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December 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hi Egnigma
Thanks for your honesty.
I don't think that vore or other fetishes will ever be socilly acceptable in modern society.
every time I look at the news, there is either a woman being raped or a child being raped and asulted and in honesty it makes me sick in my stomach.
Because people look at that and they assume that if people have a fettish or who are different then that means that they must be more likely to commit those crimes.
So in one way, I am an easy target because I have a different story writing style.
Yes and also not everyone will like my stories. I have known that since I realise I had developed my fetishes during my teenage years and when I tried to explain that to a few of my closest friends at school, they thought I was wierd. That was how much it hurt me at the time, but now it has made me stronger and able to realise that not everyone will like my stories.
Plus it not not always women that are eaten by things or sinking into quicksand in my stories. Link has his share of perils too. And also not all of my perils are sexual in nature, in chapter 6, there are a few perils that are not sexual because of the age of the characters at that time when Link looks back at his past life.
When it comes to poeple calling themselves anonymus, I just take their comments like a grain of salt.
No, I don't hate them. I don't hate anyone.
I just hope that people will get on with their lives and move on if they have a problem with something.
And also I think that it is womdeful that women and men have equel rights. So I do support women when it comes to equal rights, but I dont like it when there is a minority group that says "This is offencive" or "You should not right that" all because they look at things the wrong way.
eg. how many people say that christmas offends them just because they follow a different religion.
It just creates a bad example for all those good people out there who follow different religions but who also don't mind other people celebrating christmas even if they don't themelves.
If we are all to live together, we should respect each other no matter how different our believes are.
I may not be a christian but I still go to my bro-in-law's bible study to get to know about religious language, and there was that sheik in my country in October who refered a passage of the Keran to women as meat. (I took that comment and put it in the 6th chapter somewhere)
But what people don't realise that what he said was misinterprited by people and manipulated by the media.
What he was talking about was adultry and NOT women in general.
But even Christianity has a few comments along that same lines about adultry. Bot it can be easily taken the wrong way when the line says "She will try to lure you by the way she dresses..."
That comment was not a problem back 2000 years ago but it can easily be missinterprited in society today because of the way we all, not just women but also men like to get into swimming gear that show off the attractive parts of our bodies.
eg. Link shirtless in Zelda TP when he was practicing Sumo wresteling is an example on how men can look attractive to women.
Sorry about my long comment but I just hope that this controvercy over my style of stories can be over, it's been a year after since I had been on fanfiction.net and not all people hated my stories there too.
Once again Enigma, I thank you on your honesty, it's ok not to like my stories, I'm not forcing you to like them.
It's only the people who always try to tell me not to write stories the way I want them that makes my life a bit hard.
But please, this fighting should stop because I would hate it if anybody else got involved. It is not what the internet was for.
TBone Tony
Thanks for your honesty.
I don't think that vore or other fetishes will ever be socilly acceptable in modern society.
every time I look at the news, there is either a woman being raped or a child being raped and asulted and in honesty it makes me sick in my stomach.
Because people look at that and they assume that if people have a fettish or who are different then that means that they must be more likely to commit those crimes.
So in one way, I am an easy target because I have a different story writing style.
Yes and also not everyone will like my stories. I have known that since I realise I had developed my fetishes during my teenage years and when I tried to explain that to a few of my closest friends at school, they thought I was wierd. That was how much it hurt me at the time, but now it has made me stronger and able to realise that not everyone will like my stories.
Plus it not not always women that are eaten by things or sinking into quicksand in my stories. Link has his share of perils too. And also not all of my perils are sexual in nature, in chapter 6, there are a few perils that are not sexual because of the age of the characters at that time when Link looks back at his past life.
When it comes to poeple calling themselves anonymus, I just take their comments like a grain of salt.
No, I don't hate them. I don't hate anyone.
I just hope that people will get on with their lives and move on if they have a problem with something.
And also I think that it is womdeful that women and men have equel rights. So I do support women when it comes to equal rights, but I dont like it when there is a minority group that says "This is offencive" or "You should not right that" all because they look at things the wrong way.
eg. how many people say that christmas offends them just because they follow a different religion.
It just creates a bad example for all those good people out there who follow different religions but who also don't mind other people celebrating christmas even if they don't themelves.
If we are all to live together, we should respect each other no matter how different our believes are.
I may not be a christian but I still go to my bro-in-law's bible study to get to know about religious language, and there was that sheik in my country in October who refered a passage of the Keran to women as meat. (I took that comment and put it in the 6th chapter somewhere)
But what people don't realise that what he said was misinterprited by people and manipulated by the media.
What he was talking about was adultry and NOT women in general.
But even Christianity has a few comments along that same lines about adultry. Bot it can be easily taken the wrong way when the line says "She will try to lure you by the way she dresses..."
That comment was not a problem back 2000 years ago but it can easily be missinterprited in society today because of the way we all, not just women but also men like to get into swimming gear that show off the attractive parts of our bodies.
eg. Link shirtless in Zelda TP when he was practicing Sumo wresteling is an example on how men can look attractive to women.
Sorry about my long comment but I just hope that this controvercy over my style of stories can be over, it's been a year after since I had been on fanfiction.net and not all people hated my stories there too.
Once again Enigma, I thank you on your honesty, it's ok not to like my stories, I'm not forcing you to like them.
It's only the people who always try to tell me not to write stories the way I want them that makes my life a bit hard.
But please, this fighting should stop because I would hate it if anybody else got involved. It is not what the internet was for.
TBone Tony
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December 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Well ok then, Enigma. You can call me that now, if you hate 'anon' so much. But seriously, the reason I said what I said is because he does suck at writing. Now perhaps I should word it differently so people like yourself won't take it the wrong way. He writes at least half decent when it comes to general writing, like for instance descriptions of the enviroment. But everything his the characters in his stories say, well most of it anyway, is absolutely pathetic. And what I'm getting from his stories, is that he sees women as nothing more than cheap whores who'll have sex with any guy who makes them feel better about themselves.
It makes him seem for one, just really stupid, two, really immature, and three, like a complete loser who has never even spoken to a girl before. You get it now, Enigma? And please, I don't even have a pen name for this site. There are only a few things here I actually give a crap about here, and all the other stuff is just fics that have some of the most disturbing themes you'll ever see. But, I will say its a good thing there's a seperate site for fics like them.
But in any case, you seem to think I'm one of those sad mother fuckers who makes himself feel better by trashing people's work aimlessly. I laugh at thee. My writing, while still unpolished, is a helluva lot better than his, and as time goes on my writing gets better. Alot better His seems to improve slightly, as in he'll learn a new word or two to describe quicksand raping a woman. That was an outright uncensored flame, just so we're clear. If you really think you can gleam much about a person's writing ability from how they flame someone elses story, then you my friend are rather idiotic.
But to restate my opinion, this guy is a complete moron, and he's one of the sickest losers I've ever known to exist. How you could possibly find someone getting eaten alive arousing...I'll never know. And how could you in any way, shape, or form find a woman sinking in quicksand arousing, too? Simple examples of his disturbed self, but good ones to be sure. I mean, unless you're another sick fuck like him then you can't honestly say that's not sick.
And why would I take the time to flame it if I hate it? Well, to try, in vain I suppose, to get him to really go and rethink everything he's ever learned about writing. If you would look, then you would see almost every one of his stories is rated low, and almsot all his reviews say the story in question is crap. When he was on fanfiction.net, he just outright ignored any and every suggestion and helpful tip to improve and cleanup his future writing and present works.
I suppose I still feel there's a tiny glimmer of hope for him, but seeing as how he can't seem to even write a story that sounds like its at least going to have some form of a tangeble plot without sex(though I realized this is adultfanfiction, so it would be in there somewhere, but after the characters go through stuff and whatnot that made it not seem forced and altogether retarded), then I seriously doubt there is hope for him. Not to mention his sex scenes are just...pathetic.
So Enigma, don't jump to someone's defence when you hardly know why they're being attacked in the first place, lest you make an ass of yourself. Though I'm afraid you did, since you seem to think every Anon is the same guy. Its an abrevation for anonymous. Use your brain dumbass.
It makes him seem for one, just really stupid, two, really immature, and three, like a complete loser who has never even spoken to a girl before. You get it now, Enigma? And please, I don't even have a pen name for this site. There are only a few things here I actually give a crap about here, and all the other stuff is just fics that have some of the most disturbing themes you'll ever see. But, I will say its a good thing there's a seperate site for fics like them.
But in any case, you seem to think I'm one of those sad mother fuckers who makes himself feel better by trashing people's work aimlessly. I laugh at thee. My writing, while still unpolished, is a helluva lot better than his, and as time goes on my writing gets better. Alot better His seems to improve slightly, as in he'll learn a new word or two to describe quicksand raping a woman. That was an outright uncensored flame, just so we're clear. If you really think you can gleam much about a person's writing ability from how they flame someone elses story, then you my friend are rather idiotic.
But to restate my opinion, this guy is a complete moron, and he's one of the sickest losers I've ever known to exist. How you could possibly find someone getting eaten alive arousing...I'll never know. And how could you in any way, shape, or form find a woman sinking in quicksand arousing, too? Simple examples of his disturbed self, but good ones to be sure. I mean, unless you're another sick fuck like him then you can't honestly say that's not sick.
And why would I take the time to flame it if I hate it? Well, to try, in vain I suppose, to get him to really go and rethink everything he's ever learned about writing. If you would look, then you would see almost every one of his stories is rated low, and almsot all his reviews say the story in question is crap. When he was on fanfiction.net, he just outright ignored any and every suggestion and helpful tip to improve and cleanup his future writing and present works.
I suppose I still feel there's a tiny glimmer of hope for him, but seeing as how he can't seem to even write a story that sounds like its at least going to have some form of a tangeble plot without sex(though I realized this is adultfanfiction, so it would be in there somewhere, but after the characters go through stuff and whatnot that made it not seem forced and altogether retarded), then I seriously doubt there is hope for him. Not to mention his sex scenes are just...pathetic.
So Enigma, don't jump to someone's defence when you hardly know why they're being attacked in the first place, lest you make an ass of yourself. Though I'm afraid you did, since you seem to think every Anon is the same guy. Its an abrevation for anonymous. Use your brain dumbass.
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December 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You know...
I wonder if there is anybody else who has to put up with this sort of reviews always trying to force me to write something that I don't enjoy.
I have written some stories that don't involve sex, but they can't be found in adultfanfaiction.net because they are not adult stories.
Yes I do admit that I do have an interest in quicksand and other things like snakes and plants and spiders and tentacles. And I do put them intio my stories the way I want to.
But to try and force me to write stories that don't involve the perils that I enjoy writing is like telling Nintendo to design violent MA rated games because they are what sell these days.
Nintendo designs games that THEY want to design and I write stories that I want to write.
Plus if you look at other chapters in this story, even though they do have sex, it is not always about sex.
I can't please everyone.
So please...stop trying to tell me not to write anymore.
I do see your point of view but you are have the wrong idea about me.
My interests and fetishes I only take into my stories and imagination. I never do that sort of thing in real life.
It's like a teenager who loves to play Grand Theft Auto and his mother sees him playing it and she think that her son will grow up being that sort of violent person.
But if he knows that whet he does in Videogames like GTA is only fantasy and he is just a normal good person in real life then that is what many people are like.
We all have out adult imagination, but we need to express it in a way that does not hurt anybody in real life.
That is what I do in my stoires.
I know that bad things happen in my stories, so...? Any great story needs soemthing bad happening or else people will not feel interested in reading it.
If you don't like my stories? Don't read it.
If you want to say something bad about me? Read the whole story before you criticise me.
Or else I will have to remove reviews because of the foul language. There is no need for the F word no matter how bad you might think of the story.
Let's just keep that in fanfiction and keep it out of the reviews.
Also, I may not have a girlfriend but I do have many girl who are friends and some of them like my stories.
Plus what I do with my characters in my stories does not mean I am like that in real life.
Please don't take my stories too seriously.
Although I did say that last year and it seemed that not many listened to me.
So the only thing I have left to say is that I can't please everyone.
TBone Tony
I wonder if there is anybody else who has to put up with this sort of reviews always trying to force me to write something that I don't enjoy.
I have written some stories that don't involve sex, but they can't be found in adultfanfaiction.net because they are not adult stories.
Yes I do admit that I do have an interest in quicksand and other things like snakes and plants and spiders and tentacles. And I do put them intio my stories the way I want to.
But to try and force me to write stories that don't involve the perils that I enjoy writing is like telling Nintendo to design violent MA rated games because they are what sell these days.
Nintendo designs games that THEY want to design and I write stories that I want to write.
Plus if you look at other chapters in this story, even though they do have sex, it is not always about sex.
I can't please everyone.
So please...stop trying to tell me not to write anymore.
I do see your point of view but you are have the wrong idea about me.
My interests and fetishes I only take into my stories and imagination. I never do that sort of thing in real life.
It's like a teenager who loves to play Grand Theft Auto and his mother sees him playing it and she think that her son will grow up being that sort of violent person.
But if he knows that whet he does in Videogames like GTA is only fantasy and he is just a normal good person in real life then that is what many people are like.
We all have out adult imagination, but we need to express it in a way that does not hurt anybody in real life.
That is what I do in my stoires.
I know that bad things happen in my stories, so...? Any great story needs soemthing bad happening or else people will not feel interested in reading it.
If you don't like my stories? Don't read it.
If you want to say something bad about me? Read the whole story before you criticise me.
Or else I will have to remove reviews because of the foul language. There is no need for the F word no matter how bad you might think of the story.
Let's just keep that in fanfiction and keep it out of the reviews.
Also, I may not have a girlfriend but I do have many girl who are friends and some of them like my stories.
Plus what I do with my characters in my stories does not mean I am like that in real life.
Please don't take my stories too seriously.
Although I did say that last year and it seemed that not many listened to me.
So the only thing I have left to say is that I can't please everyone.
TBone Tony
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December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
All I have to say, Anon, is...
Chill the fuck out. If you hate this story so much, then why do you keep reading it? I don't like it. I stopped reading it. But at least I have the balls to be able to just shrug it off and not let it bother me...unlike you, who just blows up at the tip of a hat. Wait, aren't you the same guy who told me that if I didn't like a story that I should just, and I quote, "Fuck off?" Or was that another "anon." There seems to be a bunch of you little shits who don't have the balls to actually use your pen-name when you write these reviews. All I know is, you all oughta shut the fuck up; until I see proof that YOUR writing is any better than this, I'm going to assume that you can't write for shit, and therefore, shouldn't be telling other people their writing sucks, because for all we know, your writing is limited to these little outbursts of yours.
Chill the fuck out. If you hate this story so much, then why do you keep reading it? I don't like it. I stopped reading it. But at least I have the balls to be able to just shrug it off and not let it bother me...unlike you, who just blows up at the tip of a hat. Wait, aren't you the same guy who told me that if I didn't like a story that I should just, and I quote, "Fuck off?" Or was that another "anon." There seems to be a bunch of you little shits who don't have the balls to actually use your pen-name when you write these reviews. All I know is, you all oughta shut the fuck up; until I see proof that YOUR writing is any better than this, I'm going to assume that you can't write for shit, and therefore, shouldn't be telling other people their writing sucks, because for all we know, your writing is limited to these little outbursts of yours.
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December 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
By the way, the term for having a fetish for being eaten alive is called "Vore."
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December 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Dude, I was like, Oh my god, he actually managed to write a story that doesn't revolve around sex! Then you brought up the plant, with them in it. You didn't put any sex at that part, so I figured there was still a chance you were turning over a new leaf. But..."OH NOES! I'M ON FIRE! BUT OH WELL, I CAN DRAG ZELDAS BURNING BODY AWAY AND PUT HER OUT WITHOUT EVEN FEELING PAIN!!!" Yada yada yada...they go to the lake, and they have sex.
I'm just like, what the fuck... Perhaps if you knew anything about women, then you would know that just because a girl starts to open up to you or cry on your shoulder doesn't mean they want to have sex with you! And oh no, "Link, you just shattered my 'barrier' and I screamed in agony but when you asked if you hurt me I said it didn't hurt at all it just felt really good. Right...it really does not feel as good as you seem to think for a girl's first time. There's generally as much pain as there is pleasure, if not more. So get yourself laid and find out how this stuff works, PLEASE!
But I figured you were gonna make them have sex at some random and stupid point anyway, so I just went on thinking you got it over with. Then you make them randomly get kidnapped for no reason, and they have sex again in boiling water. You do realize, that that's not fucking possible? Then there's a uh...a snake. A GOD DAMN SNAKE!!! And we have Link fingering Zelda inside it too. But I thought, ok, as long as he doesn't bring up the instant story killer, we're good.
But you did. "Hey, why am I taller than you Link? OH NOES! Link! We're suddenly standing in quicksand for some random reason!" "REALLY ZELDA!? I didn't think it was possible for quicksand to exist on the beach!" "Oh well, now we're sinking into it. Its to bad, since if we didn't move towards eachother to try and fuck one more time then we would not sink and we could think of a way to get out!" "Oh well! I'd rather have nasty kinky quicksand sex than live and have sex thousands of times in a way that didn't condemn us to look like fucking pathetic ass losers!"
...Do us all a REALLY big favor, and FUCKING REALIZE YOU CANNOT WRITE FOR SHIT! EVERYTHING YOU HAVE EVER WRITTEN IS ABSOLUTE CRAP!!! THE ONLY REASON ANYONE LIKES ANY OF IT, IS BECAUSE THEY'RE JUST AS SICK AND FUCKED UP IN THE HEAD AS YOU ARE!!! You cannot write, and considering you can't write a single damned story that doesn't have a chick getting banged and losing her virginity inside a snake, a plant, or quicksand, you NEVER WILL BE ABLE TO WRITE!!! On top of that, you have NO idea WHATSOEVER how the female mind works. After they're just raped for instance, just because the love of their life saves them DOES NOT mean they want him to fuck them!!! And please, if a girl just met a guy maybe five minutes ago and already told him she loved him, then she obviously doesn't mean it. Get a clue fucktard! There is a word for you, but I can't remember what it is. The fetish for being eaten alive whole or somthing. You might wanna get some help for that.
I'm just like, what the fuck... Perhaps if you knew anything about women, then you would know that just because a girl starts to open up to you or cry on your shoulder doesn't mean they want to have sex with you! And oh no, "Link, you just shattered my 'barrier' and I screamed in agony but when you asked if you hurt me I said it didn't hurt at all it just felt really good. Right...it really does not feel as good as you seem to think for a girl's first time. There's generally as much pain as there is pleasure, if not more. So get yourself laid and find out how this stuff works, PLEASE!
But I figured you were gonna make them have sex at some random and stupid point anyway, so I just went on thinking you got it over with. Then you make them randomly get kidnapped for no reason, and they have sex again in boiling water. You do realize, that that's not fucking possible? Then there's a uh...a snake. A GOD DAMN SNAKE!!! And we have Link fingering Zelda inside it too. But I thought, ok, as long as he doesn't bring up the instant story killer, we're good.
But you did. "Hey, why am I taller than you Link? OH NOES! Link! We're suddenly standing in quicksand for some random reason!" "REALLY ZELDA!? I didn't think it was possible for quicksand to exist on the beach!" "Oh well, now we're sinking into it. Its to bad, since if we didn't move towards eachother to try and fuck one more time then we would not sink and we could think of a way to get out!" "Oh well! I'd rather have nasty kinky quicksand sex than live and have sex thousands of times in a way that didn't condemn us to look like fucking pathetic ass losers!"
...Do us all a REALLY big favor, and FUCKING REALIZE YOU CANNOT WRITE FOR SHIT! EVERYTHING YOU HAVE EVER WRITTEN IS ABSOLUTE CRAP!!! THE ONLY REASON ANYONE LIKES ANY OF IT, IS BECAUSE THEY'RE JUST AS SICK AND FUCKED UP IN THE HEAD AS YOU ARE!!! You cannot write, and considering you can't write a single damned story that doesn't have a chick getting banged and losing her virginity inside a snake, a plant, or quicksand, you NEVER WILL BE ABLE TO WRITE!!! On top of that, you have NO idea WHATSOEVER how the female mind works. After they're just raped for instance, just because the love of their life saves them DOES NOT mean they want him to fuck them!!! And please, if a girl just met a guy maybe five minutes ago and already told him she loved him, then she obviously doesn't mean it. Get a clue fucktard! There is a word for you, but I can't remember what it is. The fetish for being eaten alive whole or somthing. You might wanna get some help for that.
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You sir, are a sick and twisted evil fucker, and that's a damn good thing. It's really funny how everytime Link and Zelda are about to die they get busy with it. I've never heard of the Royal Calibur, did you come up with that youself or was it an actual item in the LoZ universe? Also, I could have sworne like-likes only ate shields for some odd reason, never seen them eat humans. Is his shield the Master Shield or the Hilayain Shield?
Well, I look foreward to the rest of the fic, so I'll be checking back up on you...
I wonder why they don't have a Master Machine Gun...
Well anyways, this is CrazyIvan, signing off for now...
Well, I look foreward to the rest of the fic, so I'll be checking back up on you...
I wonder why they don't have a Master Machine Gun...
Well anyways, this is CrazyIvan, signing off for now...
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August 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
different... but i liked it!
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August 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
not bad, but you keep switching tenses. Past or present tense, pick one and stick to it.
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July 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Still an awesome story, original, good written, sexually exiting and all that praising stuff. I sure as hell hope that Link survives and kicks Ganondorf's evil butt and saves Zelda. Then Link and Zelda have a bigass sexparty on their own for about two chapters :P