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January 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Why the epic writing of requests? Its about ribcage fucking.
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January 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You know.....I was just saving my game after a run-in with The Big and Scary, when my sick and twisted little mind got the softest of inklings. Allow me to tell you, that, considering my actual hope of finding anything of this nature, I am incredibly well pleased.
My more sadistic and perverse natures are highly satified; though, I must confess to a bit of cringing at the damage inflicted by tentacles in flesh and claws in delicate areas. I'd always found the Prince's appearance quite fetching, and he really is very flexible X3.
If I might make a request, or perhaps suggestion: The unrestrained violence and mangling of the Prince and two females seemed reasonable at the time being read, he'd had no plans of further use of them. However, considering he obviously intends to recapture himself a Prince, might I suggest a slightly less homicidal method of intercourse? The Dahaka obviously feels some pride and possession toward the Prince, as he'd been the prey that had eluded him for so long, and probably has some distinctive feelings of "MINE"; I have no idea where he'd keep him, but I imagine the Island of Time must have some highly inaccessable and opulent rooms. If you're going to have a pet, you should treat it right. That doesn't mean the Prince won't fear him, obviously, because, not only is it a Dahaka that will probably inflict some physical harm on you at random intervals, it's using you intimately and you're virtually powerless to stop it.
Now, as for tentacles, the mouth is another orifice that can be highly stimulating, not to metion simply rubbing against a toned and flexing body. You may also want to use tentacles to stimulate the Prince's erection, as that would free-up the Dahaka's hand(possibly to pet his prize), and/or to stretch the Prince as it would probably be more effective and less damaging, as well as enjoyable considering the apparent sensitivity of his extra appendages. Frequent damage of a severe nature may cause it to lose it's appeal and pleasure capabilities. Some sort of lubricant would also help, and likely increase the Dahaka's stimulation, as going dry tends to chafe and result in slower, more shallow thrusting. The Dahaka may gain inspiration for this from his recent encounters with women and their aiding natural lubrication. Palm oil was common, I'd suggest that, and it'd be easy to use with tentacles. Not to mention that proper lube and stretching will likely cause the Prince to enjoy it, and such pleasure will undoubtedly increase as the act is repeated and he grows more accustomed to the initial intrusions, perhaps even finding pleasure in their discomfort(it is a fine line, after all). Which may lead to all sorts of possible inner turmoil for the Prince, and his release of pheromones at his pleasure may cause the Dahaka to go into an absolute frenzy(he seems rather feral, and his partner going into "heat" would likely send him into a rut). This isn't to say that going dry wouldn't be appropriate if, say, the Prince tried to escape.....naïve little thing that he is.
Please note that any of my ideas were simply suggestive, and meant in no offense. I'm truly enjoying your story thus far and just thought the feedback might, at the very least, be interesting. I apologize for rambling, and eagerly await your next update.
Go, Dahaka! Go!
Nacht
My more sadistic and perverse natures are highly satified; though, I must confess to a bit of cringing at the damage inflicted by tentacles in flesh and claws in delicate areas. I'd always found the Prince's appearance quite fetching, and he really is very flexible X3.
If I might make a request, or perhaps suggestion: The unrestrained violence and mangling of the Prince and two females seemed reasonable at the time being read, he'd had no plans of further use of them. However, considering he obviously intends to recapture himself a Prince, might I suggest a slightly less homicidal method of intercourse? The Dahaka obviously feels some pride and possession toward the Prince, as he'd been the prey that had eluded him for so long, and probably has some distinctive feelings of "MINE"; I have no idea where he'd keep him, but I imagine the Island of Time must have some highly inaccessable and opulent rooms. If you're going to have a pet, you should treat it right. That doesn't mean the Prince won't fear him, obviously, because, not only is it a Dahaka that will probably inflict some physical harm on you at random intervals, it's using you intimately and you're virtually powerless to stop it.
Now, as for tentacles, the mouth is another orifice that can be highly stimulating, not to metion simply rubbing against a toned and flexing body. You may also want to use tentacles to stimulate the Prince's erection, as that would free-up the Dahaka's hand(possibly to pet his prize), and/or to stretch the Prince as it would probably be more effective and less damaging, as well as enjoyable considering the apparent sensitivity of his extra appendages. Frequent damage of a severe nature may cause it to lose it's appeal and pleasure capabilities. Some sort of lubricant would also help, and likely increase the Dahaka's stimulation, as going dry tends to chafe and result in slower, more shallow thrusting. The Dahaka may gain inspiration for this from his recent encounters with women and their aiding natural lubrication. Palm oil was common, I'd suggest that, and it'd be easy to use with tentacles. Not to mention that proper lube and stretching will likely cause the Prince to enjoy it, and such pleasure will undoubtedly increase as the act is repeated and he grows more accustomed to the initial intrusions, perhaps even finding pleasure in their discomfort(it is a fine line, after all). Which may lead to all sorts of possible inner turmoil for the Prince, and his release of pheromones at his pleasure may cause the Dahaka to go into an absolute frenzy(he seems rather feral, and his partner going into "heat" would likely send him into a rut). This isn't to say that going dry wouldn't be appropriate if, say, the Prince tried to escape.....naïve little thing that he is.
Please note that any of my ideas were simply suggestive, and meant in no offense. I'm truly enjoying your story thus far and just thought the feedback might, at the very least, be interesting. I apologize for rambling, and eagerly await your next update.
Go, Dahaka! Go!
Nacht
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January 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Awsome story...it makes you think that the beast could acutally have feeelings and want something more than to be trapped by the timeline....please I want more!
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December 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Plese write more thanks
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November 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Amazing. I think you've really just outdone yourself this time. Plus, its kinda very hot.
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October 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I think it's good work. Yes, a happy ending indeed - I'd like to see it.
I'm not reviewing because you asked for it, by the way, I'm reviewing because I liked the story and I'd like to see more of it. I'm sorry that you feel the need to hold your great work hostage for reviews. My personal sentiments are that the more work you do, the more reviews you'll get for it - and from what I've read, they will very likely be good ones.
But no matter what you choose to do, thanks for sharing your work at all. It's nice to finally see some great writing on these sites.
I'm not reviewing because you asked for it, by the way, I'm reviewing because I liked the story and I'd like to see more of it. I'm sorry that you feel the need to hold your great work hostage for reviews. My personal sentiments are that the more work you do, the more reviews you'll get for it - and from what I've read, they will very likely be good ones.
But no matter what you choose to do, thanks for sharing your work at all. It's nice to finally see some great writing on these sites.
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October 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
No the prince can't die he's to hot.
Meh just ignore that
Don't know update if you wanna though it does have a nice ending there
Meh just ignore that
Don't know update if you wanna though it does have a nice ending there
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June 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very nice. Your mad abuse skillz give me complete and total happiness. <3 Here's to getting 20 reviews! *toasts and then reads this again... and again* I don't have a problem.. really.. >_>
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December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Um, wow. Never expected to see something like this.... Nice job. Poor Prince. *^^*
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December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Tentacle rape and the Prince of Persia.... Why didn't I think of that? ^_-
This is a really good story- continue it, I command you! ^_^
This is a really good story- continue it, I command you! ^_^