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October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn what a cliffhanger...
Once again you manage to write another amazing, creepy, disturbing and just damn good chapter. I'm really addicted to your stories. When I saw you updated earlier today I started reading and I was so deep in to the story that I totally forgot about the time and almost came to late for work.
Daniel and Henry finally met! Henry was nothing like I thought he would be. I just thoight he would be...older I think. Since I don't know anything abou Silent Hill, I really don't know anything about the characters. But it doesn't matter because i still love them!
And poor Daniel. Om my god, poor Daniel. I feel so sorry for him. How Walter keeps messing and manipulating him. I just love this story.
And you update it so often, that's just...so good. Thank you so much.
Once again you manage to write another amazing, creepy, disturbing and just damn good chapter. I'm really addicted to your stories. When I saw you updated earlier today I started reading and I was so deep in to the story that I totally forgot about the time and almost came to late for work.
Daniel and Henry finally met! Henry was nothing like I thought he would be. I just thoight he would be...older I think. Since I don't know anything abou Silent Hill, I really don't know anything about the characters. But it doesn't matter because i still love them!
And poor Daniel. Om my god, poor Daniel. I feel so sorry for him. How Walter keeps messing and manipulating him. I just love this story.
And you update it so often, that's just...so good. Thank you so much.
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October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
(damn, it cut off already o.o)
Okie dokie, my review! @_@ Where to start...
... er... so much to cover *heart*!
Poor Daniel. He REALLY went nuts in this one! From painting the walls (and I agree with Hellquin--I've felt that thing about his muse when reading this chapter), to f-ing up his apartment. And how he reacted to everything he did, or some other thing did, was very heartwrenching as well as creepy. *coughthedamndoll!cough*
Though dammmmmnn... I don't know whether to laugh or cry that he went with Walter. o.o Valtiel... Walter... Valtiel... ._. I'd just go w/Pyramid head. LOL!
His muse is just... whoa. It sounds like it's someone that's not a part of him, or at least he doesn't realize it or something. But then, considering that Alessa's apparently his sister... it explains a lot. X3
His dream was... very interesting. And when he had to go through it when he wasn't sleeping... I felt hella sorry for him. T_T Poor boy... *hugs him* I like how ya put a lotta symbolism, metaphors, and hints & forbidings to what's to come. :3 It really give the mind a kick!
The doll just... whoaaa... I kinda ended up liking it after it protected him, but... The little thing about it having been Walter the whole time made me go, "O_O Oh crap..." Wonderfully done X3 I like that little detail. Adds more to the doll thing like whoa. XD; Now I dunno whether to be scared or not--doll = Walter... o.o Scary... not scary (I've a little thing for the madman <3)...? Hehe.
Henry. ... *fangirl squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee of death* EEEEEEEEEE~! ... I'll stop now. ._. But but, you did SO well as him! I'm glad ya made him speak more than 3 syllables XD The convo with Daniel... Ohh man I can't say many things about it 'cause I keep rereading it XD I love it. Simple as that. I like how Henry was like, "Hey, I'm the one sulking here. Not you! :3 *pets Daniel*" when he comforted him. Awwww!! *heart* Daniel was sooo sweet too! Hehe! I love how the two interacted; it was very human, and interesting. The holy candles. Hehe. I can just imagine them popping outta the hole. XD Sorry, I found that cute and funny somehow. :3
I like how Daniel was comforted by Henry's presence--someone else other than the walls, Valtiel, & Walter to talk to. It seemed Henry liked the fact that someone else was there as well. Awesome :3
Heh heh, I realize that's the longest part of this review--Henry & Daniel. X3 I'll stop now.
Valtiel was awesomeeee! I found it amusing how he scared Daniel, but then this is comin' from someone who thinks Val's hot. ._.; I find it great that you captured him true to the game, and even added a little to him--like what he would do to Daniel (too bad it didn't happen *pervy* XD) and his/it's emotions towards Daniel. Heh heh, that made me squee.
:( When Daniel didn't realize that Melanie was outside... made me sad. -_-; It was a relief when he was sane again, and realized that Frank & Melanie (@_@ still hard to read, only 'cause I keep saying, "It's not me. XD; *sniff*") were trying to get to him.
@_@ Did I miss anything...? Oh yeah! The ending rocked my socks. I couldn't wait to see what he would do in the nightmare world--evil cliffy! :3 He'll meet Henry or something, yes? *heart* And since I beat the game a few days before reading this, I know what area he's in and what it looks like--when you write it though, you always make it seem... more. More freaky, more scary, more sensual, more etc. It's great! :3 So now I'm tryin' to make what I know from the game into something more. And I like how it's turnin' out--how I see it, that is. Wooo!
WOW this is getting long. o.o I hope I didn't miss anything... o_o If I did, I might gotta go back, but if not... I dunno. XD I think this is long enough (for now?)
Hehe... Anyway, hope ya like this review! *hugs* Good job on the chapter! Hope to see another soon :3
~the seph, FOYF
Okie dokie, my review! @_@ Where to start...
... er... so much to cover *heart*!
Poor Daniel. He REALLY went nuts in this one! From painting the walls (and I agree with Hellquin--I've felt that thing about his muse when reading this chapter), to f-ing up his apartment. And how he reacted to everything he did, or some other thing did, was very heartwrenching as well as creepy. *coughthedamndoll!cough*
Though dammmmmnn... I don't know whether to laugh or cry that he went with Walter. o.o Valtiel... Walter... Valtiel... ._. I'd just go w/Pyramid head. LOL!
His muse is just... whoa. It sounds like it's someone that's not a part of him, or at least he doesn't realize it or something. But then, considering that Alessa's apparently his sister... it explains a lot. X3
His dream was... very interesting. And when he had to go through it when he wasn't sleeping... I felt hella sorry for him. T_T Poor boy... *hugs him* I like how ya put a lotta symbolism, metaphors, and hints & forbidings to what's to come. :3 It really give the mind a kick!
The doll just... whoaaa... I kinda ended up liking it after it protected him, but... The little thing about it having been Walter the whole time made me go, "O_O Oh crap..." Wonderfully done X3 I like that little detail. Adds more to the doll thing like whoa. XD; Now I dunno whether to be scared or not--doll = Walter... o.o Scary... not scary (I've a little thing for the madman <3)...? Hehe.
Henry. ... *fangirl squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee of death* EEEEEEEEEE~! ... I'll stop now. ._. But but, you did SO well as him! I'm glad ya made him speak more than 3 syllables XD The convo with Daniel... Ohh man I can't say many things about it 'cause I keep rereading it XD I love it. Simple as that. I like how Henry was like, "Hey, I'm the one sulking here. Not you! :3 *pets Daniel*" when he comforted him. Awwww!! *heart* Daniel was sooo sweet too! Hehe! I love how the two interacted; it was very human, and interesting. The holy candles. Hehe. I can just imagine them popping outta the hole. XD Sorry, I found that cute and funny somehow. :3
I like how Daniel was comforted by Henry's presence--someone else other than the walls, Valtiel, & Walter to talk to. It seemed Henry liked the fact that someone else was there as well. Awesome :3
Heh heh, I realize that's the longest part of this review--Henry & Daniel. X3 I'll stop now.
Valtiel was awesomeeee! I found it amusing how he scared Daniel, but then this is comin' from someone who thinks Val's hot. ._.; I find it great that you captured him true to the game, and even added a little to him--like what he would do to Daniel (too bad it didn't happen *pervy* XD) and his/it's emotions towards Daniel. Heh heh, that made me squee.
:( When Daniel didn't realize that Melanie was outside... made me sad. -_-; It was a relief when he was sane again, and realized that Frank & Melanie (@_@ still hard to read, only 'cause I keep saying, "It's not me. XD; *sniff*") were trying to get to him.
@_@ Did I miss anything...? Oh yeah! The ending rocked my socks. I couldn't wait to see what he would do in the nightmare world--evil cliffy! :3 He'll meet Henry or something, yes? *heart* And since I beat the game a few days before reading this, I know what area he's in and what it looks like--when you write it though, you always make it seem... more. More freaky, more scary, more sensual, more etc. It's great! :3 So now I'm tryin' to make what I know from the game into something more. And I like how it's turnin' out--how I see it, that is. Wooo!
WOW this is getting long. o.o I hope I didn't miss anything... o_o If I did, I might gotta go back, but if not... I dunno. XD I think this is long enough (for now?)
Hehe... Anyway, hope ya like this review! *hugs* Good job on the chapter! Hope to see another soon :3
~the seph, FOYF
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October 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
(damn, again?! o.o;)
The doll just... whoaaa... I kinda ended up liking it after it protected him, but... The little thing about it having been Walter the whole time made me go, "O_O Oh crap..." Wonderfully done X3 I like that little detail. Adds more to the doll thing like whoa. XD; Now I dunno whether to be scared or not--doll = Walter... o.o Scary... not scary (I've a little thing for the madman *heart*)...? Hehe.
Henry. ... *fangirl squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee of death* EEEEEEEEEE~! ... I'll stop now. ._. But but, you did SO well as him! I'm glad ya made him speak more than 3 syllables XD The convo with Daniel... Ohh man I can't say many things about it 'cause I keep rereading it XD I love it. Simple as that. I like how Henry was like, "Hey, I'm the one sulking here. Not you! :3 *pets Daniel*" when he comforted him. Awwww!! *heart* Daniel was sooo sweet too! Hehe! I love how the two interacted; it was very human, and interesting. The holy candles. Hehe. I can just imagine them popping outta the hole. XD Sorry, I found that cute and funny somehow. :3
I like how Daniel was comforted by Henry's presence--someone else other than the walls, Valtiel, & Walter to talk to. It seemed Henry liked the fact that someone else was there as well. Awesome :3
Heh heh, I realize that's the longest part of this review--Henry & Daniel. X3 I'll stop now.
Valtiel was awesomeeee! I found it amusing how he scared Daniel, but then this is comin' from someone who thinks Val's hot. ._.; I find it great that you captured him true to the game, and even added a little to him--like what he would do to Daniel (too bad it didn't happen *pervy* XD) and his/it's emotions towards Daniel. Heh heh, that made me squee.
:( When Daniel didn't realize that Melanie was outside... made me sad. -_-; It was a relief when he was sane again, and realized that Frank & Melanie (@_@ still hard to read, only 'cause I keep saying, "It's not me. XD; *sniff*") were trying to get to him.
@_@ Did I miss anything...? Oh yeah! The ending rocked my socks. I couldn't wait to see what he would do in the nightmare world--evil cliffy! :3 He'll meet Henry or something, yes? *heart* And since I beat the game a few days before reading this, I know what area he's in and what it looks like--when you write it though, you always make it seem... more. More freaky, more scary, more sensual, more etc. It's great! :3 So now I'm tryin' to make what I know from the game into something more. And I like how it's turnin' out--how I see it, that is. Wooo!
WOW this is getting long. o.o I hope I didn't miss anything... o_o If I did, I might gotta go back, but if not... I dunno. XD I think this is long enough (for now?)
Hehe... Anyway, hope ya like this review! *hugs* Good job on the chapter! Hope to see another soon :3
~the seph, FOYF
The doll just... whoaaa... I kinda ended up liking it after it protected him, but... The little thing about it having been Walter the whole time made me go, "O_O Oh crap..." Wonderfully done X3 I like that little detail. Adds more to the doll thing like whoa. XD; Now I dunno whether to be scared or not--doll = Walter... o.o Scary... not scary (I've a little thing for the madman *heart*)...? Hehe.
Henry. ... *fangirl squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee of death* EEEEEEEEEE~! ... I'll stop now. ._. But but, you did SO well as him! I'm glad ya made him speak more than 3 syllables XD The convo with Daniel... Ohh man I can't say many things about it 'cause I keep rereading it XD I love it. Simple as that. I like how Henry was like, "Hey, I'm the one sulking here. Not you! :3 *pets Daniel*" when he comforted him. Awwww!! *heart* Daniel was sooo sweet too! Hehe! I love how the two interacted; it was very human, and interesting. The holy candles. Hehe. I can just imagine them popping outta the hole. XD Sorry, I found that cute and funny somehow. :3
I like how Daniel was comforted by Henry's presence--someone else other than the walls, Valtiel, & Walter to talk to. It seemed Henry liked the fact that someone else was there as well. Awesome :3
Heh heh, I realize that's the longest part of this review--Henry & Daniel. X3 I'll stop now.
Valtiel was awesomeeee! I found it amusing how he scared Daniel, but then this is comin' from someone who thinks Val's hot. ._.; I find it great that you captured him true to the game, and even added a little to him--like what he would do to Daniel (too bad it didn't happen *pervy* XD) and his/it's emotions towards Daniel. Heh heh, that made me squee.
:( When Daniel didn't realize that Melanie was outside... made me sad. -_-; It was a relief when he was sane again, and realized that Frank & Melanie (@_@ still hard to read, only 'cause I keep saying, "It's not me. XD; *sniff*") were trying to get to him.
@_@ Did I miss anything...? Oh yeah! The ending rocked my socks. I couldn't wait to see what he would do in the nightmare world--evil cliffy! :3 He'll meet Henry or something, yes? *heart* And since I beat the game a few days before reading this, I know what area he's in and what it looks like--when you write it though, you always make it seem... more. More freaky, more scary, more sensual, more etc. It's great! :3 So now I'm tryin' to make what I know from the game into something more. And I like how it's turnin' out--how I see it, that is. Wooo!
WOW this is getting long. o.o I hope I didn't miss anything... o_o If I did, I might gotta go back, but if not... I dunno. XD I think this is long enough (for now?)
Hehe... Anyway, hope ya like this review! *hugs* Good job on the chapter! Hope to see another soon :3
~the seph, FOYF
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October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Mind blowing chapter, once again~ alot of the haunting parts I shivered at, and I wasnt even cold..
(I thought Id give you a better review then regular "nice job!") -cut and pasted <3 I didnt know I could review here!-
I find myself being able to actually start thinking that doll is in the game, you know? Ill be sitting there thinking about SH4, then suddenly I go "wasnt there a doll in the game?..yeah that was creepy..and that thing in the mirror..." heh heh, love it.
And the fact that he has a 'suposive sister' what a twist! I have to admit, when she talked it kinda seemed...I dont know..like a college play, the way they say the dialog...I dont know, that may just be me, I think its because I dont really have a feel of how old this person is. Yeah, thats probably it.
And the masturbation entity part, TOTAL love, wonderful job!
I can kinda relate to the whole 'stuck in the room' thing, I never really leave my house because 1. I have no transportation, and 2. I have no where to go. So alot of the times I feel kinda crazy too. But I really started to wonder why he didnt just FORCE paint something..if its to save him and all..it kinda bothered me(not in a ZOMG WHY DIDNT YOU DO THAT!? way) it was just more of a "...wha..? why doesnt he just doodle walter hanging for inspiration or something" BUT-I was glad to see he was able to at the very very end....cliffhanger....garrr...
Loved it
(I thought Id give you a better review then regular "nice job!") -cut and pasted <3 I didnt know I could review here!-
I find myself being able to actually start thinking that doll is in the game, you know? Ill be sitting there thinking about SH4, then suddenly I go "wasnt there a doll in the game?..yeah that was creepy..and that thing in the mirror..." heh heh, love it.
And the fact that he has a 'suposive sister' what a twist! I have to admit, when she talked it kinda seemed...I dont know..like a college play, the way they say the dialog...I dont know, that may just be me, I think its because I dont really have a feel of how old this person is. Yeah, thats probably it.
And the masturbation entity part, TOTAL love, wonderful job!
I can kinda relate to the whole 'stuck in the room' thing, I never really leave my house because 1. I have no transportation, and 2. I have no where to go. So alot of the times I feel kinda crazy too. But I really started to wonder why he didnt just FORCE paint something..if its to save him and all..it kinda bothered me(not in a ZOMG WHY DIDNT YOU DO THAT!? way) it was just more of a "...wha..? why doesnt he just doodle walter hanging for inspiration or something" BUT-I was glad to see he was able to at the very very end....cliffhanger....garrr...
Loved it
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October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You have to update again soon! I love it and can't wait for the next part!
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This by far has become my favorite Fic, please please please don't quit, I really like your OC Daniel
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October 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Just spent the last several hours reading this, and quiet frankly-- I'm amazed. If it weren't for the little voice whispering in the back of my mind that sex is how Walter is punishing Henry I'd probably be gasping in shock. (Speaking of that, why the hell do I want to see a threesome with them and your OC? I should probably go to bed XD ) Well, more so than I am now in any case. Your ability to capture emotions like desparation and suspense are amazing; I usually skip over those when writing a fanfiction because it's not where my muse's insparation usually lies.
It's not often I see a fan fiction that can break free of the average fandom and really strike out as something that could exist within the universe of said game, and I will be keeping an eye out on this story and future works by you.
And to answer your question, I don't have a beta, but I tend to read through my stories before submiting them in hopes of catching any mistake. There's bound to be mistakes, but I try and correct as many as possible.
It's not often I see a fan fiction that can break free of the average fandom and really strike out as something that could exist within the universe of said game, and I will be keeping an eye out on this story and future works by you.
And to answer your question, I don't have a beta, but I tend to read through my stories before submiting them in hopes of catching any mistake. There's bound to be mistakes, but I try and correct as many as possible.
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October 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is to Ninael:
I don't like padding my reviews...but I wanted to answer you here.
I'm glad you decided to take a chance with it, and I hope you continue doing so for the long haul. I'm pretty sure this fic will be very long, as I'm not even in the "otherword" yet! (but expect that in the next three chapters...finally! Oh, and he won't be alone...muhahahah!)
Sorry for berating that person on your other tale, they made me angry with that little jab toward "penis descriptions. I don't ignore that part of the anatomy, but there are other ways to describe it besides all hard core. The style I'm writing in is formal...so my terms will be formal. I won't spit out the term COCK just for the hell of it. As long as an author describes proper terms for "penis" without repeating that term seventy times durning the fic--then authors should be able to use whatever word they want.
That scene where Daniel is having his little one on one was meant to be sensual, not porn. If I want a more raw scene, then I'll use more raw words. If I had used "cock" in that scene, it would have screwed up the flow, and focused the reader just on that part of the anatomy. I wanted the focus more on Daniel, and the fact he's being overwhelmed by some otherworldly influence. (Walter...yum)
Funny you should mention a threesome...it won't be a technical "menage a trois"...but they will be in a situation that is messy, graphic, and bloody--but still sensual in some form. Yeah, that will be fun to write...oh, and sex is "not" the ONLY thing Walter is punishing Henry with. It is, but hes also doing other things to Henry, most not very nice. I will touch more on that later, but its violent, and references the final sacrement that Eileen repeats to Daniel from that dream in chapter 5.
Thanks again for the review.
~Carrie
I don't like padding my reviews...but I wanted to answer you here.
I'm glad you decided to take a chance with it, and I hope you continue doing so for the long haul. I'm pretty sure this fic will be very long, as I'm not even in the "otherword" yet! (but expect that in the next three chapters...finally! Oh, and he won't be alone...muhahahah!)
Sorry for berating that person on your other tale, they made me angry with that little jab toward "penis descriptions. I don't ignore that part of the anatomy, but there are other ways to describe it besides all hard core. The style I'm writing in is formal...so my terms will be formal. I won't spit out the term COCK just for the hell of it. As long as an author describes proper terms for "penis" without repeating that term seventy times durning the fic--then authors should be able to use whatever word they want.
That scene where Daniel is having his little one on one was meant to be sensual, not porn. If I want a more raw scene, then I'll use more raw words. If I had used "cock" in that scene, it would have screwed up the flow, and focused the reader just on that part of the anatomy. I wanted the focus more on Daniel, and the fact he's being overwhelmed by some otherworldly influence. (Walter...yum)
Funny you should mention a threesome...it won't be a technical "menage a trois"...but they will be in a situation that is messy, graphic, and bloody--but still sensual in some form. Yeah, that will be fun to write...oh, and sex is "not" the ONLY thing Walter is punishing Henry with. It is, but hes also doing other things to Henry, most not very nice. I will touch more on that later, but its violent, and references the final sacrement that Eileen repeats to Daniel from that dream in chapter 5.
Thanks again for the review.
~Carrie
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Review for chp 6, part 1 (ganked from LJ):
Wowwww... There' sooo much to cover!!
Other'n the fact that I absolutely loooooooove it and that I'm tired as hell, I'll try to see what I can review on. @_@
Walter somehow molesting Daniel. Walter moving the plot forward with a confused Daniel. Valtiel arriving and 'aquainting' himself with Daniel. That damn fucking doll. ...Alessa. I have no words to say other than that I'm rather awed. Like... *_* kind of awed. It was just so perfect, in how it flowed, and how each character behaved and reacted to one another. All that plot. Heh heh... can't wait for Thursday (or later if need be) :D
I feel for Daniel--he's REALLY loosing it, but I don't blame him in the least. I know I would! Hell, I'm surprised Henry in-game didn't after being imprisioned inside his own aparment. Speaking of whom, I'm both curious to know what Walter's going to do to the poor guy... but also not. Morbid curiosity, should I say. At the same time, I'm wondering if... say, Daniel finds out/witnesses it/the many things Walter may (or may not?) do to Henry (and others?) :3 Just a little *cough* neurotic statement from me.
Since I'm still *_* I'll have to leave the review at this... But rest assured, I'll be even more *_* when the next chapter comes out, that I find words for pieces of the chapter to comment on! :3
MUCH LOVE! *glomps Henry*
~the seph, FOYF
=D
Wowwww... There' sooo much to cover!!
Other'n the fact that I absolutely loooooooove it and that I'm tired as hell, I'll try to see what I can review on. @_@
Walter somehow molesting Daniel. Walter moving the plot forward with a confused Daniel. Valtiel arriving and 'aquainting' himself with Daniel. That damn fucking doll. ...Alessa. I have no words to say other than that I'm rather awed. Like... *_* kind of awed. It was just so perfect, in how it flowed, and how each character behaved and reacted to one another. All that plot. Heh heh... can't wait for Thursday (or later if need be) :D
I feel for Daniel--he's REALLY loosing it, but I don't blame him in the least. I know I would! Hell, I'm surprised Henry in-game didn't after being imprisioned inside his own aparment. Speaking of whom, I'm both curious to know what Walter's going to do to the poor guy... but also not. Morbid curiosity, should I say. At the same time, I'm wondering if... say, Daniel finds out/witnesses it/the many things Walter may (or may not?) do to Henry (and others?) :3 Just a little *cough* neurotic statement from me.
Since I'm still *_* I'll have to leave the review at this... But rest assured, I'll be even more *_* when the next chapter comes out, that I find words for pieces of the chapter to comment on! :3
MUCH LOVE! *glomps Henry*
~the seph, FOYF
=D
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October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Thank God I didn't try to read this in the middle of the night. *shivers* It's creepy, and mind fucking, and all those wonderfully weird and twisted things I associate with Silent Hill. I love it! More please!