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mmmmmm soo ogood, you are a great asset in my life, this was an even better addition to the last one you wrote. i await your next chapter. i pray that you still find inspitarion and just so you know, if you ever need a topic to do it on, just e-mail me, and i will tell you what id like to see you do, just putting that out, if you ever get yourself in a bind ask your readers for advice, me personally would like to see more beastiality and more anal and mabey some hair fetishes going on, just a personal request.. mabey a horse??? just saying, but other then that i congragulate you on your superb writing skills. i await further chapters

i like it alot i hope you contiue soon cause i really want to see the next update please update soon

Hmm.

The first chapter is good, I like the idea of the Virgin Amulet. However, the scenes are not detailed enough, and the later chapters are just recycling the theme of chapter 1 [Lara gangbanged & repeatedly lost her virginity]. But still, it's a good read.

dude you have amazed me. this is a great story in the making, your powerful and unrivled skills in the writing catagory have shown me that you know what your doing, in a way your story speak out and become a living thing. know this, you have a great gift, and using this gift to satasify the needs of all of us at AFF is a great thing to do, keep up the good work my fellow and if you keep on doing what your doing, which is doing differnt things in each chapter, then we will all be very satisfied with all that you have given us. i await your next chapter in the near future. and until then my good fellow...

I really don't know what do say...so i'm going to just stay one word: awesome.

Keep writing. :)

I think it's sufficient to say my vote has been raised to a four star rating now. :P

Well for writing talents you've got heaps of it. But, uh...if you're going to make sex scenes, then, well, make them. You put enough effort into talking about the AFTERMATH but almost nothing about DURING. There's more to sex than just orgasms, yanno. As for the thing with the beastiality, well, that's REALLY not my thing...and it's kinda sick, really, as is the rape thing. And just for my notorious nitpicky stuff, you said "the sounds of lovemaking died away" after the rape scene. Heh, making love, having sex, and raping someone are three different things... XD Anyway. I give it, eh, a two star rating. You get a star for being good at writing, but the rape and especially the beastiality aspects just didn't appeal to me. *shrugs* Work on the sex scenes themselves a bit more, too. Normally I don't bias my vote on the topics of a sex scene if the sex scene is written well enough, but there really wasn't much of them. Sorry. Anyways, keep trying, and despite what I didn't like about the story, you're a really good writer.