rate_review Reviews

Isn't it my fantastic luck that not only do I find a Path of Radiance fic, period (not sure if this is really that surprising, but if it's not just call me easily surprised), but I find one with exactly the pairing I was hoping for? And not just that, but a thoughtful fic with good writing and plently of fluff. Swordtastic. I've some comments, though, not quite criticism since I wouldn't exactly fault what you've done, just saying how my point of view differs.

First I can't see Lethe saying "I love you" so much. All the other affection she shows I can believe, I think she'd show plenty, but just not so much with words. Second, after the problems start Jill kinda seems to be the faintly dominate one in the relationship (at least outside the bedroom), but given Lethe is under a lot of stress I can understand Jill stepping forward to lend what strength she can and temporarily changing the dynamic of their relationship. I can't imagine that always being the dynamic, though, and the prologue seems to imply Lethe is normally "in charge". This second comment doesn't really seem to come to any point, so I guess what I'm trying to do is ask if I've got the reason for the role change right, if you even agree that such roll change occured.

I admire how you write the characters. They don't seem out of character at all.

Write more please!

Excellent! Continue please! Also, any idea where i might find a good pic of them (the girls of the story)?

Good story so far, and I love the pairing. I hope you come out with the third chapter soon, I wish to see what comes about. Keep on writing.
Story telling is a gift, but making the story is a talent- unknown

You should write more. I think I like where this is going. ^____________^

Great, the prolouge was nice.
Queen Elincia, I have a picture of her, she's really
pretty. Er anyway, still need to get the game.
And seeing that there's another chapter, I guess I should
get to reading it soon, right?
5/5 for the first chapter!