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Honestly, I like chapters 1 - 4, but 5 I just didn't like. Although my favourite would have to be chapter 2, That one was the best! Can you do more like the one with chapter 2? That one is just awesome!

Ive read all of your chapters, and I have to say, this is some awesome lemon. My favorite one has to be Chapter 2...but awesome job.

Hey, this is actually pretty good! I love the scenes..............

Is there by any chance a way you can make a Kratos/Raine lemon?

NOICE! An excellent ToS fic. Hats off, kudos, and all that stuff! Right on!

Great story you have here, but... Well, first off, let me say that this is very well written and descriptive. It was very good and I'll read the other chapters soon. But I did have one problem with it...

Hypnotising someone and then having sex with them is rape. Because regardless of whether or not the person would have said yes to sex while conscious, they didn't give consent so that constitutes as rape. Same as if you have sex with someone who is passes out from drinking too much.

So if you could just give a warning that your story has some N/C in it, that'd be great. But other than that, excellent story. I'll go read your other chapters now!

sweet

Hmmm... fixed the formating of the story, and working on Chapter 2. And damn do I have an idea for that one....

This looks really good, and I really want to read this, but you seem to have a formatting problem. I could only get past the first paragraph before I could take no more. You need to start a new paragraph everytime someone new starts speaking.

Ex:
"Hey," greeted Person A.
"Hello," responded Person B.

It makes everything much easier to read. But this looks really interesting, I'd love to read it once you fix you formatting. :-)

First of all I'd like to say Thank you for taking my challenge. Second of all, I love your fic. Very well written, very well structured and very entertaining. Keep up the good work!