rate_review Reviews

loved it. I know the doujinshi you're talking about and I loved the Doctor who refference.

nice matrix refferrence

Why stop the story seems good

Great story! While many have played with the idea of Tails being a girl, you have done the best job I've seen! Nice love scenes and good writing. Is that supposed to be alternate dimension Sonic?

Let me guess the child is going to be a certain white hedghoge that was let go in sonic X?

my first post on the woking aff
cool idea

Here's a warning: I'm gonna try to do this without flamming you. Or cursing. Dunno about the latter though.

Let me begin by saying the story isn't exactly bad. I mean, it's got a nice core plot, with Tails actually being a girl and such. But to be honest, it's one of those moments were I couldn't help but wonder how this story would have turned out if it had been written better or by a different fanfiction writer. 1. You're story moves way too fast a lot. Sometimes this isn't bad but it makes your story seem quite unbelievable. (Like Amy and Sonic's conversation about her giving up on him. I couldn't help but groan by the end of it all.) 2. You're characters seem out of character as well. You should try shaping your story around the characters personality so that it still works yet it doesn't deminish the character instead of bending the character to fit into your story. 3. You need to include more detail in your writing. This goes back to the pace of the story being too fast, but you really should consider adding more information into your story so that readers can get it/understand it better. Because Sonic and Tails being in love with each other in under five seconds (without any real reflection or thought to it) was simply fuckin horribly done. And I'm not going to bring up that whole bullshit about Amy and Sonic. Though while I did groan, man did I laugh my head off.

Like I said, it isn't so much a bad story. Just a story with lots of potiental that's going no where because of shabby writing. No offense. You're inspired by Harley so much? Re-read the work done by said author and this time, make some good notes instead of just trying to make a rather shallow copy of her/him/it's fanfictions.

I like your story alot. A I do see Tails more as a girl. I hope you write the next chapter soon.

I love all the trasngender stuff.... I'd love to see Tails as a Herm doing Sonic as a Male... or Tails as a Herm doing Sonic as a herm... or any kind of Tails/Shadow. You rock!

Great second chapter. Although I'd like to know how big he was exactly.(I've seen people say that 6 inches is big, not huge but still I mean its average) So could you review it to me or add it in? I know some people don't like to do that though.