rate_review Reviews

hehe sorry for that. It's all good. ;0

i was wondering what all the fuss was about and i'm glad I read this.
A short read but very good, i mean good in a way that it's so compacted with so much goodness that it leaves me wondering why you cut it short. ;_;

I agree with R. Dennis. Writing "pussy" isn't always nice. That's just our opinion and being nit picky.
Story was fine though, a nice read I guess.

Your profile says you are female, Pandora but R. Dennis doesn't like it that you wrote pussy and clit in this fic.
And is condenscending and is angry that you get reviews for this fic by saying you need to learn female anatomy and go and use your slang words better. *puts nose in the air like a snooty person who is bent on hurting others as a new years resolution*

MMmmokay, don't use pussy and clit next time. :P

(rolls eyes)
move on. move on.... I think the author and all the other authors can write pussy and clit and vagina, and cunt and all kinds of open orafices in their fics whenever they feel like it.
or go to wikipedia and type in "vagina" and use of slang words for it to create an atmosphere of fucking like this:

"Krauser moved with deliberate ease, inching his huge penis inside the woman's large orafice, wet and open. He screamed with pleasure as he slammed the rest of his monumental penis inside the woman, begging for her release as her vagina juices closed in with a tight grip hold"

There. The use of Penis and Vagina is well used here. To replace the cock and pussy.

I agree with R. Dennis. If the author wants to continue writing sex plots and sexual themes in the future and to be the better writer and more diverse, she should extend her vocabulary with more anatomical words. She's already a very good writer so therefore, she should quit being so consistent with these crass and smutty words and pursue a world of sexual language out there that will suit even the most jaded reader out there.

Great job but too short. It's so abrubt. it needs more.

I agree with Jackal Mann's review. It just seems too short but well done though. Well done indeed. *salivates*

I think this is just nit picking here, no? The story was well written and it seems that most, if not all, the readers enjoyed it. So what if the author used 'crass' terms? It's her choice and her right to use whatever words she wants.

To the author, I say good on ya, and keep doing what you're doing! I love this story and wouldn't mind more of it. =)

You really need to learn your female anatomy. Or maybe just double check your use of slang terms.