rate_review Reviews

Let me start by saying:

Wow. Simply wonderful. I have to applaud you my good sir on what you have accomplished here today. Perusing these unhallowed, carnal pages of AFF.net, I am loathe to admit that I have lowered my standards to accommodate simple and every day smut. But you have gone beyond that. You have crafted a masterpiece, worthy of praise for its sheer girth.

But I feel I must give you my congratulations on a greater matter. It is rare that I find I read here for plot rather than the erotica. You have accomplished a truly titanic trial: you have made it so that I want to know what happens next. Not out of some sense of perversity, not out of some vivacious curiosity that demands lo-brau satisfaction, but out of honest wanting to know the end of the story. Congratulations! Congratulations! Congratulations! Congratu-

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Sorry, I think I just had an Evangelion acid trip there.

Personally, man to man, I was rather fond of...

AGH! OH GOD! IT'S HAPPENING! RUN! RUN! IF YOU VALUE YOUR LIFE, RUN! I CAN'T HOLD IT BACK! THE DAEMON IS UNLEASHED!

hihi!!! UR GONNA WRITE MORE RITE?!!! taht is so KEWL!! you sould change the endin!!! ur da best! --ME!!!!!!

Damn you! Back! Back to the City of Seven Sins where you belong!

Ahem.

Sorry about that. I'm sure you understand that we all have inner demons. I have an inner l33t speaking review writer. It is a vile and loathsome creature. Pity it. Pity the world if I lose control of it.

Now, as I was saying, you are truly worthy of commendation in that you accomplished a rare and wondrous thing. Speaking bluntly, most material at AFF.net is erotica based on pre-conceived plot. You have formed a plot, nay, an epic, around erotica. That's going to be hard to beat.

I must ask though, in all seriousness, about an ending. Just how exactly is this little menagie trois between Ryu, Ayune, and Kasumi going to work in the future? I mean, yes they are young now and can afford such dalliances, but what about when a family comes in? What about the rest of life beyond this youth? And unpleasant thing to consider, but something you might want to consider when you feel the need to close the black curtain, if you catch me.

Rest assured though, when I conquer the known multiverse as Ravanna and rest in my palace on the Plane of War, I shall be sure to promote you as head erotic scribe.

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On a final note, what are you going to do about Ninja Gaiden 2 and its release?

My favorite couple! Well written and descriptive base solely on two individuals sharing the same conscience. Ryu's world is darker had Helena felt his loneliness compare to hers, they would not have something in common....

Too bad, the other DOA ladies(Mostly the kunochi girls...) will be extremely jealous. Ryu and Helena must keep their relationship a secret. Heres hoping for more intimate relationship with them.

As for naming the little boy...Kenneth "Ken" Fame Douglas comes to mind...:)

Stand corrected...Joseph Fame Douglas would be best (in the DOA/NG continuum, Joe, not Ken, was the name of Ryu's father), and nobody would be the wiser.

And Ryu finds the second of his blood in the most recent chapter:) Helena asked Ryu to give her a heir, and he did so. And while others might believe Helena's son sired by nobility, she knows he was made from love of a far more noble and honorable man above the ones nobility can ever bring.

He then gets to reaffirm his love for Helena, who knows if another child might come (an "oops baby")?

I notcied that you covered all 10 most important females and dedicated a chapter to each of them with the exception of Kasumi,Ayane and Rachel who shared one and Hitomi who still hasn't gotten her own chapter in the Beat Build series. It's pretty much safe to say Ayane,Kausmi and Rachel won't get one chapter each at this point correct? You'll see to it that gets taken care of it right? Christie and Helena don't appear to have a man to take care of all of their needs like the others do. Tina and Lisa have each other. Who's the lord that gets to pretend that he's the daddy.

Apprently Helena wasn't confortable having Kokoro take over her father's company and so she and Ryu had a baby though it's for a good cause and possibly something they both desired. How much longer before this fic comes to a satisfying conclusion?
Leon,Hayate and Bayman don't have permanant female lovers but at the very least they're getting some.

Now with Ninja Gaiden II finally out will you be doing anythign with that? If you could may I suggest Hayate hooking up with Sonia.

Peace

The more I see of this, the more I enjoy it:)

The Expansion Pack was Eliot's "coming of age" as he tries to get out of the dojo and into the world. His quest by Zack to find Ryu Hayabusa and pick his brain shows how far he's willing to go to do it. And the adventures along the way enrich him.

The Beta Build was a great chance for a lot of the women to get a second man in their lives besides Ryu. Lisa finally got to show her feelings for Hayate, Leifang got to resolve hers towards Jann Lee, Christie found Bayman to be from her own style, and Kokoro enjoys the randy company of Brad Wong.

It also developed Rachel some more as she decides she wants in on Hayabusa...and the hentai world he's part of. First by jumping him in Vigoor, then by tossing in with the ninja sisters at the oasis.

One does wonder what the reunion with those three with Hayabusa would be like...and that "someone we both should see" Christie mentions to him too.

Scalon

good job on the story but can you have rachel have sex with ayane or Helena have sex with ayane?

Not exactlt what I was hoping for,but good enough. So Rachel has nwo been invited and accepted into Ryu's personal harem. Just two questions. Are you going to wrap up this massive beast of a story in the next chapter or do you still have plans on extending this? Have you checked put Ninja Gaiden Dragon Sword yet? Ryu gets a female portegge named Momoji who happens to be the sister of Kurena. And recenty annoucned in NG2 a girl named Sonia was revealed.

Who happens to be blonde. So much for getting over Rachel.

Great story and I can't to hear how's Hayabusa-sama is going to react.