rate_review Reviews

Considering you haven't updated anything in over two years, I'm probably wasting my time writing this but nothing ventured, nothing gained. On the off chance that you do read this, I'd like to ask if I can adopt this story as you seem to have no wish to complete it. I love it to bits and I'd love to see you finish it, but if you don't want to, I'd like to try it myself.

But as I've said, you'll probably never read this. Oh well.

Admittedly, I've only read the first chapter so far, so perhaps things changed later on.

So far, it's quite cute, I just love the kissing scene and the smut scene is really well implemented however, the tense seems to constantly fluctuate between present and past tense -- while sometimes a fic could take a minor shift of tenses (e.g. if it was a flashback or reminiscence, or a different section entirely, like in The Death of Vishnu by Manil Suri.) I would really recommend picking a tense and sticking with it, it helps make it run more smoothly, and makes it less confusing. Getting a beta might help in this area, just ask around to your friends or in communities, because seriously? A good beta is invaluable.

And don't worry, we all make these mistakes. That's what betas are for. I, for one, am very prone to run-on sentences, comma splices and and yes, tense errors of my own. I recently had a challenge piece of mine betaed and man, I missed some of the most obvious glaring errors, I was half embarrassed and half wanting a build a shrine for my beta XD;

Anyways, I'll get to reading more when I'm not dead tired. Hope to see more updates soon ♥

Woah...you need to update. NOW. *stares at screen* WHY ISN'T ANOTHER CHAPTER POPPING UP?! *cries in a corner* Ah, well. It was a pleasure reading this and you have some skill. And I'm glad that I've found someone who thinks that Rhys and Oscar are the type to trust! =^_^= Well, update soon, please. I'll probably have some withdrawal issues if you don't.

Yay, another awesome chappy! I love how you put the side couplings in this. Just enough to provide a change of pace, but never detracting from the main plot. Good job!

Woot! Getting better and better. Not so sure about the RhysTitania deal, but the hintings of OscarKieran are absolutely delightful! Can't wait for the next chapter ^^

Awww...what an adorable chapter!

I love your implied pairings...I'm assuming Rhys/Titania and Oscar/Kieran are included in that, maybe Rolf/Mist or Jill/Mist as well? Everyone was very well in-character in that last chapter. I especially liked your Boyd...it just seemed very like him to say things like that.

I wonder when Soren will tell Ike the truth...and since you seem to be following the game script, will Nasir (or maybe Stefan) influence him in any way?

Nice job once again. Update soon!

Kieran and Oscar (sorta) huh? I do enjoy those two (mostly because they're so damned useful once they've got an A support though). I am totally intrigued by this whole "Oscar has a tragic past lovelife" idea. Do tell more! Not as sure of what I think of Rhys and Titainia, but I'm glad she finally sort of approves.
Update soon, please, with more smut, if possible. And when is Soren going to tell Ike the truth? That should be fun. This is one of my favorite stories - even though it skips the plot in favor of some off-the-bat smut, the whole situtation seems oddly believable, I don't know if it's because of the Fire Emblem universe in general, or if it's that you put it in the middle of the very stressful war situation.
Keep it up!

They're so cute. ^_^ Great job, you do smut well. Soren seems a little OOC at times, but it's not too bad and it's understandable considering the circumstances of the story. Hope to see more from you soon.

I love this story! They have mist's approval and there was SMUT! WHOOO!

Soren and Ike are so cute together! I wondering about the others still becoming very interested in their thoughts.

ooh they love eachh other not wanting the other to die! HOW CUTE! Dying for more!

i absolutely love this story so far!!

And i agreee with you about the fact that it is obvious that Ike and Soren liked each other

Please continue to update!!