel' the discriptions of areas in stories, but here. I will have you know I have switched a flashlight on to shine underneth my bed and will be sleeping with the lights on because of you and the last two chapters. Excellent job.
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May 29, 2013 at 12:00 AM
It's nice to read this and remember Silent Hill 3, since it was the first Silent Hill game I ever played. I also like the fact that you are putting in a few new bits into the story, i hate exact retellings. I got a little confused on the whole history bit in the drive to Silent Hill; but I may have forgotten some of it myself, and I wasn't exactly a close follower of the lore. Nice to see Lisa again, always thought se got the short end of the stick in the series. I look forward to reading future chapters, and I regret not finding this story earlier.
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March 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ooohhh I want more please!
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September 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
It's been a while since I've reviewed on this site. For whatever reason, I just kept forgetting to check for updates. But I read your latest chapter, and I will say that I think it's the best written so far. I did like the dream sequence; it was both sensual and disgusting. I'm wondering how Heather and Alessa "met" though, and under what circumstances. I mean, if Alessa's good, then how was Heather made? I'm sure you'll provide a sound explanation, though :).
Overall, it was a nice, solid chapter with a little bit of everything. I wonder also, if Claudia and Alessa will become intimate...that would be interesting (hint hint). I'd like a little non-con to brighten my day.
Till I venture over here again,
~M
Overall, it was a nice, solid chapter with a little bit of everything. I wonder also, if Claudia and Alessa will become intimate...that would be interesting (hint hint). I'd like a little non-con to brighten my day.
Till I venture over here again,
~M
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July 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I.Am.Scared.Shitless.
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February 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, finished reading yesterday, but then became distracted by other crits and some forum arguing over the Dresden Files...but like you care, lol.
Anyway, I get the vibe that you would prefer if I just give emotional feedback, not technical feedback--so I'll skip the nitpicking. Let me know if you want some suggestions regarding things I did notice during the initial read-through.
I liked this chapter. It had a good emotional flow to it, and very dark. I can relate to Alessa's aversion to the spinning blade bastards from hell--since I HATED them in the game and cowered in the corner or ran hysterically whenever they appeared. I liked the addition of Valtiel in the worm fight, he added some menace and also mystery to the overall plot. Makes one wonder what he's doing there and what he plans for Alessa. I realize in SH3 his goals were to bring about God, but I just wonder if he has other plans...
Nice tension and staging the battle scene BTW, but I hope poor Alessa isn't barbecuing her face on the floor since she's unconscious. Gotta keep her pretty damn it.
Anyway, I get the vibe that you would prefer if I just give emotional feedback, not technical feedback--so I'll skip the nitpicking. Let me know if you want some suggestions regarding things I did notice during the initial read-through.
I liked this chapter. It had a good emotional flow to it, and very dark. I can relate to Alessa's aversion to the spinning blade bastards from hell--since I HATED them in the game and cowered in the corner or ran hysterically whenever they appeared. I liked the addition of Valtiel in the worm fight, he added some menace and also mystery to the overall plot. Makes one wonder what he's doing there and what he plans for Alessa. I realize in SH3 his goals were to bring about God, but I just wonder if he has other plans...
Nice tension and staging the battle scene BTW, but I hope poor Alessa isn't barbecuing her face on the floor since she's unconscious. Gotta keep her pretty damn it.
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February 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I have to admit I had a hard time getting into this story, the beginning didn't have anything that really pulled me in.
However, with each chapter I read, I started getting more and more engrossed in the story. Before I knew it, it was 4 am. I have absolutely fallen in love with this story. It's well written, creepy, and just...had me staring anxiously at the screen to find out what would happen next. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
However, with each chapter I read, I started getting more and more engrossed in the story. Before I knew it, it was 4 am. I have absolutely fallen in love with this story. It's well written, creepy, and just...had me staring anxiously at the screen to find out what would happen next. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
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January 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sorry it's taken me so long to get over here...I've been busy with various things...and FFXII has officially kidnapped my brain and basic motor functions. I still have your gift fic in the works, and it's slightly amusing that you've included some things here in this chapter that I'll touch upon myself...
I like the face PH is in here...and not only relevant to James only. I consider him a more...freelance creature...more of a guardian and symbol of SH in general. So it was nice to see him pop in. I'm wondering if Valtiel will show up at some point...that would be nice as well.
Some things I like about this chapter: One would be the walnut part...it was cute and actually made me laugh aloud. I like the moths part as well...it makes me think of my own story (Not SH but my original one.) where I use moths as a focal point. Fuzzy and strangely...creepy. And the fact that they're so silent...is again...creepy. I like the fact you employ the game mechanics..finding items and using them--however, some parts get a little heavy handed with this, making it seem more clinical than emotional. Try to find a balance between story and the nuisances of the next plot point. Try to omit some things that may drag the story down...and not detail every little item or key. Focus on Alessa, her thoughts and feelings...rather than what door she'll unlock next.
All in all, good chapter, and look forward to the next.
I like the face PH is in here...and not only relevant to James only. I consider him a more...freelance creature...more of a guardian and symbol of SH in general. So it was nice to see him pop in. I'm wondering if Valtiel will show up at some point...that would be nice as well.
Some things I like about this chapter: One would be the walnut part...it was cute and actually made me laugh aloud. I like the moths part as well...it makes me think of my own story (Not SH but my original one.) where I use moths as a focal point. Fuzzy and strangely...creepy. And the fact that they're so silent...is again...creepy. I like the fact you employ the game mechanics..finding items and using them--however, some parts get a little heavy handed with this, making it seem more clinical than emotional. Try to find a balance between story and the nuisances of the next plot point. Try to omit some things that may drag the story down...and not detail every little item or key. Focus on Alessa, her thoughts and feelings...rather than what door she'll unlock next.
All in all, good chapter, and look forward to the next.
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November 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thanks greatly for that very long explanation, pyramid.
as for the email, dont use an "i" there, it is an L in small letter. Just thought you should know because it is difficult for some people to see that.
As for the Walter fanbase versus Alessa fanbase, you are correct that many prefer to read about Walter, however, I find Alessa's character underappreciated and should warrant more attention.
as for the email, dont use an "i" there, it is an L in small letter. Just thought you should know because it is difficult for some people to see that.
As for the Walter fanbase versus Alessa fanbase, you are correct that many prefer to read about Walter, however, I find Alessa's character underappreciated and should warrant more attention.