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January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
LOL You really do have a talent for writing these types of stories. I think you hit the right balance between erotic and amusing with your Ryu & Ayane training chapter (XD @ Ayane's physical prowess). I'm beginning to see an Elliot spin-off and hopefully you'll add Christie to Elliot's goals and not Ayane.
Please do a chapter with Hayabusa exploring his physical limits with 3 women at the same time. You really nailed threesomes (Ryu/Hitomi/Leifang and Ryu/Kasumi/Ayane) with your writing style and hopefully you can answer my challenge. More power.
Please do a chapter with Hayabusa exploring his physical limits with 3 women at the same time. You really nailed threesomes (Ryu/Hitomi/Leifang and Ryu/Kasumi/Ayane) with your writing style and hopefully you can answer my challenge. More power.
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January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Somehow I see this stepping away from Ryu and turning towards Elliot.
The Elliot/Hitomi pairing really just seems to click with people considering all things, although you should probably attempt to include Christie at some point in all the chaos. Considering you have played DOA4 as Elliot, you should know the rather provocative shit she says to him which has spawned a number of theories and stories.
Love = Hitomi
Lust = Christie
Keep writing!
The Elliot/Hitomi pairing really just seems to click with people considering all things, although you should probably attempt to include Christie at some point in all the chaos. Considering you have played DOA4 as Elliot, you should know the rather provocative shit she says to him which has spawned a number of theories and stories.
Love = Hitomi
Lust = Christie
Keep writing!
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January 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I agree with omega.
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January 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Could you give a writers commentary on the late chapters and a story note, because the story is going deeper then just sexual encounters with the DOA girls.
Chapter 19 is my favorite!
Chapter 19 is my favorite!
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January 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
the lack of oral sex (with one exception, which you admitted was an after-thought) really ruined it for me. Oral sex doesn't have to be dirty or demeaning, in fact, us girls like giving it just as much as some guys like getting it. Overall not bad, but from what I've read so far of yours I'm sure you can do even better
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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Definitely the finest work I have ever read. Highly reccommended.
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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Dear god!!! Chapter 19 was breathtaking!!! I liked the begining conversation with Tina and Ryu.
Since Ruy is going to be a father it would be a shame if Tina and Lisa dont get a little to close and personal on their wrestling tour "wink"
Since Ruy is going to be a father it would be a shame if Tina and Lisa dont get a little to close and personal on their wrestling tour "wink"
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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Isnt Ryu gonna have 2 kids now since he got helena pregnant too?
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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I like chapter 19 but I you going turn this into story so that Ryu becomes some like cheesy family guy, cuz thats gonna suck.
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January 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
good story btw