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for Back again?

by KaySan666

person wild rose
schedule June 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
interesting
person kidavi
schedule December 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good start, Kay! ^_^ minor crits: beware the excessive use of capitals. perhaps it was to emphasize certain aspects, but it gets a little distracting. i think you're a bit OC (over-lovey teenage twins always make me cringe a little), but that's just my personal preference, it doesn't reflect anything on the quality of your writing. beware of fragmented sentences and a few spelling errors (simple things that a good beta-reading would take care of). otherwise, nice start, i'll be keeping an eye on this!
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah... well i try to update the 3rd chapter soon. ^^,
person Blue
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wah...
Too short... ._.

Please go on with that!
I want more, more, more *hrhrhr*

sorry, I know my english has become quite bad... ^^"
person Celesta
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it write more please.
person Blue
schedule December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!!
That's Amazing....

Please go on with it...
I Love this Story...
person Carrie
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooh very good chapter and well written. I cant wait for the next chapter. I have my trusty Mundus at my side ready to sic on you if i dont see an update soon hehe. xXx
person Jade Tokier
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well for the most part it is correct. However, there is only one problem, some of your words don't have an 's' on the end. Like "month"...
person Silver Wolf
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's okay. More to come?
person Whacko dante!
schedule December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HEY YOU LIL LADY! Beautiful work! Don't take it off yet, ok? I'll do my best to beta it some more. ^^