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Your character deserves the most evil/awesome award here, the humour is great also.

*whisttles* Gotta love the main character. One of the few hentai stories i've read through without getting bored (Sex only goes so far, there should be a plotline after all). Keep up the good work

Well declare Braindead Bird the winner...
because I think I did go alittle astray.....

i honestly dont think it would be good because I have never made 'torture' story
So get someone else up against Braindead....

sorry :'(

Good job, Braindead Bird. You successfully wrote the story I've had for a long time in my mind but never got round to articulate.

Anyway, you mentioned historical accuracy... Weren't Greece at that time under the Turkish Ottoman Empire? I think at that point in history the old Roman empire has ceased to exist (destroyed by Turks few years before when they conquered Constantinople). Greeks at that time would've been Orthodox Christians, and I'm sure they celebrate Christmas, although I doubt that their celebration would be as materialistic as today where it's all gifts and Santa Claus (but hey, I'm digressing here... I'm not even a Xtian to begin with). But it *is* strange that Namco would set Sophitia as the priestess of Hephaestus, which is an ancient Greek god. She and her community might even be considered heretics by local Christians and the Muslim authority!

Well, it's just that I find the 'Roman' merchant character a bit anachronistic. Were he of one of the major trading nationalities of that day, Turkish or Venetian or Genoan (like Vercci) he'd fit better with the story. But he could've been a self-styled 'Roman' for whatever reason, so I'll leave it at that.

Anyway, the SE/SC universe is a great place to build history-flavoured fanfics. Hope we'll see more of your work!

...I see, it is different, but so was Braindaed Bird's in a sense. If you don't feel confident in writing it just say so and I'll look for someone else to challenge Braindead bird. Personally just go and write it, though try to stay as close to the scenario i laid out as much as possible as it would be unfair to braindead bird if i allowed you to add elemtnts that aren't properly connected to the scenario. However your character is clearly more a gang type which should be a intresting comparison to brain dead's character. So yeah go ahead, i'll decide the winner once your version is up.

To My Name Is... ,

NOOOO! Don't give up! Didn't you read the second chapter of Dude's challenge? Since we're both entering, it's become sort of a challenge between the two of us! Also, I would really like to read your story as well. Please don't give up...

Great stuff, Quintus Junius is certinely a calssic scoundral and is quite comedy as well at times, *his ramblings at how he was never talked to like that except his father before commenting how he dispensed him was great* And you know how to make him gloat at the moment of his 'victory' his plan though to get cassandra in the postion he wanted was ok, nothing too grand but simple and usually its the simple plans that work best *It just depdens on the distribution*

Perhaps my best part was Quin commenting if he had a heart maybe he would to would be in pity over cassandra's dilema. It briefly showed the person he could had been but shunned.

Great stuff and I expect you 'My name is' to put your own version. *Read the second chapter of the challenge as it has been updated slghtly*

Well Dude I honestly wouldn't think you'd enjoy mine :(
you see mine is kinda diff from what you wanted it too be...

Mine envolves Ark Cantrell(my OC) hiring a group of bandits and asks them to kidnap Casandra's boyfriend and torture him (not sexually just cutting off fingers,etc.) and then Ark tells Casandra the only way to free him is too give him what he wants (which is sex) she reluctantly agrees and one of the bandits knocks her out. Then she reawakes naked and chained down. Ark then he gets his wish. but doesnt keep his word...Instead he throws her with her boyfriend in a cage. So he can get more and more of what he wants.

See? I had a darker idea.This was just the summary I was gonna add ALOT more detail.....

Ahh...
Well since you made this story first no point in me posting mine...
Great story by the way, I'm sure Dude will like it

Nice! I like it! =D