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for Brotherly love

by Ayeshagirl

schedule July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This story is really confusing. I can't figure out what the hell is going on half the time. The characters are really OOC as well... @_@;;
person k612
schedule July 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yoshhhhhhhh >.< that made me kinda sad...can't wait to see the next!
schedule March 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Update, please. ^-^
schedule March 8, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Alright, here goes....what is with the POV? You CAN'T have two people's POV in the same POV! What are you doing? It's seriousy throwing me off. I hope in later chapters (only on ch.2) that you fix that, please. I'm confused and whiel the story is very cute, I don't know how to discern POV's to well, and it's making me lose interest. If you want, you should have someone either beta this, or do it yourself and fix the POV's. I will comment on the later chapters, so Ja'ne.
person Cave
schedule February 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*read halfway into chapter 2*

wha.

This story makes no sense. wtf. If Sora walks in one Tidus and Riku doing it; then you have to actually say that he walks in.
person PuppyLove
schedule December 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awww How sweet please continue and update more. :D
person naoko144
schedule November 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ooooh!! I want the next chapie!!! I sooo totaly like it x3 (woot soraXsquall stuff, it's rare, and one of my fav couple with that^^but there is so little of there out here...)
so, telling that you'r doing a really great job on this and I wanna read more of it!! PLz conitnue x3
person NeonTokyo
schedule October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awwwwee!! This is so cute! I can't wait so see what happens next! ^____^ You rock!
person Minza
schedule October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very good storie keep up And PLEASE update as soon as possible this sorie is real good. :D
person senku
schedule October 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hello i love your story i hope u continue it soon