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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hey I'm review ch 19. Ive been reading you story and its good. But i was jw and agreeing with that other guy,ru going make ryu like some family man now or sumthing? :/ just from seeing his reaction and all.
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January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Dude, this story is just... sinfull. The debauchery is legendary. You put (somewhat) of a face on each character and you really run the gamut of sexual positions, ideas and creativity. You, my good man, deserve a medal for this writing. However, the story is stretching really thin. Add some more meat, since that is why most serious readers will remember this story.
Kudos! And have 500 cookies!
Kudos! And have 500 cookies!
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December 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ouch, Ryu was THIS close...
and the "Evil Kasumi" finds out about his sexual prowess. Could it be some of DOATEC thinks that the man who beat Murai would make a good father for the child of Kasumi's clone?
Or that Ryu Hayabusa's DNA would be good for a male clone?
Kasumi has hers, so why not give "her" a "husband"?
and the "Evil Kasumi" finds out about his sexual prowess. Could it be some of DOATEC thinks that the man who beat Murai would make a good father for the child of Kasumi's clone?
Or that Ryu Hayabusa's DNA would be good for a male clone?
Kasumi has hers, so why not give "her" a "husband"?
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December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good story. It was so well written that when I finished the infamous Epilogue/Chapter8, I couldn't help but want for you to somehow right a more elaborate version. You seem more than able writing Ryu with multiple partners as seen in the Hitomi/LeiFang chapter so if possible make one with the details you hinted at in the Epilogue.
More power and hopefully we'll see more of this story from you.
More power and hopefully we'll see more of this story from you.
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December 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Man that was good. Do u think u might be able to write the scene where Ayane and Kasumi make love to each other? If u can that would awesome and really hot!
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December 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice series you have, Tycho, I'm impressed.
But the question is begged, what do you do for an encore? Perhaps a "gold-and-silver" pairing of Helena and Christie where Ryu tries to do them both right, or the "sister act" of Kasumi and Ayane?
He might run into Zack and Bass, who tell the ninja to "do right with their ladies by them" or they'll give him a grade-A beat-down--and Tina and Lisa aka "La Mariposa" will join in:P
I also look to see what comes up next:)
Scalon
But the question is begged, what do you do for an encore? Perhaps a "gold-and-silver" pairing of Helena and Christie where Ryu tries to do them both right, or the "sister act" of Kasumi and Ayane?
He might run into Zack and Bass, who tell the ninja to "do right with their ladies by them" or they'll give him a grade-A beat-down--and Tina and Lisa aka "La Mariposa" will join in:P
I also look to see what comes up next:)
Scalon
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December 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I wished the Lisa chapter was together with Tina. I love two sluts geting what they deserve
Keep Goin you are great
Keep Goin you are great
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November 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is really good and I would love to see more. If you need suggestions, I have few in mind.
1. We have only been given ideas of what KasumiXRyuXAyane is like, could you write out something.
2. Suppose that Lisa decides that she wants more and enters in her DOA4 attire, though Ryu would obviously know.
3. Perhaps Kasumi did not manage to completely destroy her last clone (Alpha something, forgot number) and the exceedingly powerful nemesis of DOA4 comes seeking satisfaction.
4. Did Ninja Gaiden ever confirm Alma's fate, considering that scene of Rachel holding her as she opens her eyes as a complete human. Considering Rachel is present, perhaps the other sister would like to offer her gratitude for exocising her, albiet in such a painful manner.
5. Having not succeeded in the mission mode, I could be wrong, but was there not some other humanoid female great fiend that was not in the primary game that you have to defeat in NG:Black?
6. Christie and Helena obviously have a twisted relationship, why not somehow incorporate the only man in the world that should envy no other.
7. Assuming the whole Volleyball thing has something to do with Zack, perhaps you could incorporate his trophy girlfriend. In spite of the fact that absolutely nothing is really known about her.
That is all I have at the moment, although I just really want to see you do more.
1. We have only been given ideas of what KasumiXRyuXAyane is like, could you write out something.
2. Suppose that Lisa decides that she wants more and enters in her DOA4 attire, though Ryu would obviously know.
3. Perhaps Kasumi did not manage to completely destroy her last clone (Alpha something, forgot number) and the exceedingly powerful nemesis of DOA4 comes seeking satisfaction.
4. Did Ninja Gaiden ever confirm Alma's fate, considering that scene of Rachel holding her as she opens her eyes as a complete human. Considering Rachel is present, perhaps the other sister would like to offer her gratitude for exocising her, albiet in such a painful manner.
5. Having not succeeded in the mission mode, I could be wrong, but was there not some other humanoid female great fiend that was not in the primary game that you have to defeat in NG:Black?
6. Christie and Helena obviously have a twisted relationship, why not somehow incorporate the only man in the world that should envy no other.
7. Assuming the whole Volleyball thing has something to do with Zack, perhaps you could incorporate his trophy girlfriend. In spite of the fact that absolutely nothing is really known about her.
That is all I have at the moment, although I just really want to see you do more.
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October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Truly are masterpice!! I like how you portraited the girls and their interaction with Ruy and their sex scenes. Your talent is beyond comparison, dont stop now!
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October 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Three thoughts came to mind as I read this: I wish I could write this good, this is really hot, and this is funny as hell. And then I made a full circuit and came back around to wishing I could write this good. I would have to say my favorite chapter was the Kasumi one, which, for all the intricate and graphic sex, was very powerful on an emotional level. I would really like to see more of Kasumi and Ryu, perhaps even expanding on the flashback to their youth that was briefly touched upon. That was some really deeply felt and moving stuff in their chapter. And funny. And hot. And damn, but I wish I could write this good.
Actually, now that I think about it, just write anything to do with DOA. Any pairing. Any amount of girls. More bonus levels, please. I'll read it. You're that good. Thanks for sharing this story.
Actually, now that I think about it, just write anything to do with DOA. Any pairing. Any amount of girls. More bonus levels, please. I'll read it. You're that good. Thanks for sharing this story.