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OK, before I forget, you had a teeny error, about halfway down you've got "only surpassed only", just thought I'd let you know :D. Before I get to the review proper though, I'm sorry to hear you'be both been sick :o, that's really unfortunate, I mean people get sick now and then, but both of you, and so badly? I really hope you both recover ASAP :). OK, so the story. It felt a bit shorter than usual, although it's been a while so I might have forgotten. I find when reading these stories you kind of have to look past the fact that some of the participants in the sex are rotting monsters, it's, strange, cus it's revolting for me, if I focus on it, but if I look past it, it's fine. It kind of, encourages you to suspend belief, just something I thought worth noting. These thoughts aside, it was a bit quicker but otherwise just as good as previous chapters, nice grimy feel with hot, lusty sex, oh and hehe, I loved the ending, he didn't want none of that, so, stab 'em, haha XD.

Phew, I'm glad you stopped there, 6,000 words is plenty XD. Still, yaoi, hehe, should be interesting since I can't think of two males that like each other in this. Well, maybe one pairing, but we'll see XD.

The last chapter was a bit shorter and lighter than usual, but this made up for it plenty in length and detail. A special mention to "It was as if the shadows were hired to enclose their identities", I absolutely loved that line, that kind of, abstract, observant style is what I love about this story 8). The first half or so with the businessmen, or whatever they are, was well-written, and good :D, but for some reason, it made me snicker, kind of like well, Austin Powers. Oh and someone's been on Wikipedia ;), hehe. But that was good and Leon's part was both amusing and dark, from not wanting to fuck dogs, to the medallions, to suspecting statues, it was good ^^.

I got an account strictly to review the stories, but I'm feeling lazy and don't want to sign in. After putting in a solid 9 hours of work plus uni, I must say that coming home to read this was a bit of a treat, and drag. Sorry...it was just so long. The first half with the organization goons was amusing, while Leon's self love was a bit...well, it drug on. I found myself getting lost in all that description, wondering where the thesaurus ended and the story picked up. Not that that is bad mind you, but...was all that description really necessary? You don't need to flood the pages with detail. It's overkill.

Sorry if I nagged a bit. My mom is a pretty well known published writer and editor, so I get professional tips from her. I really did enjoy it though. Between this chapter and Crimson's latest with the Bellas, I can't wait to see what the two of you have now that you are well and ready to write once more.

Much love as always ladies.

~James

That was good and quite amusing to read, however, wow, the last parts were so detailed.
Was that on purpose? hehe. funny and overkill.

Thanks for the read chica.

That was so good! *Squeals* You both rule!

Can't wait for the next chapter :D I am all aquiver with anticipation ^^.

Wow you updated! We've missed reading all the funny but very arousing sex. This chapter was pretty good! CB I think you did a wonderful job giving the Bella Sisters a background. They probably were hot before they went crazy. There should have been more sex though. Bring back Ashley and the Clone of Ada. I like seeing the fem-dom! Ashley is my slut queen :P

Not enough good Bella smut. Leon should have been fucked by them too. Yaoi sucks.

Hey Eme! Cheri said you updated, so I came to read. Since this is so much different from your personal stuff, I think its a great change and fun to read. Not that your others are boring ^_^

Too bad there wasn't more yuri since the girls were sisters. Your coauthor is writing yaoi right? I hope you try to write some too! The more you write, the better you become. Keep it up ladies!

I liked it a lot, please post the next chapter soon

That was very good my friend, very good.
Keep writing because that was very entertaining and very detailed. I laughed and there was a huge smile on my face. ^__^