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June 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
interesting
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December 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
good start, Kay! ^_^ minor crits: beware the excessive use of capitals. perhaps it was to emphasize certain aspects, but it gets a little distracting. i think you're a bit OC (over-lovey teenage twins always make me cringe a little), but that's just my personal preference, it doesn't reflect anything on the quality of your writing. beware of fragmented sentences and a few spelling errors (simple things that a good beta-reading would take care of). otherwise, nice start, i'll be keeping an eye on this!
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December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah... well i try to update the 3rd chapter soon. ^^,
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December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wah...
Too short... ._.
Please go on with that!
I want more, more, more *hrhrhr*
sorry, I know my english has become quite bad... ^^"
Too short... ._.
Please go on with that!
I want more, more, more *hrhrhr*
sorry, I know my english has become quite bad... ^^"
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December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like it write more please.
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December 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!!
That's Amazing....
Please go on with it...
I Love this Story...
That's Amazing....
Please go on with it...
I Love this Story...
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooh very good chapter and well written. I cant wait for the next chapter. I have my trusty Mundus at my side ready to sic on you if i dont see an update soon hehe. xXx
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well for the most part it is correct. However, there is only one problem, some of your words don't have an 's' on the end. Like "month"...
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's okay. More to come?
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HEY YOU LIL LADY! Beautiful work! Don't take it off yet, ok? I'll do my best to beta it some more. ^^