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Thanks, Mcdohl.... I hadn't reallized I'd even turned that feature on. Its off now... Things are hectic in the run up to the end of the semester... But I'll put an effort into finishing up this next chapter today and tomorrow. Not gonna promise anything but I give it a 50/50 chance of happening.

Hey, thanks I thought that it might have been a little long and didn't make sense.

Don't worry about Catharai I'm willing to wait for her. As for the Godwin thing I meant to say that I would like to see somthing from thier leadership eyes or even their soiders just to give a little more insight to thier ideology and why do they think Falena would be better in their hands and maybe even thier plans for Falena. Also it would be cool to see a little more insight into Gizel and why he become a scheming and manipulative man. And as for the Godwin soiders why do they fight.

I love the Sialeeds stuff but I see her as the outside looking in because of the fact she's only with them to help her Family.

It would be cool to see what the Godwins think about her being on their side and if they really trust her at all.

I would also like to say that I like how you've done Sialeeds so far I know that on some forums there a huge amount guys that hated her because of the so called betrayal but I feel that she's one of the most important female characters of Suikoden and that Falena would not have healed after the war if not for her. In a way she is to Falena as Odessa Silverberg is to The Toran Republic.

Dude that last chapter was so good that it was almost like a spin off. The battle was so great that I can't wait to see more of them. You said that you plan to give Tir some background by doing some flashbacks I hope this will these will include Odessa or the part at inn when she has that talk with Tir even her death would be cool to read.

Hey just got done reading the update. And I hope the next chapter will stay focus on the Gate Rune war however going back to Roy would be cool also.By the way if you don't care I would like to read somthing with Lucretia and Cathari sometime maybe Cathari could help relieve Lucetia of some stress that has build up from trying to keep the castle running without the Prince.

Wow... I'm blown away by your responses. Thanks a lot.

I'm glad you like the way I'm taking this battle. I'm definitely sticking around for a few chapters. Yea...I have a bad habit of going on tangents. My plan for this time hopping thing originally consisted of just five sex scenes involving the games...pop in pop back out...but then you see how I've ended up extending that. And now I reallize I like Tir so much I'm even going into some backstory of him. I'll show him before the onset of the Death rune when he was a much happier though cocky guy.

I really appreciate all your guy's thoughts. I especially love your thoughts on the Tenkais, Chrono. Don't feel bad about going over long...I loved hearing all that. I think just the two of you could keep me going. Though there's going to be a slow down again though no where near as bad as before.

GTa...I'll look into incorporating Catharai...I've always liked her...probably be a while....
when you say Godwin's side... do you mean inside one of their heads....rather than just Sialeeds view..

Thanks again.

The battle is being done really cool. I like that it was not the same as the game. The game didn't seem to show how massive and important the Shasarazade battle was. In the it game it made it seem as if Tir's navy had just sail to the fort unopose then had a small land battle then a Small gourp snuck in. But your version is more true to real life tactics by haveing 2 fronts going, one by land and one on the sea well 3 fronts if you count the airforce of the dragon knights. It just makes more sence this way because you would want a land force to keep the enemy distracted while you sneak your small navy force around back and then have them attack the base while the small team takes out the defenses inside. All in all you are making the battle a lot better than the game did and I'm not just ass kissing I really think that.

There's alot about the chapter I like,but as this already a little long winded I'll just touch
on Tir and The Rune of Life and Death aka The Souleater. The only reason I mention the real name is because I've always wonder about it We know the rune thirst for souls and how it devours souls but could it also have the power to restore souls. Anyway back to the story I felt that the way you depicted the Souleater's personality and it's effect on Tir was dead on. I even think the fact that Tir gets hard and climaxes from battle and death is nice touch. As for Tir's personality it's dead on just the fact he's pushing the ones he cares for away makes it almost perfect. It's great to see that you touch on the Tir & Kasumi relationship since it was even mention in suiko 2 plus novels and on of the Suikogadens I even think she tells Tir that she wouldn't care if the souleater took her soul as she would be a part of him forever since the souls that the souleater eats become part of his being and that he's able feel them inside hiself. So I hope that if you stay with Suiko 1 era for a bit that you would build the Tir & Kasumi thing a bit.

As for Tir sex life I like that Cleo and him have been with each other. One thing It seem to be hinted at but I wanted to make sure But is your Tir bisexual or atlest bisexual with Ted and maybe Gremio. It's no big deal in fact I got the same feeling from the game.

Of all the people to choose from I would never have guess that Hix would be the guy to open up a chapter with. Don't get me wrong I love it's cool to see Hix get some respect, Him and Tengaar are two of my favs. The opening with Hix, Viktor, and their unit was intense That's is how a battle chapter should open up. Viktor the bear was in full force and cool to see him fussing with star dragon sword.

As for the boat part of the battle I like how the ice was move by the water rune and had they were also used to make fog to hide the boats.

Tir was done well I like that so far, every single character has different type of personality and are unique Just look at the Tenkai stars they are very unique from each other and so are their runes. Tir shuns those closed to him in fear of his rune's hunger and you can see that he does care for his duty by feels as he's losing his self in it.

As where the Prince seems to be very confident in himself and his duty as an royal perhaps because even though he was seen as a worthless male royal His mom and Dad still encourage him to get into politics and to become adapt in martal arts as where Tir was mostly raised by Gremio and kept out of the public however he also train in martal arts, And The Dawn Rune seems to Add to his Confidence and makes him even more apealing to those around him. Also so far The Dawn rune seems to be the only main rune that has no negative side effects yet This could be because it's a healing Rune with few attacks spells. also it seems to have no define will or personatily yet. although the Dawn Rune's brother/Sister The Tilight Rune has shown a very passionate personatily willing its already passionate user to take even more bedmates and even shows that it likes to entertain it self by influencing its user to push his/her will onto others.
We didn't get to see Riou all that much so I can't said much about him other than he seem to the one woman type.

And then there's Lazlo who is so far the most torture soul in this story. Although born an Prince he was raised as Noble's servent but prove to be more brave and skill than said noble however he lost his father figure and got the cursed rune and was betrayed by the one most close to him and left for dead making him lose all selfConfidence. then add ROP and you have a mix for a dark path. The ROP is a very over powering it breaks the will of it's user as can be seen on Lazol it then trys to make it's users personalty more like it's own and then thur him it's goes on to make others into it's slaves.

Sorry I know that really didn't have much to do with the chapter but I just wanted point out how well and unique the Tenkai stars and their runes are you have done a great with them.

I don't if you have a complete plot or even an ending plan or for matter know how long you plan to do this story. maybe you'll keep updating as long you're getting reviews and have time to do it. but anyway I Think you should stay with Tir for a couple of chapters if you don't mind since you have made some great elements to it also I would love to see what happens with Tir & Kasumi.

Hey I haven't read the full chapter yet but I was wondering what specific things of the chapter you would like our feedback on?

What you've been doing is fine... Mcdohl. I just like to hear what parts of the chapter specifically liked, why they liked it, what they want to see more of...what they don't want to see more of....just that sort of thing.