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for Tale of the Loyal LOK

by Row

person Zidane
schedule July 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This fic is teh awesomeness!! i'd definately say this has to be the best LOK fic here.

may i make a suggestion tho'

please add some scenes for the other lords!! there's not enough Dumah to go around....

and here's a wierd tidbit for you guys....Dumah and umah.....get it...wierd!!

XD
person delonariel
schedule July 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
...I think You've reached the pinnacle of mary-sueism. If you'd put a bit more work into the basics of the story, or at least gotten a beta reader, this would have been forgiveable.
person Anon
schedule January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
A quick spellcheck and a little attention to capitalization mishaps and nonsenisical sentences would do much to improve this fic.