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Hey man I hope you're able to get an update out tonight Can't wait to read it

LOL chapter 12 had one of the funniest scene I have ever read.

Hey love that you added more Viki. Ch 12 was a very funny Chapter.

Another great chapter. Very good job with the Bath scene I like that it's slowing building and that it is not rush. Also a very funny scene with Viki and Lorelei and Nikea.

hey love the orgy in Chapter 3 and I was wondering if we might see Lucretia more involved in a sex scene in later chapters

Wow, Chapter 11 'Stasis' is HOT HOT HOT! The new scene with Arshtat is incredibly exciting and I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for it to continue! The erotic suspense in that scene is just unbelievable. And meanwhile, the scene in the infirmary is very exciting and promising as well. It seems to hint, besides other things, at a great orgy with scenes like the sexy nurse taking her turn on Faroush's piece and receiving another member in her pussy, and Lucretia paying some attention to Lyon.

I was wondering how you would manage to shift the tone of the story after the very tragic Chapter 10, but you've managed to make it naturally and fluently. Chapter 10 really gets to me, too, because the events in that are really gut-wrenching. You've really made Yuber a terrifying, brutal monster, a threat to be really feared. The action was well written, too. On the other side, it was nice to have Alenia featured so prominently, since she's one of my favorite characters. The comment about her non-existant chest I'm not sure about, though. In the game and official art, she certainly seems to have enough curve, so I was wondering if that was a deliberate change on your part to her description.

But just to reiterate, Chapter 11 was gut-wrenching too, in being so incredible sexy and natural, and handling the transition from tragedy to soothing calm so well, as well as really keeping the sexual suspense on and hanging after the break. Great job!

Read chapter 9 and love how Viki had screwed up teleporting Kyle and Miakis and Miakis' thong appeared on Isato's head that was just plain funny. However where's the Viki action. That's a comedy sex scene just waiting to happen.

I love the way have depicted the Prince he actually seem like a leader.He also makes decisions instead of doing just what is told to him. Plus you can tell he's really respected from his peers

Wow another great chapter. I like the idea of Rune sickness because it makes it more realistic than somebody just keeping healing somebody. it's nice to see negatives to the rune use

Love the bath scene and anything with Jeane.