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This story just keeps getting better and better, is shadow rid of the drugs now? or is the worst yet to come? will gun fall with the info that amy obtained from eggman? will shadow ever marry amy? will sonic finally be forgiven and will the flower shop inccident be forgoten? do I ever shut the hell up? NO! Interesting story though Harley, it makes waiting a week worth it. But waiting so long eats me up inside. You should add more chapters!

I never reviewed for this story before because I always told myself to wait till the end, but I can't seem to help it. When I read you're first story ARAAT it was amazing. I never believed a ShadowxAmy related fanfiction can be done or written so well. My favorite chapters were one and four through six. I even go back and read it from time to time. The only problem I had was the whole Sonic raping Amy thing. Personally I don't believe he could ever do something like that. But I liked how you explained the idea that Sonic’s animalistic side was invoked. Nice!

For part two of ARAAT...Well like I always say "the sequel to a good book is never as great as the first." I understand the need to add extra violence and angst because nothing sweet can last forever. I was expecting ShadowxAmy to run into problems with GUN or Eggman eventually but I thought they were more interested in Eclipse, more so then Shadow. After all a child can more easily be tamed.

I hate to say this, oh I really do, but ARAAT2 is not as entertaining as the first. It does has its moments and I still remain a faithful reader but I don't feel the same dramatic moments it once had...There isn’t enough sex. I'm just kidding...Half kidding.

Well to rap up this review I would just like to say that your first story did inspire me write a adult Sonic fiction of my own. It may not be as popular like yours . It’s about Shadow and Sally, not the most popular pairing right now. And I seriously doubt I could make the sex scenes as sizzling as ARAAT, but god help me I'm going to try.

-Till next time Harley and Froggy, much love.

Oops, I thought I was logged in, but the Anonymous person for the previous was me Miss. Anonymous. Sorry.

Chao as test subjects? Damn...

The odds are definitely not in Shadow's favor in the moment, especially given his eerie hallucingetic vision from the previous chapter. You had me so convinced he had done Amy in until near the end of the chapter.

And god, of all the people that she could have asked to escort her for the rendevous with Eggman, why Sonic? Given Shadow's state of mind, he should probably be one of the last few people she speaks to; Shadow is floating between her love and visions of her being unfaithful with Sonic helping out.

And from the looks of it, I doubt any of this is going to be resolved and happy dandy in the next chapter. But that makes for a good read, so keep up the good work. :D

Well, this chapter did fill in the info Amy needs about Shadow. I wonder what will happen to him.
Another twist in the story I say. Lets just hope Shadow makes it out ok, but knowing you guys, that might be a problem. :P

Pretty damn good fic, the best Sonic one on AFF, although you really don't have much competition in that regard. It's suspenseful, at times moving, and its sex scenes avoid being gross like most of the other ones on AFF. With that aside, I will pull out my red pen and start analyzing.
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First off, you sure like it dark. Very, very, very dark. And just when I think it can't get worse, it does. This isn't just a dark fic, this is a slit-your-wrists-and-watch-the-blood-drain-out dark fic. But at the same time it avoids being wangsty.

The GUN should be toned down a bit. They're soldiers, not evil mustache-twirling supervillains. What they did to Shadow is gratuitously cruel to say the least. It wasn't experimentation, it was pure torture, intended to cause suffering above all else (don't tell me they actually needed all those biopsies and spikes and other brutality to get the information they wanted). Furthermore, the games suggest that the world is ruled by a democratic government with rule of law, which would make the GUN's actions crimes against humanity. Who are these monsters accountable to? Where's the investigations? Where's the press? There should be firings all over the top ranks of the GUN for this outrage.

What works in a game may not work in a story. Don't even bother naming Amy's hammer attacks; just say that she hit someone with her hammer. And (except for Sonic and Shadow's powers, which can't be explained away) try to keep things at least a little realistic. Saying that Amy pulls her hammer out of thin air instead of keeping it somewhere handy nearby breaks suspension of disbelief and drags the reader out of the story. You're writing a fictional narrative, not a video game storyline.

I know you first learned about Sonic through the Fleetway comics, but unless it's Fleetway-based fanfiction, please don't make Sonic an asshole. He might be lazy, full of himself, and a little irresponsible, but he's also very kind and would NEVER hurt his friends (never mind rape them). And besides, since everyone's six years older and Sonic is thus 21 years old, he should have grown up a bit anyway. ANd the idea of Sonic the cutter still doesn't compute, since one of his defining characteristics is an upbeat, positive nature.

You're just killing us with these mysterious people that keep popping up in Shadow's dreams. Who are they? What do they know? What do they want? The teasing makes me itch!

Those criticisms aside, this is a fine story and easily one of the best Sonic fics I've read. I eagerly await the next update.

Ahh, a little pain never hurt anyone now did it?
I'm hoping it'll come down to Super vs Super or Super vs Normal. Just imagine what would happen should Insane Shadow get ahold of the Seven Chaos Emeralds?! IMAGINE IT I SAY! Perhaps have Eclipse go Super and beat the snot out of his dad if Shadow gets to be to much trouble. Think of all the possibilitys!

How come Omega was never in this fic? I can understand why Blaze didn't appear, because she lives in another universe, but Omega was allied specifically with Shadow (and Rouge), and in Shadow the Hedgehog, appeared in Iron Jungle and Lava Shelter. Nothing was ever specified as to what happened to him. Mainly, I'd like to know why he was never invited to visit Amy and Shadow in the hospital.

This is my first review but Harley you definetly already know me. As for the story words cannot describe how awesome this story is. You were born to write, hell I hate reading, I REALLY HATE READING, but your story has me hooked anyway that shows an example of how awesome this story is. I've read the other stories on AFF Secret Affair by kittynakajimax is really good too it's got me attached but it's still not as good as ARAAT1,2, and perhaps 3. One last thing though just to let you know I would have reviewed sooner but the review link didn't work on the main page. Well I guess that's it keep up the good work!

It's been awhile since I saw this. I wish I could have seen it sooner but lets just say I got lost when the site changed.
I just spent the last few hours going threw the last nine chapters and it's turned out very well and I can't wait to hear what comes next. I wonder whats going to happen to Eclipse, he was put threw a lot with GUN, it should have some effect on him soon. And when will Shadow go back to the ARK. It was hinted but hasn't happened yet. Are you saving that for part 3?
Anyway, always good to see yous guys and I hope the next chapter turns out just as great as the last and better.

HeartOfDarkness.