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Clearly written by and for the sensibilities of a 12 year old.

"Crono disrobed, whipping out his nine-inch sword of fury from its sheath. Marle was wowed by its size, making Crono nervous that she'd think it was a hot dog and try to eat it."

This was so funny that I blew milk out of my nose. And then Marle farted, so yeah, everything was okay.

This is ridiculous - and hilarious! I love it! It's refreshing to see a humor fic that's funny as well as immature as opposed to just painfully immature.

Now, I do enjoy parodies and attempts at humor, but seriously, why must you insult the overweight like that? Your remark about how Marle thought that it was a hot dog and would try to eat it... come on. And Marle breaking the bed? What the hell? 225 pounds won't even come close to breaking a bed, let alone if it's a royal bed in Marle's castle. I am quite tired of the stereotype about how fat people are mindlessly obsessed with food. True, a large portion of overweight and obese people suffer from a horrible eating disorder (Binge eating disorder... Look it up on wikipedia), but in no way is food the only thing on their minds. So, I may ask... how was Marle being "fat" a problem for Crono? I understand that this is not a serious fic, and I have written many parody fics in my day, but I feel you just crossed the line a bit. I'm sure you're going to respond with something like, "LOL WELL U MUST BE A FAT KID SO UR FAT LOL AND I HURT UR FEELINGS LOL ITS JUST A JOKE GAWD Y R U TAKIN IT SRSLY?" (maybe not quite to that extent), but yes... I'm sorry. I felt I needed to voice my discontent.

Otherwise, the story did make me chuckle a bit.

You make the best parody stories.

You need to do some Kingdom Hearts yaoi ones though, maybe get a decent fic in there. (The 400 stories about how lyk, Sora and Riku r lyk totally buttsex about each other are shit.)

Wow you need to learn how to write. Even if that was a attempt at being funny, you still failed. It was neither humourous or entertaining. For the love of god, just stop writing this bullshit.

Wtf?

XD That was really retarded, but I still loved it.

WTF? Funny.. but strange..

Was that supposed to be funny? You're trying too hard.