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September 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
If you're getting raped, and you enjoy it, is it still considered rape...?
Well, anyway, I like this story. Hmm... that sounds weird. The problem is, it's hard to praise a lemon. But this story was uber cool!
Well, anyway, I like this story. Hmm... that sounds weird. The problem is, it's hard to praise a lemon. But this story was uber cool!
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November 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome start! Are you going to do the other girls? Please do one about Sheena! I'm waiting in anticipation! =)
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November 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(Get ready for a pretty long review, mon ami)
This fanfic has good points and only a few bad points (that I can see
any one is free to prove me wrong)
First, I would like to say, this fic is brillant. Gah, I love the concept, and your OC
seems hot (don't ask why!!) I actually felt bad for Colette, for like once in my life.
(Nah, I felt bad when she lost her voice in the game)
I don't really like Het. pairings, I mainly read Yaoi/Yuri (male/male, female/female). And if I review a het. story
it's either A) Really good or B) Doesn't have enough reviews. Your's fits in the [A] part.
Now, for the good parts. I like how you write, it's nice. Everything flows. I also like how you
started the fic. It was strong at the begining, and it got my attention really fast. (other het. fics
I read take a while for me to get into) I also love how you ended the story, it makes me wonder 'Did
Akio have a change of heart?' Or some corny thing I always think!
Let me get to the bad points, as in almost all fanfics (including mine) there are grammatical/spelling errors.
Um, what do you call it? In your fic, there was a lot of 'tense' type one. As if I was reading a play. I guess it was the 'Present tense'
thing. Present tense works in script format or 1st person POV. Anyway, there are a few spelling errors that I spotted.
So, although not detailed, that was my review! Your story, overall, is nice, it flows, and makes me feel bad for Miss. Brunel over there.
Hopefully you make more Tales of a bound ___. I would like if you made a Sheena or Raine one. Or Tales of a bound Guy. Hahaha...!
I give this fic a 4/5. Nice story for a beginer! Please write more!
This fanfic has good points and only a few bad points (that I can see
any one is free to prove me wrong)
First, I would like to say, this fic is brillant. Gah, I love the concept, and your OC
seems hot (don't ask why!!) I actually felt bad for Colette, for like once in my life.
(Nah, I felt bad when she lost her voice in the game)
I don't really like Het. pairings, I mainly read Yaoi/Yuri (male/male, female/female). And if I review a het. story
it's either A) Really good or B) Doesn't have enough reviews. Your's fits in the [A] part.
Now, for the good parts. I like how you write, it's nice. Everything flows. I also like how you
started the fic. It was strong at the begining, and it got my attention really fast. (other het. fics
I read take a while for me to get into) I also love how you ended the story, it makes me wonder 'Did
Akio have a change of heart?' Or some corny thing I always think!
Let me get to the bad points, as in almost all fanfics (including mine) there are grammatical/spelling errors.
Um, what do you call it? In your fic, there was a lot of 'tense' type one. As if I was reading a play. I guess it was the 'Present tense'
thing. Present tense works in script format or 1st person POV. Anyway, there are a few spelling errors that I spotted.
So, although not detailed, that was my review! Your story, overall, is nice, it flows, and makes me feel bad for Miss. Brunel over there.
Hopefully you make more Tales of a bound ___. I would like if you made a Sheena or Raine one. Or Tales of a bound Guy. Hahaha...!
I give this fic a 4/5. Nice story for a beginer! Please write more!