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November 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
So freaking awesome!
(Finally I just saw Silent Hill so I actually have a little more grasp on the random mythology of this, and it made me want to come back and read your fic again.)
I'm so happy that there was a Chapter nine waiting for me when I came back to check.
You already know that I love this, so I won't ramble, but I will say that I really love the way your writing is becoming tighter and better with every new chapter you write. It's super cool.
(Finally I just saw Silent Hill so I actually have a little more grasp on the random mythology of this, and it made me want to come back and read your fic again.)
I'm so happy that there was a Chapter nine waiting for me when I came back to check.
You already know that I love this, so I won't ramble, but I will say that I really love the way your writing is becoming tighter and better with every new chapter you write. It's super cool.
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November 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
editing? why? and how will we know what has and had not been edited. u just want use to read it all pover again? some of use wont even remmber the first version.
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November 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
When I say edit in my summery, it only means typo's, grammer, and maybe some add-ons--dialogue switching, etc. Nothing major...so don't worry over the editing okay? LOL
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November 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Your chapters seem to be getting better and better! There are really only a few stories that can hold interest for this long, and remain stimulating and thrilling, and this is definitely one of them.
I loved the "monster", and your Walter is charmingly crafty. You portray him as being more cunning and diabolic than he sometimes appears, which is enjoyable...and you manage to make him both sexy and scary. He's this way in the game, of course, but it's not a thing that's easily reproduced in fiction, sans ambient game noises and visuals.
And I do indeed feel sorry for Daniel. I certainly assume that someone is going to find out what he's unwittingly done, and then the poor boy will *really* be in trouble. *evil giggle* Poor guy. . . .
I loved the "monster", and your Walter is charmingly crafty. You portray him as being more cunning and diabolic than he sometimes appears, which is enjoyable...and you manage to make him both sexy and scary. He's this way in the game, of course, but it's not a thing that's easily reproduced in fiction, sans ambient game noises and visuals.
And I do indeed feel sorry for Daniel. I certainly assume that someone is going to find out what he's unwittingly done, and then the poor boy will *really* be in trouble. *evil giggle* Poor guy. . . .
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November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
For his sake, I hope Daniel's either a good liar or smart enough to blame that on Walter. ;)
He's in a bad situation as it is. There's no way he'll be able to resist anything Walter has planned for him if he gets stuck inside a jail cell or padded room. And since nobody actually saw him kill Andre...
That's harsh, I know. But he's got to find some way to gain the upper hand on Walter. That might be what Walter's hoping for in the first place: that Daniel gets put in a place from where there's no escape. If he can BS his way out of this one, even for a little while, he damn sure better take the option.
Of course, that's assuming it is Andre and that someone will come in and get a look at what Daniel did to him. But right now, it's looking pretty grim.
He's in a bad situation as it is. There's no way he'll be able to resist anything Walter has planned for him if he gets stuck inside a jail cell or padded room. And since nobody actually saw him kill Andre...
That's harsh, I know. But he's got to find some way to gain the upper hand on Walter. That might be what Walter's hoping for in the first place: that Daniel gets put in a place from where there's no escape. If he can BS his way out of this one, even for a little while, he damn sure better take the option.
Of course, that's assuming it is Andre and that someone will come in and get a look at what Daniel did to him. But right now, it's looking pretty grim.
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Review for Chp 9:
... Oh. Shit.
~the seph
... Oh. Shit.
~the seph
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
RE 9: Flip of the Coin
*eye twitch*
I could tell something like this was going to happen! Actually, my first impression was that the butt-ugly creature would have killed Andre, and after Daniel had killed the monster, Frank would rush in and see Andre's body and Daniel, covered in blood and weilding a baseball bat. Either way, I think Daniel might be a little screwed! Now the question remains; is Andre really dead? Was that creature really him? Will Daniel be caught and sent to a padded cell where Walter can torment him for the rest of his life? The questions need answers!
Loved Frank's reactions. I can just picture him raising an eyebrow when Daniel is yelling about how he isn't on drugs. Yep, rational man, our Daniel. And yay, Melanie is back! *smile* The whole idea of this raging conversation in the middle of a corridor early in the morning made me giggle.
Glorious! Can't wait for more!
*eye twitch*
I could tell something like this was going to happen! Actually, my first impression was that the butt-ugly creature would have killed Andre, and after Daniel had killed the monster, Frank would rush in and see Andre's body and Daniel, covered in blood and weilding a baseball bat. Either way, I think Daniel might be a little screwed! Now the question remains; is Andre really dead? Was that creature really him? Will Daniel be caught and sent to a padded cell where Walter can torment him for the rest of his life? The questions need answers!
Loved Frank's reactions. I can just picture him raising an eyebrow when Daniel is yelling about how he isn't on drugs. Yep, rational man, our Daniel. And yay, Melanie is back! *smile* The whole idea of this raging conversation in the middle of a corridor early in the morning made me giggle.
Glorious! Can't wait for more!
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November 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You know, I'm beginning to feel bad for Walter. A friend just convinced me that all he wanted was a 'mommy' and now I'm all... "Well, shit. Daniel, go wake mommy up. :[" I'm sorry, that's the first thing I thought towards the end of this chapter.
He's stuck in the otherworld now, right? Bodies can't exactly change like that in reality. -sigh- Poor Daniel's in for a world of hurt. He's got to be one of my favorite OCs, ever. Keep it up!
He's stuck in the otherworld now, right? Bodies can't exactly change like that in reality. -sigh- Poor Daniel's in for a world of hurt. He's got to be one of my favorite OCs, ever. Keep it up!
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November 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice little twist, I can't wait for the next part. Walter seems like he's having fun.
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November 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Da-yum... O_O The last bit of this chapter was intense. The creature Andre became was very vivid and fit him well... the mallet-like arms. I like the signifigance from that. ;) I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter... how Daniel will deal with what he's done. Oh man... I can already see the angst.
Loved every minute of it, dear. Keep it up! ^_^
Loved every minute of it, dear. Keep it up! ^_^