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October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey man, Please don't hold the update hostage. I understand that you want reviews to help you write, also it makes you feel good. But please don't punish the ones that try to give an detail review every chapter. The fact is that this site is lucky to have 10 new reviews a week for the whole site and sucks because it makes the Authors just want to give up.
Now if yoy don't mind,even though I have already gave a review for the last chapter I thought I would give a small review of the whole story.
The story is already about 135pages and it doesn't seem to have a end insight and thats a good thing in my eyes. The 1st. Chapter opens up with a well written nice little scene. As story makes its way few the 1.st few chapters you'll will notice subtle plot start to develop.
The story is filled with a-lot of funny moments. The characters have even stronger personalities than the game. There is also a good number of surprises thur out the chapters. There is also few great action scenes and a number of good sex scenes.Also as we found in the last chapter this story also invades atlest one other Suikoden game{Got to love that Viki} There is so much to this fic that it has to be the best Suikoden one. Jeanes has outdone himself time and time agian. Keep up the great work and please don't get discouraged.
Now if yoy don't mind,even though I have already gave a review for the last chapter I thought I would give a small review of the whole story.
The story is already about 135pages and it doesn't seem to have a end insight and thats a good thing in my eyes. The 1st. Chapter opens up with a well written nice little scene. As story makes its way few the 1.st few chapters you'll will notice subtle plot start to develop.
The story is filled with a-lot of funny moments. The characters have even stronger personalities than the game. There is also a good number of surprises thur out the chapters. There is also few great action scenes and a number of good sex scenes.Also as we found in the last chapter this story also invades atlest one other Suikoden game{Got to love that Viki} There is so much to this fic that it has to be the best Suikoden one. Jeanes has outdone himself time and time agian. Keep up the great work and please don't get discouraged.
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October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, Mcdohl
I didn't mean to give that impression. In fact, I'm still writing it as this very moment and It will be done today. I'm just greedy for more reviews. I said yesterday it would be then or today and I ended up wanting to add more scenes. So thank you so much for your continued effort in giving me detailed reveiws. And thank you for those how have responded.
I didn't mean to give that impression. In fact, I'm still writing it as this very moment and It will be done today. I'm just greedy for more reviews. I said yesterday it would be then or today and I ended up wanting to add more scenes. So thank you so much for your continued effort in giving me detailed reveiws. And thank you for those how have responded.
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October 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter the new one is, Love the Sialeeds scene. I'll wait till you add the other scene then I'll give a better review
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October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter hope you're able to get out tonight.
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October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Can't wait to see more Viki
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October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Love the fic and can't wait for a update
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October 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I love the Sialeeds stuff in chapter 15 and you love to see more Ilove the schemeing and want to more of that I really hope you going in a diffent path than the game and Have Sialeeds go back to the Prince's army,her death in the game was such an unnecessarily one. I also like the blicking rune thing.
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October 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Woohoo for updates
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October 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Man you really out done yourself with this new chapter with a size 12 font it is close to 20pages long. It nice to see a return to the plot and can’t wait to see what Sialeeds is planning it’s good to see that she has some sort of plan, also the interaction between Her and the Godwin forces is nicely done . Also still love how Sialeeds is treating Alenia I got a laugh out the horse bit. As always anything with Kyle and Miakis is great although I think Jeane’s spell should run out soon those two already get enough of each other with out it though it does make for laugh.
The plot continues to be very intriguing I just can’t wait to see what the next turn will be. The part with blinking rune was very well done and was very interesting. Speaking of that part you did well at showing Sialeeds as a powerful rune user when she used her wind rune on the Neither gate assassin.
Now on to the Suikoden 4 stuff and Viki. Anything with Viki will make you laugh although I have always had the feeling she isn’t as clueless as she acts and that she just puts on like she’s clueless anyway back to the story it was very funny seeing her order the Prince around I got a huge laugh out of the lick your funstick scene. Also I like that you had the Prince being so concern about what happen to the others and especially the way he act about Lyon. Now for the Suikoden 4 stuff it’s good to see that your going to try add some more personality to that game. Although I like that game it just really seem dull to me and there was only a small amount of Characters that I seem to like, such as Kiki, Paula and Lino and his daughter. That game just seem to have to many plot holes and they didn‘t seem to give the Characters any personality, although I heard they try to fix that with Suikoden tactics but I still have yet to play that game.
As for the way you seem to be doing Lazlo I like it considering that fact the Rune of punishment is a curse rune you think that it would have such an effect on him plus the rune has a dark nature to it when it’s not in the atonement stage plus just look what it did to Brandeau from what I heard about him he was once a noble pirate before the rune corrupt him. So I think it would be good to see the struggle between Lazlo and the rune so I like him taking a darker journey and maybe it will only because his friends that he doesn’t lose control, plus is it just me or would Paula and Lazlo would fit nicely together.
Can’t wait to see more I just have a small request when spot opens up for an action/fight scene could you make a spot for Jeane you have done a great job of showing here as a great seductress but she also is a great magic wielder so it would be great to see take part in a battle when the time comes.
As I said when I review Firebrand's story this has been a bad weekend and It has been good to lose myseft in your guys stories and take my mind of the things that be going since Saturday morning and I just want to thank you guys guys for putting the effort and time to kick out such great stories I can hardy wait to read the next update.
The plot continues to be very intriguing I just can’t wait to see what the next turn will be. The part with blinking rune was very well done and was very interesting. Speaking of that part you did well at showing Sialeeds as a powerful rune user when she used her wind rune on the Neither gate assassin.
Now on to the Suikoden 4 stuff and Viki. Anything with Viki will make you laugh although I have always had the feeling she isn’t as clueless as she acts and that she just puts on like she’s clueless anyway back to the story it was very funny seeing her order the Prince around I got a huge laugh out of the lick your funstick scene. Also I like that you had the Prince being so concern about what happen to the others and especially the way he act about Lyon. Now for the Suikoden 4 stuff it’s good to see that your going to try add some more personality to that game. Although I like that game it just really seem dull to me and there was only a small amount of Characters that I seem to like, such as Kiki, Paula and Lino and his daughter. That game just seem to have to many plot holes and they didn‘t seem to give the Characters any personality, although I heard they try to fix that with Suikoden tactics but I still have yet to play that game.
As for the way you seem to be doing Lazlo I like it considering that fact the Rune of punishment is a curse rune you think that it would have such an effect on him plus the rune has a dark nature to it when it’s not in the atonement stage plus just look what it did to Brandeau from what I heard about him he was once a noble pirate before the rune corrupt him. So I think it would be good to see the struggle between Lazlo and the rune so I like him taking a darker journey and maybe it will only because his friends that he doesn’t lose control, plus is it just me or would Paula and Lazlo would fit nicely together.
Can’t wait to see more I just have a small request when spot opens up for an action/fight scene could you make a spot for Jeane you have done a great job of showing here as a great seductress but she also is a great magic wielder so it would be great to see take part in a battle when the time comes.
As I said when I review Firebrand's story this has been a bad weekend and It has been good to lose myseft in your guys stories and take my mind of the things that be going since Saturday morning and I just want to thank you guys guys for putting the effort and time to kick out such great stories I can hardy wait to read the next update.
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October 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice one! x333 Three fingers salute! I wish there is a Faroush and Lym's sex scene though..
ZOMG! Im a pedophile! x3333
ZOMG! Im a pedophile! x3333