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October 12, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ch.60
I know this is your story man and I'm actually for Zack becoming Ryu's replacement in the RRXXX contest but are really going to break up Ryu and Tina? Seems like a waste considering all the effort you put in past chapters insinuating that there's more to it than spectacular sex between Ryu and Tina. Come to think of you also had Christie say something along the lines of Ryu making her feel like settling down (Ch.14) but turned out to be a red herring...
So... sibling threesome next time? Kasumi walking in on Ayane already riding Hayate and joining in? Go for it.
I know this is your story man and I'm actually for Zack becoming Ryu's replacement in the RRXXX contest but are really going to break up Ryu and Tina? Seems like a waste considering all the effort you put in past chapters insinuating that there's more to it than spectacular sex between Ryu and Tina. Come to think of you also had Christie say something along the lines of Ryu making her feel like settling down (Ch.14) but turned out to be a red herring...
So... sibling threesome next time? Kasumi walking in on Ayane already riding Hayate and joining in? Go for it.
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September 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good little filler chapter. Now I'm curious if this Dragon Essence and it spreading around is really such a good idea. I mean I guess as long as they keep it with close friends, confidantes, and lovers it is OK. But Torchwood: Miracle Day sort of explored that things would get quite rough if everyone on earth suddenly became immortal. Well I guess not typically immortal since according to this story, people can still die or be killed in battle even with the Dragon Essence.
It looked like Tycho had read some feedback and took it into account with the most recent chapter. I guess that's alright. We hear from Tycho so little these days and he doesn't provide his end of chapter commentary anymore, it is hard to figure out what he thinks or where he was wanting to go with certain choices.
Tycho I do very much appreciate how quick the updates on these last two chapters have been. I love the story so its been great to see the quicker updates and things are definitely progressing and moving along. I'm looking forward to seeing how Reiko works out as Ryu's new addition to his harem. Reiko might be a wrestler, but I imagine experts like Kasumi and Ayane could teach her a few things about fighting and self-defense . . . and sensual techniques too :) .
It looked like Tycho had read some feedback and took it into account with the most recent chapter. I guess that's alright. We hear from Tycho so little these days and he doesn't provide his end of chapter commentary anymore, it is hard to figure out what he thinks or where he was wanting to go with certain choices.
Tycho I do very much appreciate how quick the updates on these last two chapters have been. I love the story so its been great to see the quicker updates and things are definitely progressing and moving along. I'm looking forward to seeing how Reiko works out as Ryu's new addition to his harem. Reiko might be a wrestler, but I imagine experts like Kasumi and Ayane could teach her a few things about fighting and self-defense . . . and sensual techniques too :) .
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September 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
A clever way to add Bass to all the tension and drama. Dixie is a good choice since she's basically Rumble Roses Tina(you have even misspelled Tina for Dixie in couple of lines) ,and Bass being obsessed with Tina to the point of physical attraction makes sense since that's his doa storyline. Nothing wrong also if you make Bass x Tina sex scene, there's ton of doa ninja incest fiction.
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September 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The age-old question: What happens when you catch your best friend humping your father, even if she gave him life-giving gifts that made him be reset to his prime and then some?
That's the big question Tina might need to deal with Dixie and Bass. Bass was a lonely man and a tough customer, and no doubt there was a "Texan Connection" there. And anyone who could refuse to notice Dixie is either taken, uninterested or dead:P
And the fact that your biggest fan gave you, the fading star, more fuel to keep burning bright, that helps make you realize she's one to keep hold of.
Of course, there IS the age-old concern: if Dixie's having sex with Bass, what might Tina's fear she's going to possibly call her best friend "Mom" come to pass? Though of course, with Sergeant Clemets having "got her man" then having gotten to enjoy him--that's going to be one case of original badass Bass riding busty blonde badass Dixie :P
Of course, with Reiko now "part of the family" she's willing to help with child care--showing sometimes when others step up to save your collective lives from evil, taking care of figurative nieces and nephews is a VERY small price to pay in comparison.
These two chapters were a 1-2 shot that really hit the spot. Really makes a story buzz with life and vitality, though the Tina-Bass-Dixie angle just got VERY more interesting. As I'd mentioned, Dad's been a lonely man and your best friend's his biggest fan...so when she gives your Dad her best, ticklish is a mild way of putting it.
And of course, one almost wonders if Christie had Bayman and Leon as part of a "sandwich" :P The Dragon Essence boosting Christie's libido to taking to men with "big guns" after a ninja with long sword--yes, she's being hungry indeed:P
That's the big question Tina might need to deal with Dixie and Bass. Bass was a lonely man and a tough customer, and no doubt there was a "Texan Connection" there. And anyone who could refuse to notice Dixie is either taken, uninterested or dead:P
And the fact that your biggest fan gave you, the fading star, more fuel to keep burning bright, that helps make you realize she's one to keep hold of.
Of course, there IS the age-old concern: if Dixie's having sex with Bass, what might Tina's fear she's going to possibly call her best friend "Mom" come to pass? Though of course, with Sergeant Clemets having "got her man" then having gotten to enjoy him--that's going to be one case of original badass Bass riding busty blonde badass Dixie :P
Of course, with Reiko now "part of the family" she's willing to help with child care--showing sometimes when others step up to save your collective lives from evil, taking care of figurative nieces and nephews is a VERY small price to pay in comparison.
These two chapters were a 1-2 shot that really hit the spot. Really makes a story buzz with life and vitality, though the Tina-Bass-Dixie angle just got VERY more interesting. As I'd mentioned, Dad's been a lonely man and your best friend's his biggest fan...so when she gives your Dad her best, ticklish is a mild way of putting it.
And of course, one almost wonders if Christie had Bayman and Leon as part of a "sandwich" :P The Dragon Essence boosting Christie's libido to taking to men with "big guns" after a ninja with long sword--yes, she's being hungry indeed:P
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September 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Much better. Thank you for avoiding going into too much graphic details with the Christie,Bayman, and Leon threesome. Me and the other reviewers that weren't too fond of two guys drilling a woman are rather pleased for that decision.
Oh I see what you did there with Reiko stating what I said about my objection to her being a part of the harem and not being able to defend should the fiends and greater fiends start showing up.
Well Ryu Hayabusa you do have a fine point,but at least Rachel was able to pay back the favor by saving your behind from being consumed in lava. That's the best Reiko can do;being reduced to a babysitter. Good to know she knows her place.
Giving all of the males a power they can barely comphrend and understand its uses not to mention why is exactly Bayonetta allowing this to occur without incident. Nothing possibly can go wrong with that. /sarcasm
The two Texans hooked up I see Dixie Clements and Bass Armstrong. That makes sense taking into account all the factors of their bonding.
But that is going to make things very awkward for Tina and Dixie. I mean it's one thing to be best friends with someone who is screwing your old man,but when the woman in question looks a lot like yourself,your dad has a sick obsession with you that goes beyond normal father/daughter bonding, and his wife had died,that's a recipe for disaster.
I hope to God you don't ever plan on having father and daughter having sex with each other. I don't need that mental image in my mind. While I am not exactly one to shy away from incest as Ayane/Kasumi is one of my favorite Dead Or Alive pairings,that type of incest is just all sorts of wrong. I shouldn't have to tell you that in real life that type of shit is disturbing and usually leads to rape. Plus Tina does not like her father in that way.
Also please no pregnant fucking. Let this be one of the few lemons on this site without any of that gross fetish shit.
Oh I see what you did there with Reiko stating what I said about my objection to her being a part of the harem and not being able to defend should the fiends and greater fiends start showing up.
Well Ryu Hayabusa you do have a fine point,but at least Rachel was able to pay back the favor by saving your behind from being consumed in lava. That's the best Reiko can do;being reduced to a babysitter. Good to know she knows her place.
Giving all of the males a power they can barely comphrend and understand its uses not to mention why is exactly Bayonetta allowing this to occur without incident. Nothing possibly can go wrong with that. /sarcasm
The two Texans hooked up I see Dixie Clements and Bass Armstrong. That makes sense taking into account all the factors of their bonding.
But that is going to make things very awkward for Tina and Dixie. I mean it's one thing to be best friends with someone who is screwing your old man,but when the woman in question looks a lot like yourself,your dad has a sick obsession with you that goes beyond normal father/daughter bonding, and his wife had died,that's a recipe for disaster.
I hope to God you don't ever plan on having father and daughter having sex with each other. I don't need that mental image in my mind. While I am not exactly one to shy away from incest as Ayane/Kasumi is one of my favorite Dead Or Alive pairings,that type of incest is just all sorts of wrong. I shouldn't have to tell you that in real life that type of shit is disturbing and usually leads to rape. Plus Tina does not like her father in that way.
Also please no pregnant fucking. Let this be one of the few lemons on this site without any of that gross fetish shit.
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September 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Well that was interesting.
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September 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Was kinda hoping that the 8 months sex chamber marathon with Ryu and Tina would end out as something epic considering the history between the two. Not that the story progress and sex is bad but when there’s a description given about 8 month long sex and then leaving it as it is sort of a child’s play for them it does give an over the top feeling.
To tell the truth Ryu & Tina is and has been my main interest of the story, and five years ago If someone mentioned to me a pairing of them I would without a doubt laugh it out hard even though they are top favorites. I mean Tina is is a famous starlet, overly ambitious,kinda arrogant,proud of her sex appeal and skills, on the other hand there’s Hayabusa who is stoic, stern and with a strong sense of duty and justice. And you match them perfectly with their in game attitude: sex, conversation, this whole ninja roses story is their creation. In wrestling terms that would be put them in a rivalry because they work great together. A negative explanation would be Lisa and Anastasia being sisters, I’m reading it but not diggin it, believe in it for plot!
Still hoping that’s they have pregnant sex with Tina’s baby bump getting bigger and bigger over time, as pregnant sex is a beautiful thing.
To tell the truth Ryu & Tina is and has been my main interest of the story, and five years ago If someone mentioned to me a pairing of them I would without a doubt laugh it out hard even though they are top favorites. I mean Tina is is a famous starlet, overly ambitious,kinda arrogant,proud of her sex appeal and skills, on the other hand there’s Hayabusa who is stoic, stern and with a strong sense of duty and justice. And you match them perfectly with their in game attitude: sex, conversation, this whole ninja roses story is their creation. In wrestling terms that would be put them in a rivalry because they work great together. A negative explanation would be Lisa and Anastasia being sisters, I’m reading it but not diggin it, believe in it for plot!
Still hoping that’s they have pregnant sex with Tina’s baby bump getting bigger and bigger over time, as pregnant sex is a beautiful thing.
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August 29, 2011 at 12:00 AM
The story is fiction and its fun so I don't take it too seriously. It is very well written and in terms of well written, erotic Ninja Gaiden/Dead or Alive fics, this is the best out there. The ending scene didn't bother me too much. We know that Christie is bit of a vampy seductress and she's slept with other guys. I mean did I think it was one of the best scenes in the series? No. But I hardly thought it sucked.
Quicker turnaround for this chapter so I definitely appreciated that. I wonder where the story goes from here but I hope it continues. Reiko can always be trained into a better fighter, she's a young woman.
My only critiques over the last two chapters is that I kind've would've liked to have heard or scene Tina's reaction to her dad's conversation with Ryu. And I still think Ryu being stuck in a chamber with Tina for a year having sex nonstop is a little too much and way over the top. Even for this story.
Quicker turnaround for this chapter so I definitely appreciated that. I wonder where the story goes from here but I hope it continues. Reiko can always be trained into a better fighter, she's a young woman.
My only critiques over the last two chapters is that I kind've would've liked to have heard or scene Tina's reaction to her dad's conversation with Ryu. And I still think Ryu being stuck in a chamber with Tina for a year having sex nonstop is a little too much and way over the top. Even for this story.
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August 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I am amazed and in shock that you are still at it. In my opinion,this lemon was totally over at chapter 33:Beat Build Gone Gold with Alpha-152 and Beta-117's defeat.
How do you top a 10 women orgy? With double the amount of women making it 20. This may sound hypocritical and I don't care that anyone is bothered by my comment,but I am not a fan of such huge orgies as it takes away the intimacy from the couples established up to this point. i.e Hitomi/Elliot,Kokoro/Brad Wong,Lisa/Tina, and so on.
There are other ways to mix things up. Plus most men aren't exactly cool with letting another guy fuck their girlfriend. I forgave it during the Encounter segments as it was part of the story and even tolerated it with the Bonus Levels as I assumed that it was the final time Hayabusa Ryu would be sleeping with the ladies of the other men as he has his own.
So now Reiko is joining Ryu Hayabusa's private harem with Kasumi,Ayane, and Rachel?
I'm not too pleased with that decision along with Tina having Ryu's baby and her getting close to him,but hey it's your lemon not mine. The reason is Reiko would be useless against an attack by the fiends and is barely able to defend herself any better than Irene Lew. I am not a huge fan of Tina Armstrong as she is way too airheaded and silly for Ryu Hayabusa.
I plead with you that you skip over the scene with Leon,Bayman, and Christie come next chapter. I agree with Eat Shiet And Diet,King Kong,Harem Lover 1967, and WTF MAN that we came here to read about Ryu's exploits and for the most part we don't care about the other men in Dead Or Alive. Not to mention that threesomes with guys and a girl is not exactly something that is appealing and erotic in my view. It's not sexy in porn and it sure as hell ain't sexy in lemons.
It totally killed the flow of the chapter and ruined it.
I take it now that it is time for the other men of the Dead Or Alive tournament to receive the Dragon Essence.
You haven't seen the movie "Highlander" have you? To kill an immoral,you must cut off their head. I was expecting a reference to this legendary film since at this Ryu and the other women are now immoral.
Dante from Devil May Cry must be pissed that Ryu Hayabusa got to Bayonetta before he could as they make an excellent pair. Not that I am asking nicely for you to insert the cast from Devil May Cry or anything like that,but simply voicing my thoughts aloud.
Well here's to passing the 25 and 50 chapter mark. Congratulations!! Are you going to go for 75 next?
How do you top a 10 women orgy? With double the amount of women making it 20. This may sound hypocritical and I don't care that anyone is bothered by my comment,but I am not a fan of such huge orgies as it takes away the intimacy from the couples established up to this point. i.e Hitomi/Elliot,Kokoro/Brad Wong,Lisa/Tina, and so on.
There are other ways to mix things up. Plus most men aren't exactly cool with letting another guy fuck their girlfriend. I forgave it during the Encounter segments as it was part of the story and even tolerated it with the Bonus Levels as I assumed that it was the final time Hayabusa Ryu would be sleeping with the ladies of the other men as he has his own.
So now Reiko is joining Ryu Hayabusa's private harem with Kasumi,Ayane, and Rachel?
I'm not too pleased with that decision along with Tina having Ryu's baby and her getting close to him,but hey it's your lemon not mine. The reason is Reiko would be useless against an attack by the fiends and is barely able to defend herself any better than Irene Lew. I am not a huge fan of Tina Armstrong as she is way too airheaded and silly for Ryu Hayabusa.
I plead with you that you skip over the scene with Leon,Bayman, and Christie come next chapter. I agree with Eat Shiet And Diet,King Kong,Harem Lover 1967, and WTF MAN that we came here to read about Ryu's exploits and for the most part we don't care about the other men in Dead Or Alive. Not to mention that threesomes with guys and a girl is not exactly something that is appealing and erotic in my view. It's not sexy in porn and it sure as hell ain't sexy in lemons.
It totally killed the flow of the chapter and ruined it.
I take it now that it is time for the other men of the Dead Or Alive tournament to receive the Dragon Essence.
You haven't seen the movie "Highlander" have you? To kill an immoral,you must cut off their head. I was expecting a reference to this legendary film since at this Ryu and the other women are now immoral.
Dante from Devil May Cry must be pissed that Ryu Hayabusa got to Bayonetta before he could as they make an excellent pair. Not that I am asking nicely for you to insert the cast from Devil May Cry or anything like that,but simply voicing my thoughts aloud.
Well here's to passing the 25 and 50 chapter mark. Congratulations!! Are you going to go for 75 next?
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August 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Starts out as another great chapter..but the ending completly ruins the entire thing for me...really hated the part about you having christie sleep with leon and bayman, that just sucks in my opinion...if possible could you please change the ending of chapter 58...