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Great story. Does the next chapter involve Kisara? That'd be good. Personally I think Lorelei might be a little unsuitable for the Prince's girlfriend, but whatever. I liked her more in earlier (later?) games. I wonder if anyone will ever take up the challenge of writing a Zerase lemon though?

Good to hear that the next update will have 2 sexscenes You do a great job on detail so much so that I can't wait

*glares at above reviewer.*...helpful...

At anyrate, mini-update: new chapter will be forthcoming this weekend. It'll prolly be the start of a lull, since I'll have Devil Summoner after this weekend. BUT YOU NEVER KNOW.

I'm pleased with this upcoming chapter. Two sex scenes, one of which is done and one I have to start.

I have other thoughts, but this isn't a message board, so I'll just leave 'em for my Author's notes. Cheerio and all that sort.

More, I want more

Man it's great your back love the new chapter.Love the overall feeling of the castle. As for a Girlfriend for the Prince I would have to say Viki just because it would make for alot of funny things that could happen also that one guys idea of Lucretia was good also I like the Lun too, the problem is that castle is full of great choices so it's hard to pick which is best

Man.. Could you do a Faroush and Cathari scene?

Hey I was wondering if you were going to do a some Yoai maybe a threesome with The Prince,Shula Vayla and Sharmista

Another excellent chapter....

You continue to bring out the character's personalities wonderfully and your continued efforts at bringing the castle alive once again leave mine in the dust. Just the little details like the beavers working on the bridge and your very nice description of the Destiny Tablet room...

I'm not sure I can critically review your style as I find it to be very descriptive and visual as you desire. I have no problem forming images of the action in my mind.

The interactions between Zwieg, Lorelei, Zerase, and the Prince feel spot on. I like the idea of a relationship between Lorelei and the Prince though I wonder is there not some sexual tension between Lorelei and Zweig?

I'm especially looking forward to the Prince and Kisara...it'll be interesting to see the differences as I'm planning on doing that as well eventually in my story.

I'm glad we're going to see more of Lyon, however I wish she was around the Prince more. It seems from the game that she would never have left his side though I can see how within the castle you'd let them be apart.

Anyway...good job and I hope you update more frequently from now on.

Hey it’s very good to see you writing again. It has been a bad weekend so far I had a friend that died Saturday around 10.am so I’ve been down a bit all day However reading your new chapter help cheer me up a bit. I did like the chapter a lot but you are right something was off about it most likely because of the sex being 1st.. You continue to do a great job of capturing the life of a bustling castle the castle really feels full of life. You have also done a great job of capturing the personality of the all characters except for Luserina however I did like that change as I could see her having a wild side. I also have to say you do a great job of painting a picture I can clearly picture everything in my head. You are very descriptive with every detail that it helps the story a lot.

I had an idea where you was going with Lyon waking up Sialeeds and I love it although I would loved to see a Prince, Sialeeds & Lyon threesome but I understand if incest isn’t your thing and I‘m sure some of the other writers could indulge me on this here’s looking at you Jeanes ,however you did do a great job in chapter 3 so I’m sure if you wanted to you could do something great . As for the Prince getting steady girlfriend an obvious chose you be Lyon because of her feelings for the Prince and they make cute couple plus they have known each other for years However in the game their true feelings for each other don’t come out completely till the in of the game. An other Girl that would be good would be Lun from the moment I saw her I thought she was a great match for the Prince I could even seen them starting an relationship by taking baths together in the river and maybe skinny-dipping while the Prince was using Raftfleet as his base . Also she has tough personality but that all just melts away when she is with the Prince also you did a great job in chapter 1 Plus I could see a lot of funny scenes coming from them being together especially If Lun was to catch the Prince with someone else just picture if she found him with her mom Hell it would be real funny if Subala somehow was involved too. A 3rd. Girl/woman that would be a good girlfriend would be Lucretia the Prince with an older woman is a good idea plus she’s hot and she has an exotic thing going for her plus she could teach the Prince a few things and I’m not talking scholar things. Plus I could see her teasing the Prince a bit and it would create more drama between Sialeeds and Lucetia I mean Sialeeds already hates Lucretia just think how she would feel about her sharing a bed with the Prince. Plus I could see Lurcretia allowing the Prince to still have flings with other women and as I get an feeling Lurcretia is bi from the game I could see them sharing women. So I would love either Lun or Lucretia as the Prince’s girlfriend also I would be ok with Loreleli.

Anyway great to see you back and I’m sure I could comment on more but can’t think any more I just hope you keep them coming I’m a huge fan and as I said your story help cheer me up on this otherwise sad weekend. Thanks again.

Your stories are good! Stop keeping us waiting.. (/T_T)/

I want moar chapters!!