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for The Traitor

by ErieDragon

person kyriem
schedule April 23, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This story is wicked awesome. I love the descriptions and how she's not the typical wishy washy idiot heroine. I really hope she ends up with Lo'jar :)
person Ashtaar
schedule July 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, this can't be it! You have to continue, please! *begs on her knees* Please don't stop here! And what's up with Morla? I thought she was only mute, but it looks like she is also blind... what's wrong? I mean Lo'Jar is a pure awesomness! How could she care about that pathetic human??? I say drop the human! Human is not cool, nit cool at all! I really hope she'll see the right things and comes back to the one and only Lo'Jar :( *is very sad*

Though now that she got something on with Clef... I like Clef too, and I like Lo'Jar.... Looks like a tough choice... Hmm.. but i suppose i still like Lo'Jar more, oh please, you can't just break his heart like that! And my hear too! Please continue, I beg you! Do not abandon this story!
person Church
schedule October 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Even though I havent read this in awhile started all the way from one to 15 man. This is grea t it sparked a big interest with me and the scene with Clef and Morla was awesome i wish to see more of it too. I cant wait till the nextime you update. I wonder though...is by chance Loren gonna come aorund again or anything because he seems cool but i didnt like it when he went with Morla for awhile. I liked the morla/clef pairing since the childhood like theme is very original and cuteness plus its sexy. SEXY FOR THE PEOPLE!!!
schedule July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this story. It inspired me to write one of my own :)
person Kamisori (not logged in)
schedule June 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Another chapter in this wonderful story<3
I do hope Morla and Lo'Jar will be together in the end though.
person ...
schedule January 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Heh, just now realized that this is a companion piece to Providence. Was thinking Lo'jar's real name and his history sounded familiar. Emotion bringing story. Kinda wanted to cry when Lo'jar was left behind. Can I keep him instead?
person Koneko
schedule January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg poor Lo'jar that is so mean! im starting to hate Morla, she is becoming quite the B. update soon! plz
person Mistah Eleganza
schedule January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh my. What a depressing chapter! I felt so awful while reading Morla and Lo'jar's spat. The old saying is true, though; you hurt the ones you love the most. Despite my sadness, this was a wonderfully crafted chapter. Your characters are all so vibrant and real; thats how you can invoke such a feeling from your readers. I love them all, and I hate to read about them getting hurt. I do hope you plan on letting them repair their relationship in the future. I like Lo'jar quite a bit.

I eagerly await the next chapter! Good luck!
person Mistah Eleganza
schedule January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ah, an excellent set of additions to this already great story! I am particularly happy that Lo'jar has taken a more central role. I was very much hoping that Morla and Lo'jar would become involved; might I also say you presented a touching and tasteful scene of them together. I think the line where Morla was realizing that he was "not just a friend, but THE friend" resonated so well. Wonderful work.

I am very intrigued by what kind of being or force that Morla is connected to. I look forward to reading more!
schedule January 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*bows down before the greatness* Okay, I am officially jealous. This is just... woah. It certainly seems things for Morla are about to get a whole lot more complicated than they already were, not to mention what Clef's reaction will be if/when he finds out. Angry Tauren=ouchies.