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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hmmm. First chapter and no sex. (nods in approval) Thank you for actually introducing a plot instead of going straight for the wham-bam. Marvelous characterizations--I can just see Torn doing something so nasty. Amusing at times and a nice little stomach-jerk with the bomb. Personally, I support Torn/Jak but this fanfic, provided it continues to be well-written, just might make me switch. I look forward to reading the subsequent chapters.