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November 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it.
Ah so someone saw that they have an Destiny...so who is life and death...? well Fayt be death and Albel would be life...that would be something new. but it looks like they are getting closer a little. now I wonder if Albel well not get use to having Fayt around him that if Fayt went missing maybe that might anger Albel who knows. but It make me think dose Maria, Mirage or Nel see how much they love one another?...or *Cough* hints. but good work on this one so please do keep up the good work. is there going to be more kissing in the near future? and well Fayt still think as Albel as a child win his soul is not...
tbc...?
Ah so someone saw that they have an Destiny...so who is life and death...? well Fayt be death and Albel would be life...that would be something new. but it looks like they are getting closer a little. now I wonder if Albel well not get use to having Fayt around him that if Fayt went missing maybe that might anger Albel who knows. but It make me think dose Maria, Mirage or Nel see how much they love one another?...or *Cough* hints. but good work on this one so please do keep up the good work. is there going to be more kissing in the near future? and well Fayt still think as Albel as a child win his soul is not...
tbc...?
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww. That was soo cute!! Abel got so mad at the thought of wearing Roger's clothes!! I love it!! It's okay if you take long...I don't mind. I know things take time to develop so if it sounded like i was rushing you, I'm sorry. But there is on thing that I just need to know. Roger has a tail right? Then did Abel have a huge hole in the back of his clothes? Good Luck!! ^~^
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG! the collar and the story. Tis good! *hearts*
Anyway, i do think they are IC. Fayt would always go outof his way to care for someone even if it was a bastard liek albel. I mean, he's done it before with all of albel's lava cave angst. And albel has serious repressed emotions so he really could be liek anything on the inside. Also, he keeps complaining about being weak and dependent in your story wich fits in perfectly with his guilt induced post traumatic stress from his father's death. It makes sense. The only thing slightly OC is that Albel couldn't really control himself when he kissed fayt. I think that someone with enough wilpower to repress all his emotions the way albel does would have had more control. However, that could be easily bypassed as a side efect of the potion. so i think it's really good. i lerve your story.
Anyway, i do think they are IC. Fayt would always go outof his way to care for someone even if it was a bastard liek albel. I mean, he's done it before with all of albel's lava cave angst. And albel has serious repressed emotions so he really could be liek anything on the inside. Also, he keeps complaining about being weak and dependent in your story wich fits in perfectly with his guilt induced post traumatic stress from his father's death. It makes sense. The only thing slightly OC is that Albel couldn't really control himself when he kissed fayt. I think that someone with enough wilpower to repress all his emotions the way albel does would have had more control. However, that could be easily bypassed as a side efect of the potion. so i think it's really good. i lerve your story.
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November 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(Wow its a small internet...I never knew you were in the LJ community for AlbelxFayt. I feel like an idot)
Anyway, wow, shopping went smooth. I'm surprised Albel didn't raise more hell, all though the shouting that was heard throughout the town was amusing. ANyway, I'm impressed that you worked in the affects of item making and how the characters feel the boost that we just read off as numbers. Very innovative (sp?). Anyhow, this chapter was well worth the wait. I liked how the towns ppl percieved Fayt as a caring dad. ALot of thins I liked about this chapter, I can't remember all of them though. BUT back tot eh point: I can't wait till Albel get's his body back, it should be interesting. But you can drag out his little kids body for a bit longer....if you want.
Anyway, wow, shopping went smooth. I'm surprised Albel didn't raise more hell, all though the shouting that was heard throughout the town was amusing. ANyway, I'm impressed that you worked in the affects of item making and how the characters feel the boost that we just read off as numbers. Very innovative (sp?). Anyhow, this chapter was well worth the wait. I liked how the towns ppl percieved Fayt as a caring dad. ALot of thins I liked about this chapter, I can't remember all of them though. BUT back tot eh point: I can't wait till Albel get's his body back, it should be interesting. But you can drag out his little kids body for a bit longer....if you want.
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November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved it so far!!!!
I hope you update soon!!!
cant wait to read more of your wounderful story
I hope you update soon!!!
cant wait to read more of your wounderful story
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November 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, this is the first Star Ocean fic I read and it's extremely good!! I believe I got inspired by you. ^_^ Heh, I hope you update soon. And I think it would be best it your read over your story a couple times just t make sure the sentences come out right, some sentences come out weird...and is it "sifting" or "shifting"? Anyways, I just LOOOVE this story. Please update soon. V^_^
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November 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is coming on soooooo good! I cant wait for the next instalment. Please write more! The best part is, that if albel ever did really turn into a child, i think that is exactly how he would act. It's the best thing ever and everyone is still pretty much in charechter! i could even imagine audry's "i like kids" smile. it's awesome!
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November 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Pretty good. There are some grammar error but seeing that English isn't your native language, I'll let it slide.
Its funny that they really didn't get anything done. No progress on the potion either! They should at least analize the potion so they can make an antidote.
Why does Mirage feel sadness when she thinks of Albel and Fayte? Does she like him?
Its funny that they really didn't get anything done. No progress on the potion either! They should at least analize the potion so they can make an antidote.
Why does Mirage feel sadness when she thinks of Albel and Fayte? Does she like him?
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
@_@ Wow Cliff is TEH craziest man....
Anyway, awww, poor little Albel, if Cliff's not trying to kill him, he's nearly killing himself, or not even able to 'enjoy' having Fayt around. Poor dear... I hope he gets his body back soon, not too soon though, because this is great! I love Fayt taking care of Albel, he's such a good parent. ^^
Anyhow, so you didn't get to where you wanted to, everone has days like those, it was still and awesome chapter. Though I think I ran across a few more spelling errors than usual, it wasn't enough to distract you though.
I can't wait for the next chapter. Taking Albel shopping....I wonder how traumatic that's gonna be?
Anyway, awww, poor little Albel, if Cliff's not trying to kill him, he's nearly killing himself, or not even able to 'enjoy' having Fayt around. Poor dear... I hope he gets his body back soon, not too soon though, because this is great! I love Fayt taking care of Albel, he's such a good parent. ^^
Anyhow, so you didn't get to where you wanted to, everone has days like those, it was still and awesome chapter. Though I think I ran across a few more spelling errors than usual, it wasn't enough to distract you though.
I can't wait for the next chapter. Taking Albel shopping....I wonder how traumatic that's gonna be?
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October 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
keep on going its really good ^.^