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I actually really like this story -- the dialogue is wonderfully done and the story itself is different and intrigueing. I do hope you continue!

Please Updatem this is a brilliant Fanfic, I love the ravial of Sora and Riku, that is very commonly forgotten by people who do KH Yoai!

WHAT THE FUCK?! DID YOU SAY "FIGURE SKATER"?! I KNOW THIS IS YAOI BUT GOD DAMN THAT IS GAAAY! NO PUN INTENDED!

curious george plays hocky... i would have loved to see riku's face after getting that this story is too cute please continue !

*sighs* If I didn't know what I was talking about I would not have said anything. Anywho , I have to say this next installment was the best of all. You're getting better with the characters. However you still need a beta because as one person pointed out in review , you just need a little work.

I offered and you said you wouldn't mind me being your beta so when ever you type up a new chapter just send it to my email and I'll work on it and half it done as soon as I can.

I have my own works to show you my level of skill so you can look at them if you don't think I can be a good beta.

Great job this time, you're starting to get the hang of writing a decent fiction and with just a little more work it can become one of the more well known ones.

See you next update

M.D

This could be a good fic but there are several things standing in the way... First of all, your spelling is awful. You should really get a spell check. I'm sure all those red underlinings, or whatever the program uses, would give you some idea about the state of your linguistic skills... Second major problem is your characterizations. They are terribly stereotypical and juvenile at that. I had to read all the way to chapter five to get the first inkling of depth and originality. Thirdly, now that the winter sports are starting again, I recommend you try watching some figure skating from tv with commentary, because judging from your terminology and descriptions, or more specifically, the lack thereof, you don't really seem to be into the sport at all. And finally, stop thinking that your readers are twelve, tops. You don't have to hold our hands and explain every turn of events with a calm and patient voice while holding our hands.
This fic has a nice, unique storyline with a classic plot but you really need a strong beta who dares to give you a good slap upside the head when you need it.

Love it!! once again your writing skills astonish me!! Keep up this story please!!
Lex

oh and this M.D SORA person doesnt know what shes talking about!! its perfect the way it is!!! and if you siad Something after someone spoke EVERY time, ID go crazy!! dont listen tah her, keep up the great work.!!
Lex

OMG! u have to update like now!!!!!!

i love this fic, ive never seen a better idea/plot your truly gifted in writing!!! thank you sooo much! illl keep in touch with the chpt. lol ive already saved it to my favorites.

Lex