rate_review Reviews

LULZ U IS AMZING. I LRVED THIS STORY. SO HOTT. KIRBY IS SLX GOD. I WANT HIS PINK MAN PENIS. MUST READ MOR!!!!!

Um hello. I was sent over here from a friends of mine and although you say you don't want any bad reviews, that is all I have to give on this. I mean, besides there being no character development at all, it's impossible for any being to have thiry orgasums within an hour. That would be one every two mintues and the body wouldn't even have enough time to recover from the first one to be able to have another. But yeah, that's all I have to say.

While that wasn;t the worst piece of shit that I've ever read, it ranks pretty darn close.

Alright, that's it. You killed me. I'm dead from laughter. XD Please, continue.

What the hell is wrong with you??? Turning an innocent pink ball of fluff into a sex story, you should be ashamed. *shakes head*

Gaah...Why, pray tell, is Kirby having incredibly unrealistic sex with the Harvest Moon chick? And why does she have breasts big enough to break any normal gal's spine? An orgasm-induced dimensional hole is easily one of the most far-fetched plot devices I've ever heard, and let me tell you, I've seen lots. But above all else, I hate this fic for its use of the line, "Please...please take away my anal virginity." It makes my soul cry.

On the plus side, though, your spelling and grammar are fairly good. That's more than a lot of fic writers can manage....

That was AWESOME. Fuck me!!!

well...that was...interesting to say the least. a bit far fetched. humorous though, but a bit too quick. *shrugs*

Um..

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Wow. I'm scared.

Kirby sex is never good.

Atleast you're writing with proper grammar.

I like chapter one. Not a lot of information, but it looks very promising.