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December 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
u got fuckin talent u little turd mongering piece of cunt. fuckin amazing stories, jizzed like 2 pints and covered my fuckin cat. im so fuckin horny right now that im gonna fuckin penetrate my dog, tavis' sweet, flacid anus and plunder him with a firey unadultered passion rivaled only by that of ike and elicina and u and me in our tuscan villa on those long, sweaty, passionate summer nights. a little advice: get rid of the gay ass fucktard game plot and stop using fuckin gay ass names like ike and soren, use a kool fuckin name like brandon and fuck fire emblem....fag. u should go into the adult fiction novel business.
keep up the fuckin kick ass work............cuntfaggotdouchebaggot
keep up the fuckin kick ass work............cuntfaggotdouchebaggot
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November 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice, it is good to see some het Fire emblem: path of radiance fics for a change with excellent quality. I don't review often, but this fic caught my attention firmly and i decided to give it a review, as tribute for giving me something delightful to read.
Keep it up, and i won't have to use Alondite to impale you, killing Greil was bad enough, i would hate to kill yet another one who has caught my interest. :)
Keep it up, and i won't have to use Alondite to impale you, killing Greil was bad enough, i would hate to kill yet another one who has caught my interest. :)
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November 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm really liking this fic so far, that last pairing surprised me quite nicely, didn't see that one coming. This fic is very good, and i am very eagerly awaiting for the next installment for it, hope you update again soon!
As a side note, i really would like to see either a Boyd/Titania (Due to me playing the game and trying out the support conversation between the two of them, it got me curious) or someone getting paired up with Lethe. But, that is your choice, i'm just asking. Either way, i can't wait to see what you come up with next!
As a side note, i really would like to see either a Boyd/Titania (Due to me playing the game and trying out the support conversation between the two of them, it got me curious) or someone getting paired up with Lethe. But, that is your choice, i'm just asking. Either way, i can't wait to see what you come up with next!
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November 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very good, this fic is quite good indeed. I can't wait to see what the next pairing will be like, since this latest one was VERY surprising... can't wait to see what happens next. Update again soon!
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November 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's really good. I think that another interesting pairing would be Ilayna and Gatrie.
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November 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
woohoo! great! try a shinon/lethe next. thatd be interesting!
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October 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
More. More. More!!
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September 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
h-o-l-y...... SHIT! that was the best FE fic i have ever read!!!!!!!!!! OMG OMG OMG!!!!
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August 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awesome story. It's hard to find decent lemons these days. Either they don't get to the point or the lemon part is two mangled paragraphs long and look like it was written by a horney thirteen year old (or someone who didn't bother to spell check after typing the damn thing with one hand ^-^) The detail was well done and you portray the characters well. You should continue this particuliar story!
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August 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well, well, it seems that since you reviewed my own story more than once, I figured I owed you the courtesy of extending the same to you. Let me just start out by saying that I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. You started it out very nicely, painting a nice image and getting the reader right inside of Ike's head. You also paid great attention to chronological game detail, and you did a good job of including lots of characters and realistic interactions. I actually laughed at the bit between Boyd, Kieran, and Oscar, and I mentally nodded at the reference to Gatrie and Ilyana. Like I said, your attention to detail (in terms of Path of Radiance as the source material) is very well done.
Now, for my take on the sex. Overall, it was very good. You took your time, which is a great plus, and you definitely were vivid with your descriptions. My only problem was, much like the other reviewer mentioned, Elincia did seem a bit out of character at some points. As caught up as she and Ike may have become during the sex, her personal habits would not go out the window. She would not say "yeah," or "baby." At least, I don't think she would.
Furthermore, I thought that the sex was a bit too much "sex" and not enough "making love." You started to explain and develop a sincere, deep bond between Ike and Elincia, and I thought it was great. However, you took the sex in the smut direction more so than the love direction. I don't think their attraction or care for each other stops at lust. Sure, there is lust, but I didn't get the sense of love-making that I thought should have been there.
If you never intended to make it a love scene, that's perfectly fine, but it sort of threw me for a loop. Other than that, the sex was smutty, hot, and well-written. My only point of advice is to watch out for frequent repetitions. It happened a couple of times, namely with the "jet after jet of cum" and the "volume and intensity" (referring to Elincia's moans). Be careful to mix up your depictions so that the reader doesn't get distracted.
On a related note (and I doubt many people would even notice this), but keep in mind the time setting of Path of Radiance. Did they have lamps back then (the type you switch on)? Also, would Shinon be wearing his bow at the dinner table? He's Shinon, yeah, but I doubt any warrior would come to dinner packing their weapon. Not a big deal either way, but as a detail stickler myself, I'm giving you a heads up.
In closing, this fic contained everything I like about erotic fanfiction. Excellent pace, good characterizations (for the most part), hardly any grammar/spelling mistakes, superb attention to detail and environment, and solid depiction of the sex scene. Your style reminds me a lot of my own, and I just wanted to commend you on a job well done.
I love Fire Emblem, and I hope you continue your work. Even if you decide to not continue with Fire Emblem fics, I'll look for more of your work in the future. Okay, this review is long enough.
-jm
Now, for my take on the sex. Overall, it was very good. You took your time, which is a great plus, and you definitely were vivid with your descriptions. My only problem was, much like the other reviewer mentioned, Elincia did seem a bit out of character at some points. As caught up as she and Ike may have become during the sex, her personal habits would not go out the window. She would not say "yeah," or "baby." At least, I don't think she would.
Furthermore, I thought that the sex was a bit too much "sex" and not enough "making love." You started to explain and develop a sincere, deep bond between Ike and Elincia, and I thought it was great. However, you took the sex in the smut direction more so than the love direction. I don't think their attraction or care for each other stops at lust. Sure, there is lust, but I didn't get the sense of love-making that I thought should have been there.
If you never intended to make it a love scene, that's perfectly fine, but it sort of threw me for a loop. Other than that, the sex was smutty, hot, and well-written. My only point of advice is to watch out for frequent repetitions. It happened a couple of times, namely with the "jet after jet of cum" and the "volume and intensity" (referring to Elincia's moans). Be careful to mix up your depictions so that the reader doesn't get distracted.
On a related note (and I doubt many people would even notice this), but keep in mind the time setting of Path of Radiance. Did they have lamps back then (the type you switch on)? Also, would Shinon be wearing his bow at the dinner table? He's Shinon, yeah, but I doubt any warrior would come to dinner packing their weapon. Not a big deal either way, but as a detail stickler myself, I'm giving you a heads up.
In closing, this fic contained everything I like about erotic fanfiction. Excellent pace, good characterizations (for the most part), hardly any grammar/spelling mistakes, superb attention to detail and environment, and solid depiction of the sex scene. Your style reminds me a lot of my own, and I just wanted to commend you on a job well done.
I love Fire Emblem, and I hope you continue your work. Even if you decide to not continue with Fire Emblem fics, I'll look for more of your work in the future. Okay, this review is long enough.
-jm