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January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nothing big, but I'd think that the backside isn't too great a place to be branded. After all, the slave brand would have to be seen easily, without stripping what might not be a slave. So a better place would be the cheek, or the back of the hand. What is an asphixiolac (or whatever) anyway?
My only real grump about this is that Manic does seem a bit apathetic about all of this. Sure, he's a willing slave, nicely broken in. But this IS his brother we're talking about who is about to get a good beating. Family, you know.
Other than those two little complaints, keep up the good work! Just so you know, 5 stars! And believe me, I do know the difference between complete shit and something that just needs a little more thought to become really good.
My only real grump about this is that Manic does seem a bit apathetic about all of this. Sure, he's a willing slave, nicely broken in. But this IS his brother we're talking about who is about to get a good beating. Family, you know.
Other than those two little complaints, keep up the good work! Just so you know, 5 stars! And believe me, I do know the difference between complete shit and something that just needs a little more thought to become really good.
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January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
And that was my review. Honest.
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January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice story
shadowxsonic roxs in my opinion more manicxsonic!!! brotherly lerve! <3
not shadxmanic little to weird for my taste *likes sonic couples*
anyways I really like how you make sonic wild! so hot! =) shadow WILL dominate him muhahaha!
I vote pat on head! cause I don't want sonic hurt! wah! ;-;
shadowxsonic roxs in my opinion more manicxsonic!!! brotherly lerve! <3
not shadxmanic little to weird for my taste *likes sonic couples*
anyways I really like how you make sonic wild! so hot! =) shadow WILL dominate him muhahaha!
I vote pat on head! cause I don't want sonic hurt! wah! ;-;
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January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting. Sonic makes me laugh in this story. I could just picture him being wild and wanting to be free. But Manic should like, care somewhat for Sonic and vise-versa. Shadow's pretty awsome though.
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
intresting
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January 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!! THANK YOU!!
Continue soon, please!!! PLEASE!!
Continue soon, please!!! PLEASE!!
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January 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this is very cool indeed. Hey, does Yuan have Amy as one of his concubines?
The thing is, it's very like the other one of similar title, which isn't so great. It's a little confusing.
Still, this is cool, and I can't wait to see how Shadow reacts to his two new toys. But please remember that the Shadow you're writing about is a prince, probably quite spoilt, and used to getting his own way. Just a thought.
And check your spelling.
The thing is, it's very like the other one of similar title, which isn't so great. It's a little confusing.
Still, this is cool, and I can't wait to see how Shadow reacts to his two new toys. But please remember that the Shadow you're writing about is a prince, probably quite spoilt, and used to getting his own way. Just a thought.
And check your spelling.