rate_review Reviews

This story is a peice of shit. The dialouge sucks, the set up sucks, and the whole scenario sucks. Go die somewhere, dick-wad.

If you don't care about writing at all, your story's fine. I know people who really, really don't give a shit about if they wrote something well, they just want to write it to get it out, toss it out there and move on with their lives.

If you DO care, you need a lot of improvement from this story. It's nothing more than a bashfest trying to pass itself off as creative writing. There is no understanding of the characters, no understanding of what people would actually do, no build-up, no restraint, just layer after layer of bashing. It can pass in the comments made by people, but when a negative remark like 'muddy whore' gets tossed around like it's a fact, and it's not blatantly true (it's not a character who actually DOES go around fucking random men, only an insult for a character you don't like), you've failed. The instant that the author's views leak into the story in a glaringly obvious way where you can't possibly ignore the injection of opinion that forces itself on the audience, the entire story crumbles into nothing.

Damn what did she do to you??? Kinda harsh on the poor girl dontcha think?

Damn, you really hate Shana. I liked the other bow chic they replaced her with better, although she was essential about as useful.

To all you Shana haters, GO TO FUCKING HELL. AND WHEN YOU GET THERE, BE SURE TO SAY HIGH TO RAZIEL FROM LEGACY OF KAIN SOUL REAVER AS HE SUCKS OUT PITIFUL LITTLE SOULS AND THROWS THE REST OF YOUR REMAINS INTO KAIN'S ABYSS YOU LITLLE COCK SUCKING MAGGOT FACED BASTARDS. IF ZOMBIES EVER TAKE OVER THE WORLD, II HOPE THEY BITE OFF YOUR FACES, RIP YOU IN HALF, PULL OUT YOUR INTESTINES, PULL YOUR PUNY LITTLE HEADS OF, TEAR YOU LIMB FROM LIMB , AND TAKE TURNS FUCKING YOU IN THE ASS(lthough you would probably enjoy that because you all Must be GAY not to think Shana was the cutest character ever) AND TO THE RIGHTER OF THIS STORY, I HOPE MELBU FRAMA PULLS YOU INTO THE GAME THE NEXT TIME YOU PLAY IT AND RUNS A DILDO UP YOUR ASS SO BIG IT GOES THROUGH YOUR SKULL, PUSHING OUT ALL THE GUTS IN BETWEEN THE TWO HOLES. AND I HOPE HE DOES VEEERRRYYY SSSLLLOOOWWWLLLYYY. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

I'm sorry but what the fuck man! real or not, no woman deserves that! FUCK!!!!!

Dude, even if you hate a char, MAKE THE DAMN HATE STORY ACTUALLY GOOD AND WORTH READING! Kill her, yeah. Do whatever HORRIBLE crap you wish, but actually take some time on it! You're a disgrace to hate writers everywhere, so go burn in hell, you untalented shit.

Now THAT! Was AWESOME! That lousy bitch had it coming!

Seriously. I mean, Shana sucks. Badly. She badly sucks. Whine whine whine, that's all she's really good for. And Dart's a dumb shit for liking her. I so wanted her to die like Aeris...

i hate shana too, and miranda as a replacement isn't much better, she deserved what happened in this fic, but, i would of liked it better if it had been albert who raped her, or, all the males on the team, for her being such a whineing bitch