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November 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
|D ... Wow. Holy crap. In the good way.
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September 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was wickedly fun to read, and quite hot.
I do have a few small gripes, however: Firstly, beta reader would be helpful, since there are a couple of gramamtical errors or slang that seems inappropriate. Second, as far as unlubricated virginal anal sex goes...well, I'm aware that this is fantasy...but it would hurt for more than "over a minute". Not only would it hurt excruciatingly for a long time, it could cause fairly serious injury. It The incident does spoil the mood a bit, because it's hard to take it seriously. And, third: I may be mistaken, but I'm fairly certain that the depth of a wound required to use retractors would be fairly lethal if it were made on the abdomen of a slim person like Henry.
Overall, however, it was fun to read, even sort of amusing in parts (Walter with the alcohol, while a little OOC, was wickedly charming). I'm a big fan of desire-in-denial, especially on Henry's part, and that was well done. I loved Walter's brutality and sadism, too. I'm not sure how sadomasochistic the "real" Walter would be, but hell with it...it was very enjoyable to read.
I do have a few small gripes, however: Firstly, beta reader would be helpful, since there are a couple of gramamtical errors or slang that seems inappropriate. Second, as far as unlubricated virginal anal sex goes...well, I'm aware that this is fantasy...but it would hurt for more than "over a minute". Not only would it hurt excruciatingly for a long time, it could cause fairly serious injury. It The incident does spoil the mood a bit, because it's hard to take it seriously. And, third: I may be mistaken, but I'm fairly certain that the depth of a wound required to use retractors would be fairly lethal if it were made on the abdomen of a slim person like Henry.
Overall, however, it was fun to read, even sort of amusing in parts (Walter with the alcohol, while a little OOC, was wickedly charming). I'm a big fan of desire-in-denial, especially on Henry's part, and that was well done. I loved Walter's brutality and sadism, too. I'm not sure how sadomasochistic the "real" Walter would be, but hell with it...it was very enjoyable to read.
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was the best rape story I've read on this site! I've never been much of a Walter/Henry fan, but your story made me one. I wish I could write tort was well as you do. Keep up the good work!