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That was sweet!!! When are we going to get to the Sonrouge part?

Well done, and I apreciate the agknowlegement. To answer you question it is simple, aim higher, the solar system, the galaxy, mabye even the univerese, then again that's probably too much for a singe creature to do, but oh well. I like the way you did this chapter, the uncertain feelings Espio and Mirage expressed keep the reader wondering and interested. However, it did seem slightly rushed, not so rushed as to take away from the story, but more as in rushed into the relationship. However this is your fanfiction, and I'm confident that you will suceed with a wonderful piece of literiture here. This is CrazyIvan, signing off for now...

Espio kissed Mirage again. "Ouch! Espio you poked my eye out with your horn!" "Oops, sorry about that." They kissed again. "Ouch! Now you poked my other eye out!" Sorry about that but I just keep thinking about this every time Espio and Mirage kiss. You say you're going to impregnate Mirage eh? Yikes. I thought Shadow/Amy was creepy but now that I've seen Espio/Mirage, now that's creepy! chapter 9 score= 3.5 out of 5. And I like what you said about Tails, "...he's still the uber-cute, ultra-intelligent kitsune you all fell in love with. Just gay." Hahaha, that's funny. I'm still pondering about Ashura...and GUN...and Shadow...and Amy...and Sonic...and Eggman...you get the idea.

Hmm...finally. Mirage and Espio had to let out their feelings, and they did. They're indeed going to have a deformed child. :) This story is getting really interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next.

about time those two got together, but midnight? mirage loves him? i thought she didn't understand those emotions. is midnight another person from the ark or just a nickname for shadow? and have you really written another story with an OC/knuckles pairing? i look forward to the next chapter.

Well, now that I have read ARAAT 1 and 2, plus the first 8 chapters of 3, I can officialy say I am not only interested, but quite satisfied with the way you have done things. Scripture and formating had no detectable errors, and I could also detect no gramatical or spelling errors. The two original characters play out well and have an interesting format. Though, I do begin to believe the use of a,"self serving individual that takes care of themselves only as a guise for a weak self concious and/or uncertain self center" is begining to be a bit overused. However I see no real way around that since nearly all ideas retaining to literiture have already been thought of and used, leaving the only choice to use the same format again with a personal twist.

You have several pairings listed in the title which neither character has even appeared yet, although as it is early in this work I would assume that has already been planned out. It is interesting that you preplanned the sequels, something I have not seen very often, if at all. The homosexual illumination does not bother me, I am neither for it or against it,(No I'm not bi-sexual, I am adequatly based in my heterosexualness that these things do not have any effect on my psyche), so wether or not you have homosexual intercourse is completely youre choice, well, you being the author it was anyways, but you understand what I mean.

I will be looking foreward to further updates on this literiture.
This is CrazyIvan signing off for now, good luck and godspeed...

Oh dear, I forgot a few things...
First off I have somethings to discuss with the other reviewers, but since this is a review not a forum, I will limit it strictly to the very basic thoughts.

Fisrt off: Subject Emeralds
Personaly I do not care how many or of what type they may or may not appear in.
The chaos emeralds are not "ultimate power" they are very powerful yes, but it is because of their power they are labeled "ultimate" it is only an exageration, not a fact.
Secondly: Original Characters
While I do agree that alot of times OCs are made to be superior to the serires character, the distaseful tone you hinted at forces me to point out the following. Some OC's created to be near perfect or perfect are not bad for the story. Take example Lord Vahakran (Vladranov), although practicly a god, it is absolutley neutral, plus he dresses spiffy.

Vladranov: Leave me out of this you twit, these are you matters, not mine.

Yeah, will do, anyways yes, alot of times people have characters that are uber powerful and just wail on others and other pwnage, there are some authors,(Like me), who have worthwhile characters of such power that I take slight offense to your comment.

Climax/Overall antagonist goal:
The supervillian ruling the earth is very very clithe, but since i assume you already have everything done up, and you obviously are set with your work, I just hope it doesn't subtract from the greatness this fiction could be.

Thank you for your cooperation, this is CrazyIvan, signing off for real now, good luck, and godspeed...

Hi me again *wave's then drop's to my knee's.* please, please, please do a K/T see there pairing is great but a scene between them would just be the cherry ontop really it would. and I'm going to ask every chapter that passes that I dont get to read one. *grinn's widely.*

Ah...this is a good chapter. Mirage and Espio...my heart stopped when they kissed. Seriously. It did. And about Tails being gay and all the people complaing? Who gives a shit. It's your story, do with it as you please. I just wonder why people can't understand that. I really can't wait until chapter 9. Until then, I'll be waiting.

Now the story is making progress. Adrian Inaba is right, Espio and Mirage are going to have one ugly mother fucking kid. -thinks about a mix between a chameleon and a cat- Yikes. chapter 8 score= 3.5 out of 5. A thought came to my mind during the time that Espio kissed Mirage. Wouldn't Espio's 5 inch horn get in the way? Wouldn't it poke Mirage's eye out or something? The time for me to go has come once again, but before I go, -turns to Adrian Inaba- if you fucking flip me off again, I'm going to take a pair of pliers and break your fucking finger off! Oh, and go back to school and learn to spell before you leave another review, you spell like a fucking 8 year old! Oh wait, you probably are an 8 year old! -flips Adrian Inaba off and leaves-