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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
DUN DUN DUNNN.
Dundundunnn my ass~! Once again, I love Caeld's fumbled dialog and... well, I love his character. XD
Keep it up.
Dundundunnn my ass~! Once again, I love Caeld's fumbled dialog and... well, I love his character. XD
Keep it up.
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May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
^_^ I hope you continue writing this. It was a pretty good lemon. I hope you continue to write out their relationship. (Heh. Valen even impressed my poor girl-loving druidess)
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May 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
As smooth as they are, yours are much better in terms of their technical excellence. You weave tales, and I write smut. *nod nod*
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May 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hoe-lee snapping dog's bums wonderboy... holy fucking SHIT! Oh my freaking GAWD.... that better not have been a dream, I mean, it, I will absolutely flip out...actually, it could be good, because then they will have to go through it all again hehe, but oh shit...
Oh my GODALMIGHTYHOLYSNAPPINGARMPITS wonderboy...
Fuck me dead...
I'm lost for words...I better wait till I calm down so I can give you a vaguely sensible review...
Oh fuck.
Holy shit..
Jebus!
Oh my GODALMIGHTYHOLYSNAPPINGARMPITS wonderboy...
Fuck me dead...
I'm lost for words...I better wait till I calm down so I can give you a vaguely sensible review...
Oh fuck.
Holy shit..
Jebus!
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May 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok...calm now. Half a packet of cigarettes (and I don't even smoke! well...unless I'm drinking :P) and an evening of walking around blushing later...
Just...holy shit wonderboy! I was determined not to say what I always say i.e. you are a freaking master who doesn't write, but crafts...but I can't help it. It's true. The only other time I have read anything that evoked such a strong reaction as your writing does, was when I was 12 and read LoTR, the part where the shadow wraiths were sniffing around for Frodo and co? Yeah, had me screaming 'Hail Marys' for a week! The second time was when I was 17, in Sydney, sitting on the bonet of my sisters car after finishing work early and waiting for her to finish. I had just bought Stephen King's 'The Talisman' with my very first pay ever, and was up to the part where a little funnel of sand appeared out of nowhere and a juicy fruit wrapper was winking in and out of sight, that was full on 'rosary' inducing for a month! I think it's testimony to how good your story is, when authors as brilliant as Tolkien and King can only get my heart racing like that, once, in an entire epic book...(and keep in mind, The Talisman is like the holy grail to me, I have made the hallowed pilgrimage and read it every year since I bought it, I love it that much!) Yet everything you write leaves me absolutely exhausted by the time I am finished. No joke, I feel as though I have gone like, ten rounds with bloody Danny Green or something! And I don't even box! Every word,every paragraph just hauls me along and makes my head explode!
First...I didn't think anything could ever replace your description of the base of Valen's tail as like...the epitomy of 'omg' in my mind. So much for that, it's place has been usurped by his massive !!! and I looooovvvveeeeee Ceald. Holy shit, he is perfect wonderboy! I don't know why you would think he isn't in the lime light, gawd! He is the catalyst for everything! He is lovable, sincere, courageous, SMART, K...now I hope Ive finished gushing and can get onto reviewing your story!
Chapter 7 ... my first smirk was in the first paragraph...Blood can only move so fast? hahaha, perfect! my first smile and chuckle? The part where Ceald does his dramatic interpretation of Flowers of the heart...far out wonderboy, that was so 'real'...brilliant, as usual.
I loved loved loved how hesitant and self - questioning (?) Ceald was, if that's the right expression, he has such a powerful, authentic 'presence', it's bloody amazing and I am in awe every time I read your stuff at how you are able to make him so bloody real!
And I thought my head was going to explode when they were getting all hot and heavy, no joke ...I think I forgot to breathe even! And when he actually slipped him the pork sword and Ceald kinda freaked, you know, the violation of his soul kinda thing? I actually jumped to my knees and was SCREAMING at my laptop, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO CEALD FOR THE LOVE OF DE-CAFFINATED COFFEE!!! RIDE HIM LIKE A CIRCUS PONY FOR FUCKSAKE! (at which point my bigger, more aggressive 'proof reader' popped his head around the corner and asked if I was 'right?)
His interruption still didn't spoil the mood though, but in all honesty, the breathing space you created as a result of Ceald's internal freak out was so perfectly timed! I swear, if you didn't give your readers little bursts of respite like that, you'd kill us ALL. You would be like, some mass murderer of the pen, no joke! A trail of dead bodies all over the world and the only lead is that the last thing they did was read Ceald Amothien :P So anyway, the heart-racing, mind-blowing feeling of the first part of the chapter kinda disappeared but now, I don't worry when that happens, I just gather my breath again and steel myself for the marathon run I have learned your stories are gonna take me on!
And it did, that was simply the BEST de-virgining I have ever read. I'm serious. I haven't read a lot of them but in various books and novels they usually describe it vaguely as 'crossing a bridge' or something corny like that, unless it's Colleen McCullogh, who always seems to make it seem like one more thing checked off on her characters 'to do list' :P (which I like, I mean really, first time? Who cares, get it over and done with already so you can bloody well get on with it and enjoy!) But you? Holy shit...thanks so much for completely blowing my pragmatic view clearly out of the water. That was not just a crossing of the bridge that no authors that I have ever found can express cleary, that was ....like... let's detonate the fucker and blow it to smithereens, then bunji-jump off what's left and scream our heads off all the way down until the blood vessels in our eyes burst!
Magic.
Sheer, bloody magic. Fuck you are good. Deadset!
So there it is, I'm too scared to read it again, at least, not until I take an energy drink first, then the caffeine they have will end up making me swing from the ceiling fans but it will be worth it~!...and I am DEFINITELY not going to let your BIGGEST fan, my 80 year old client, read it! Holy shit, if that gave me heart palpitations...what it will do to her...shudder... I don't think my insurance covers 'naughty young man' induced fainting spells! (although my guess is that she knows things that you and I haven't even heard of :P)
But...I'll stop gushing now, having embarrassed myself enough... fucking hell wonderboy, if I don't see some pulitzer prize winning bloody work, in HARDCOVER, in my local bookshop one day with your name sprawled all over it, I am gonna hunt you down and throw my cat at you! I mean it!
And all up you have like 40 chapters? Holy shit, I will die, I just know it! But at least I will die happy...even if I do end up going to hell :P lol
I love you, I love your story. You rock!
Just...holy shit wonderboy! I was determined not to say what I always say i.e. you are a freaking master who doesn't write, but crafts...but I can't help it. It's true. The only other time I have read anything that evoked such a strong reaction as your writing does, was when I was 12 and read LoTR, the part where the shadow wraiths were sniffing around for Frodo and co? Yeah, had me screaming 'Hail Marys' for a week! The second time was when I was 17, in Sydney, sitting on the bonet of my sisters car after finishing work early and waiting for her to finish. I had just bought Stephen King's 'The Talisman' with my very first pay ever, and was up to the part where a little funnel of sand appeared out of nowhere and a juicy fruit wrapper was winking in and out of sight, that was full on 'rosary' inducing for a month! I think it's testimony to how good your story is, when authors as brilliant as Tolkien and King can only get my heart racing like that, once, in an entire epic book...(and keep in mind, The Talisman is like the holy grail to me, I have made the hallowed pilgrimage and read it every year since I bought it, I love it that much!) Yet everything you write leaves me absolutely exhausted by the time I am finished. No joke, I feel as though I have gone like, ten rounds with bloody Danny Green or something! And I don't even box! Every word,every paragraph just hauls me along and makes my head explode!
First...I didn't think anything could ever replace your description of the base of Valen's tail as like...the epitomy of 'omg' in my mind. So much for that, it's place has been usurped by his massive !!! and I looooovvvveeeeee Ceald. Holy shit, he is perfect wonderboy! I don't know why you would think he isn't in the lime light, gawd! He is the catalyst for everything! He is lovable, sincere, courageous, SMART, K...now I hope Ive finished gushing and can get onto reviewing your story!
Chapter 7 ... my first smirk was in the first paragraph...Blood can only move so fast? hahaha, perfect! my first smile and chuckle? The part where Ceald does his dramatic interpretation of Flowers of the heart...far out wonderboy, that was so 'real'...brilliant, as usual.
I loved loved loved how hesitant and self - questioning (?) Ceald was, if that's the right expression, he has such a powerful, authentic 'presence', it's bloody amazing and I am in awe every time I read your stuff at how you are able to make him so bloody real!
And I thought my head was going to explode when they were getting all hot and heavy, no joke ...I think I forgot to breathe even! And when he actually slipped him the pork sword and Ceald kinda freaked, you know, the violation of his soul kinda thing? I actually jumped to my knees and was SCREAMING at my laptop, NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO CEALD FOR THE LOVE OF DE-CAFFINATED COFFEE!!! RIDE HIM LIKE A CIRCUS PONY FOR FUCKSAKE! (at which point my bigger, more aggressive 'proof reader' popped his head around the corner and asked if I was 'right?)
His interruption still didn't spoil the mood though, but in all honesty, the breathing space you created as a result of Ceald's internal freak out was so perfectly timed! I swear, if you didn't give your readers little bursts of respite like that, you'd kill us ALL. You would be like, some mass murderer of the pen, no joke! A trail of dead bodies all over the world and the only lead is that the last thing they did was read Ceald Amothien :P So anyway, the heart-racing, mind-blowing feeling of the first part of the chapter kinda disappeared but now, I don't worry when that happens, I just gather my breath again and steel myself for the marathon run I have learned your stories are gonna take me on!
And it did, that was simply the BEST de-virgining I have ever read. I'm serious. I haven't read a lot of them but in various books and novels they usually describe it vaguely as 'crossing a bridge' or something corny like that, unless it's Colleen McCullogh, who always seems to make it seem like one more thing checked off on her characters 'to do list' :P (which I like, I mean really, first time? Who cares, get it over and done with already so you can bloody well get on with it and enjoy!) But you? Holy shit...thanks so much for completely blowing my pragmatic view clearly out of the water. That was not just a crossing of the bridge that no authors that I have ever found can express cleary, that was ....like... let's detonate the fucker and blow it to smithereens, then bunji-jump off what's left and scream our heads off all the way down until the blood vessels in our eyes burst!
Magic.
Sheer, bloody magic. Fuck you are good. Deadset!
So there it is, I'm too scared to read it again, at least, not until I take an energy drink first, then the caffeine they have will end up making me swing from the ceiling fans but it will be worth it~!...and I am DEFINITELY not going to let your BIGGEST fan, my 80 year old client, read it! Holy shit, if that gave me heart palpitations...what it will do to her...shudder... I don't think my insurance covers 'naughty young man' induced fainting spells! (although my guess is that she knows things that you and I haven't even heard of :P)
But...I'll stop gushing now, having embarrassed myself enough... fucking hell wonderboy, if I don't see some pulitzer prize winning bloody work, in HARDCOVER, in my local bookshop one day with your name sprawled all over it, I am gonna hunt you down and throw my cat at you! I mean it!
And all up you have like 40 chapters? Holy shit, I will die, I just know it! But at least I will die happy...even if I do end up going to hell :P lol
I love you, I love your story. You rock!
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May 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wai! WHy didn't you tell me you'd added so many more tasty bits!!
Here I was sitting like a chump thinking I'd seen the whole chapter to-date and NOooooo you went and added the hotness!
I like the little bits and bobs of description you added at the beginning too, btw. Helped to clarify the setting and set the tone yadda-yadda MOST EXCELLENT Third-base action *applauds* I totally agree that tiefling has unfair advantage due to body temperature. Ceald is not going to find another honey as hot as this one in a month of sundays :-D
*applauds some more*
Here I was sitting like a chump thinking I'd seen the whole chapter to-date and NOooooo you went and added the hotness!
I like the little bits and bobs of description you added at the beginning too, btw. Helped to clarify the setting and set the tone yadda-yadda MOST EXCELLENT Third-base action *applauds* I totally agree that tiefling has unfair advantage due to body temperature. Ceald is not going to find another honey as hot as this one in a month of sundays :-D
*applauds some more*
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May 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
... You know how to keep a crowd, my friend. v
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April 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
URRRAAAGHHH cliffhanger!
It was excellent, I love the imagery, and how Caeld more oft than not trails off with his train of thoughts.
His poor li'l dragon's gonna be pissed.
ANYWAY I'm stoked at the update and can't wait for more!
It was excellent, I love the imagery, and how Caeld more oft than not trails off with his train of thoughts.
His poor li'l dragon's gonna be pissed.
ANYWAY I'm stoked at the update and can't wait for more!
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April 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Okay, I had to leave and come back a couple of times before I could stop smashing the keyboard incoherently. Sex like that does that to my brain. Valen does that to my brain. I've never actually thought of him having black blood and a somewhat grey cast to his skin before, but I find myself rapidly becoming a fan of it... how can I not?
Caeld continues to make me love him. That adorable mix between innocence and ... not ... it absolutely captivating. I do not know how you wrote out this chapter so coherently. I would have had to stop several times.
Also. The tail thing? And Valen's explanation of it? Oh. Man.
Caeld continues to make me love him. That adorable mix between innocence and ... not ... it absolutely captivating. I do not know how you wrote out this chapter so coherently. I would have had to stop several times.
Also. The tail thing? And Valen's explanation of it? Oh. Man.
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April 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm all a-squee! I popped in to see if you'd updated and you had! As usual your descriptions are clear and vivid. And Ceald's inner thoughts brought a smile to my face, especially in the alleys. He's a voyeur at heart isn't he?