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u should do a chapter about isabel and hazuki

Please update soon, I'm so impatient. also I love the pairings so far. keep it up

Hmm, the fourth chapter was very good! I wasn't too fond of chapter 3, Luserina seemed to go too far out of her character. The scene with Arshtat was quite natural however, flowed well and believably and didn't feel creepy despite the incest, instead it was quite pleasant. The scene with Marina and Belcoot is great as well, I think you got drunk Marina spot on! It's funny and erotic, and the suggestion at the end of Faroush x Marina x Belcoot was quite a pleasant surprise. In short, I thought chapter 4 was quite enjoyable in its full.

"It's time to stop playing and start..."

"...Dating?"

That line actually made me laugh out loud. Good stuff. Seriously though, give some thought to including Hazuki. Or I guess I should say 'Give some thought to introducing Hazuki'. It'd be a fun character dynamic to see you right about. The love triangle, I mean. Oh, and please no yaoi.

Hey great to see you’re writing again. All in all I like chapter 4 I just wish there was more to the Prince and Arshtat scene and you shouldn’t feel bad with incest there’s nothing wrong with incest, yes in real life there is but there isn’t anything wrong with incest between fictional characters heck if you look at the royal family‘s family tree you‘ll see it‘s full of incest in one way or another up till the point that Ferid won the Sacred Games the winner had always been a Godwin or a Barows so yeah the Royal family is one big incest pot. So you shouldn’t feel awkward about it. And I for one would love to see more of the Royal Family

Love the stuff between Belcoot & Marina it’s turning out very well. Can’t wait to see the threesome However I don’t think it should include yaoi I have nothing against yaoi in fact I think it would add to the series and maybe would like to see it in later chapters. However I just don’t think it would fit Belcoot, it just seems to out of character for him.

Anyway keep up the good work.

Ho ho HO! Woo! What do we have here?

I can't tell from the story that you thought the incest part was awkward to write.
The only objection I have is that they're finished so fast, they only have sex for
one paragraph.

The BelcootxMarina part was funny and nice, though it also was a little short on sex.
The next chapter will be interesting to see, though I was looking forward to a
non-yaoi threesome. Would you consider making two versions? =P
Good job anyway and keep going!

Please update soon

Well, well. This is a nice story...and I would definately like to see a yaoi chapter <3. XD

Great story love the the Lun chapter and the ending to ch. 2 . I’m 100% behind a Prince x Lursernia maybe romactic dinner or some crap like that leading to Lurserina’s first time. Alsoif you plan to do a Belcoot x Marina or a Marina x Prince chapter how about just make it a Marina x Belcoot x Prince threesome. For future pairings how about what I think everyone will like to see Miakis x Lyon or Lyon x Miakis x Prince at some point down the road or at lest Lyon x Prince. Also a Lelei & Lucretia bath scene might be nice. Also since the game hints to it I would love to see Kyle x Sialeeds. Even though I’m not really into male on male sex, one idea I was thinking of might be interesting since The Prince strike’s me as someone that could be bi-sexual and Rahal could also be gay or bi. And since you seem not to be shy of incest I thought that it would be interesting to see and Threesome between Rahl, Prince, and Rania with everyone getting a piece of each other. Also since you said you wanted to add things besides just sex it would be funny to see some scenes like Kyle or Kyle and the Prince checking out the ladies.Any way keep up the good work and Sorry about the # of paring suggestions.

For some reason when I first post this review a few days ago it cut the top half off and I just notice it today so I try to fix what got cut out at lest what I remember.