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by Chaosdreamer

person wouldnt-u-like-2-no
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
woo!thank you for updating!i love this thing. u rox! w00t!
person w00t
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg!...a lever? why a lever? whats gonna happen?
person pumking
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i dont get it. they had him. he was right thre. whys he end uo back in the happy burger place?
person Zuka
schedule November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YAY! you updated i was getting worried that ou gave up. but i see you didnt and you even put james in dangour i'm soooooooooo proud. hope the next part goes smoothly for you and hope to see you updaate soon.^_^
person Anon
schedule November 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is a brilliant story, the premise is very original.

Just an error I have to point out in the first line of chapter four 'Upon waking, James decided that he would gladly except unconsciousness' you've used the wrong word it should be accept not except.
person Liliath
schedule November 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
zomg, I love this story to bits. cant wait til you update *sparkly eyes*
person SakuraSan101
schedule October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is really good. I hope you continue it soon!
person w00t
schedule October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
woohoo! go val! man i hate eddie. and not because hes the fat guy! but because hes sooooooo anoying!
person lol
schedule October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice job on valtiels form! i can so see that in my head. and its kinda sexy in the oh so evil creepy way.
person wouldnt-u-like-2-no
schedule October 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
oh wow! so hawt! and they havent even gotten to the good stuff yet! lol!