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April 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
K...another review from me. I just read your other reviews when I posted my last one, and I have to say I totally disagree with a previous poster's take on 'fanfic' or whatever, but everyone is entitled to their opinion I suppose....once...after that it becomes a bit boring when not only are the initial whinges the same, but are done it in CAPS (I had a bit of a laugh that the post tried to dictate what was and wasn't proper etiquette...in the cyber equivalent of shouting, kinda evoked images of someone frothing at the mouth. I just didn't see any need for it...twice.) I understood perfectly that you didn't mispell Childe and like I said, I haven't read Anne Rice. Your writing was so concise though, that I was able to gather from the context of what you had written that it must have been vampire jargon and not incorrect spelling. Not only that, but childe with an 'e' is Old English spelling and Ms. Rice didn't invent it, I doubt she would claim to, either.
As far as I am concerned, you take the fanfic and you make it your own. You write fanfic to fill in what you think the original lacked. And you have done that, and not only have you done that, but you have left me - someone who has never been interested in Vampires AT all, or even heard of the game this was based on, completely converted. Completely. I know the name Anne Rice, I've never read her books. The only thing I know about vampires is from Van Helsing and I mainly watched that to perve at Hugh Jackman - but this story!...far out. Bloody magnificent. Personally, I loved how you used the term 'reamed' and I was actually impressed when you said 'buggered' in the first chapter, because it matched the language of the era in which Leon had last lived. It was raw and to the point and since the topic was rape, I think it was more than fitting and a perfect choice of words. I mean, he was raping him for the love of chocolate! What would else would anyone have you do? Try to make it glamorous by describing how he surfed the hallowed hershey highway? Rape is coarse, it's violent, and the way you wrote it got that point across without being tasteless and I thought you seriously handled it beautifully. If it had been handled badly, I wouldn't have read any further.
If people don't like the way you write, or your originality, then they should either write the kind of stories they want to read or just not read yours. Constructive criticism is great and seriously helpful, and well...if you get one raving, loony post by someone who didn't like it ...well...every person is entitled to their opinion, and I suppose one rant is acceptable. But the fact that there were repeated posts meant that they continued to read your story after having already said how much it was 'anti-cannon'and how frustrating that was to them. What a waste of time. Thankfully, you obviously didn't listen and change anything or I wouldn't have had the luck to find this gem of a story tonight and I tell you in all honesty, it was sooooo good that read the entire thing from start to finish and am chomping at the bit for the next chapter.
So like I said, it's bookmarked and added to my favourites, and now I am officially stalking it! Keep up the good work, your writing is mesmerising and your tale even more so. I loved it :D
As far as I am concerned, you take the fanfic and you make it your own. You write fanfic to fill in what you think the original lacked. And you have done that, and not only have you done that, but you have left me - someone who has never been interested in Vampires AT all, or even heard of the game this was based on, completely converted. Completely. I know the name Anne Rice, I've never read her books. The only thing I know about vampires is from Van Helsing and I mainly watched that to perve at Hugh Jackman - but this story!...far out. Bloody magnificent. Personally, I loved how you used the term 'reamed' and I was actually impressed when you said 'buggered' in the first chapter, because it matched the language of the era in which Leon had last lived. It was raw and to the point and since the topic was rape, I think it was more than fitting and a perfect choice of words. I mean, he was raping him for the love of chocolate! What would else would anyone have you do? Try to make it glamorous by describing how he surfed the hallowed hershey highway? Rape is coarse, it's violent, and the way you wrote it got that point across without being tasteless and I thought you seriously handled it beautifully. If it had been handled badly, I wouldn't have read any further.
If people don't like the way you write, or your originality, then they should either write the kind of stories they want to read or just not read yours. Constructive criticism is great and seriously helpful, and well...if you get one raving, loony post by someone who didn't like it ...well...every person is entitled to their opinion, and I suppose one rant is acceptable. But the fact that there were repeated posts meant that they continued to read your story after having already said how much it was 'anti-cannon'and how frustrating that was to them. What a waste of time. Thankfully, you obviously didn't listen and change anything or I wouldn't have had the luck to find this gem of a story tonight and I tell you in all honesty, it was sooooo good that read the entire thing from start to finish and am chomping at the bit for the next chapter.
So like I said, it's bookmarked and added to my favourites, and now I am officially stalking it! Keep up the good work, your writing is mesmerising and your tale even more so. I loved it :D
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April 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Absolutely adore this story; in fact, it's probably my fav Castlevania fanfiction. I'd really love to read more!
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February 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT! OMG i just happened across your story and it immediatly captivated me! I love your sence of style in the writing and i love everything you've done with it! From making Mathias a scheming bastard to Jachiem the savior, but still keeping Leon just as breath taking and powerful when it calls for it! I can't wait for the next chap! Please update soon! oh P.S. I love that you actually pulled Leon back from the dead! But i can't help but wonder what was Jachiem doing visiting Leon without Mathias knowing he was there? Anyway i love it!
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January 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Squee!!! Found your story last night and loved it. Hope you update it cause its just so yummy....
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August 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Holy mother of fuck, that Bleeding Asshole named Willow who reviewed your story is a prick! Castlevania itself is a campy, gaudy, rip-off of every bit of vampire legend/lore/fiction which came before and to have people complain that a Castlevania story is not original is just plain laughable. It just proves that some people have no concept of the subject matter that they critiquing and are so far up their own arseholes they be bleeding. This story was good enough for me, kept me entertained and I'd really like to read some more. I get that uke-y Leon is only that way because he’s just recently been raised from the dead and all that other horseshit but most people just don’t catch on too quick unless you draw them a diagram. There is also no doubt in my mind that Joachim is a very, very bad vampire man and is playing Leon in some form or the other, so no worries. Do your thang girl.
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January 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is probably one of the best Castlevania stories i've seen. And don't let assholes like bleeding willow or whoever that was get to you, cus honestly this story pwns. WRITE MORE NOW PLEASE!
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November 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
finish this story ;.;
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August 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wo0t Wo0t!!! OMG I love this story. Leon is my fav char, he's so sexy in the game and in this story. I can't wait to see what Mathias does to regain him!! Put a lemon in soon, please!?!
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August 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hooooly crap, this story is awesome! I really, really, really enjoyed it. All of it. It's a perfect setup, and just..ah, I love the details! <3 So cool!
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February 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm going to have to agree with Bleeding Willow and say this lacks characterization and deals with a lot of cliches that plague fanfiction. I went into reading this with a very open mind, and was rather thrilled to have found someone writing MathiasxLeon. Unfortunately, I may have been anticipating more. I've been in the works of writing a fic dealing with a similar premise of Mathias turning Leon, and while I know everyone has their own perceptions of characters, Mathias seems very one-dimensional, while in the series he is the most multifaceted character -- with perhaps the exception of Alucard. Also, Mathias is Dracula in the series -- his name was likely derived from Mathias of Hungary, a very young king and defender of the Faith who initially gave Vlad Tepes sanctuary within his kingdom. Game developers really didn't give the series much direction or true storyline until Symphony of the Night, and I've always found it almost sympathetic to Dracula.
But I digress. You've basically taken characters that had a strong foundation in the game and altered them to suit your story, and while that's not entirely a bad thing, they really don't bear much semblance to the characters. Leon is an area where most people fail, especially when it comes to yaoi. Because he is blonde, attractive, and obviously tormented by what happened to Sara and Mathias' betrayal, most writers automatically fall into the seme/uke concept and write Leon as this submissive, abused uke -- same thing happens to Joachim all the time in fics. Leon is emotionally and physically stronger than Mathias. While Mathias may have been the intellectual, reserved one, the death of Elisabetha broke him whereas Leon willed himself to continue after the death of Sara.
And then there's Joachim. Someone who in the game was arrogant, haughty, and bent on revenge and power. And so suddenly, he's loving and affectionate and all the things he was not in the game -- it should be noted that Joachim likely died in the game, though I have friends who will argue Joachim is Orlox.
Also, I kept reading about how the Church objected to their relationship. During Medieval times same sex relationships were more or less overlooked by the Church. It wasn't until after the Crusades that the Church forced homosexuality underground -- the first records of Robin of Locksley there was no Maid Marian due to the fact that he preferred his Merry Men to women. It was later revised due to homosexuality becoming illegal in Europe.
It digresses into this cliche' fic about the poor abused uke, and the abusive seme, and the protector. I believe you are capable of writing better.
I've noticed that you've stopped updating. My suggestion would be to rethink this fic and revise it. I'm sure that you could win back the favour of even those who didn't enjoy this on the first read.
But I digress. You've basically taken characters that had a strong foundation in the game and altered them to suit your story, and while that's not entirely a bad thing, they really don't bear much semblance to the characters. Leon is an area where most people fail, especially when it comes to yaoi. Because he is blonde, attractive, and obviously tormented by what happened to Sara and Mathias' betrayal, most writers automatically fall into the seme/uke concept and write Leon as this submissive, abused uke -- same thing happens to Joachim all the time in fics. Leon is emotionally and physically stronger than Mathias. While Mathias may have been the intellectual, reserved one, the death of Elisabetha broke him whereas Leon willed himself to continue after the death of Sara.
And then there's Joachim. Someone who in the game was arrogant, haughty, and bent on revenge and power. And so suddenly, he's loving and affectionate and all the things he was not in the game -- it should be noted that Joachim likely died in the game, though I have friends who will argue Joachim is Orlox.
Also, I kept reading about how the Church objected to their relationship. During Medieval times same sex relationships were more or less overlooked by the Church. It wasn't until after the Crusades that the Church forced homosexuality underground -- the first records of Robin of Locksley there was no Maid Marian due to the fact that he preferred his Merry Men to women. It was later revised due to homosexuality becoming illegal in Europe.
It digresses into this cliche' fic about the poor abused uke, and the abusive seme, and the protector. I believe you are capable of writing better.
I've noticed that you've stopped updating. My suggestion would be to rethink this fic and revise it. I'm sure that you could win back the favour of even those who didn't enjoy this on the first read.