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for A day in the life an assassin

by Valiant

person Emperor Norton II
schedule January 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
When the title of the story is improperly capitalized and missing a linking verb, that's generally a pretty bad sign.
schedule January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
If you're writing in an original character into the RE4 universe, you may as well classify your story as AU. You're basically adding an entire other plot element (and character), and as such, you're branching apart from the traditional RE4 storyline.

From a technical standpoint, writing mechanics need improvement. From subject-verb agreement, to dialogue structuring, the prose needs tweaking if you're serious about continuing the story.

We'll wait to see where it goes.