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August 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Read this a few days ago, so I thought I should leave a review.
For starters, I really did NOT like DMC2, and I thought that Lucia was a weak female lead. However, as I've said before, this IS you, and you're a good writer, so I wanted to give this a chance. I was pleasantly surprised. You portrayed Lucia with the ignorant innocence that defines her character. The uncertainty, but the desire to do well... you had a very good characterization of her. The actual sex was a bit vague, but this seemed more like a delve into Lucia's mind rather than a focus on the physical activity. Most of your stories seem to lean that way, and that's why I enjoy them, I think. You prove that you don't always need graphic descriptions of intercourse to make a pleasing adult story.
Nice work, laryna.
- Jen
For starters, I really did NOT like DMC2, and I thought that Lucia was a weak female lead. However, as I've said before, this IS you, and you're a good writer, so I wanted to give this a chance. I was pleasantly surprised. You portrayed Lucia with the ignorant innocence that defines her character. The uncertainty, but the desire to do well... you had a very good characterization of her. The actual sex was a bit vague, but this seemed more like a delve into Lucia's mind rather than a focus on the physical activity. Most of your stories seem to lean that way, and that's why I enjoy them, I think. You prove that you don't always need graphic descriptions of intercourse to make a pleasing adult story.
Nice work, laryna.
- Jen