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That last chapter had a great concept

Sorry about taking so long to review I’ve been sick.

I love that you add unnecessary scenes they really add to the story by giving more detail any character to it.
I love the Sialeeds and Oellia scene it added a lot, now we have more detail and info about Sialeeds, Arshtat, and Haswar’s relationship and a why they got together in that way. I also like that you had them talk about the world’s taboos also a other reason that I believe this scene was needed was because in one chapter it looks as if Sialeeds plans to use Oellia as nothing more than a pawn in her schemes but in this scene we see that she has develop feelings for Oellia. Sialeeds is one of my all time Suikoden Characters and Feel as you do a great job of making her come alive.
As for the Yuber scene it gave more insight into him plus we found out what happen to him after the fight with the Prince’s group.

Now onto one of my favorite scenes Viki and The Prince, Man that was funny plus you did a good job of giving some mystery to her by having try to lie it’s nice to see somebody try to make her more than a dummy Also I like that you mention they other games. I can’t wait to see what they get themselves into. I’m looking forward to where the stuff from Suikoden 4 is heading it’s very intriguing,


The last scene was nice touch and I like the showing in different cultures and I can’t wait to see more. However I hope the next chapter focus a little more on the Suikoden 4 stuff because I really want to see where that heads. Keep up the great work.

I did write a better review then this but my pc turn off before I could enter it so I hope this one is ok. Oh and you don’t need to say sorry about asking for reviews I didn’t believe you would hold the update hostage I just know some writer’s that will do that

I like the new chapter. It had a really good feel to it plus some humor with the Prince and Shula talking about Zexen it also had a creepy feeling to it which really added to the scene the part with Nifsara trying to get the Prince to fit was funny also it’s good to finally know the actual size of the prince’s tool. The sex was well written as always. The stuff at the latter part if the chapter with the rune of punishment was very interesting I would love to see more of it which brings me to one thing that I’m disappointed at I was really liking the Suikoden 4 setting and things and was looking forward to what may happen. I just really hate that it’s already over well hate might to strong of an word ofcourse you may already plan to go back there before the Prince and Viki's trip is over also I understand that this a Suiko 5 story not a Suiko 4 one but you did a great job bluiding a mood for cossover. I’m sorry for such a short review I can’t really think of any more if you have any questions about any thing that I like or not send me a email and I’ll try to reply as soon as I can oh one last thing I found it fuuny that Oulan thought The Prince was a women nice touch

Nice job with Shula and his women that was some hot action I also like that Shula kept hitting on the Prince although it's more just in a tongue & cheek way

I hope you'll include more stuff from Suikoden 4 in the next chapter. I really want to see where that is heading, plus Viki and The Prince are great and funny together. Also I like Lazlo and the battle he's having in his head with the rune I do hope we will see some of more of his nice side. I also would like to see Lazlo and Paula get together.

Don't know what to say that hasn't all ready been said, Keep em coming

Nice conversation between Sialeeds and Oellia It gave some nice background into Sialeeds' relationship with her sister and cousin also did a good job of showing the diffidence between the different cultures. Also later in the chapter it's nice to see that the Prince has some problems that make for funny envents

It's nice to see that you're making Viki more than just dumb and giving her some more mystery. And I like the scene with Sialeeds and her lover. I'm also can't wait to see more Suiko 4 stuff. Man can't believe that the story is 130something pages long hey don't worry about getting off track I like the way things have been moving. I think it's nice touch. One thing you might want to do work on though it's seems that all the envents so far except the flash backs have happen in just one day. Oh and I like the added scene

Hey man great job with everything the plot,action and sex it is all top notch Youv'e done a great job on Detail you have put a lot of info that might be needed but it also adds a lot and I like knowing everything that is going on

I'll tell you what I like is the fact you're doing something most of Suikoden stories lack, You have a plot and not just a plot where the Prince is trying get a woman but one the revolves around the actual war and runes. Also you have taken the characters and made them even more likeable than the game wich is no small job as the Characters were all ready very likeable. You have also did a good job of adding comedy. Anyway I really like the story and can't wait for more