rate_review Reviews

You REALLY need to fix the formatting on this. It was very hard to read. You also need to paint a better picture of the scene, and take your time when going through the plot. People read for enjoyment, to savour it. They don't read to see how fast they can get through it...unless it's a school textbook that they really don't want to read.

like your pen name, it think this story is good, but i find it a little out of character for him, but add to it